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Samey90


"I'm starting to believe you don't have a heart." – some author, after a review of his fic.


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The cider. Something many ponies love and would do anything to put their hooves on it. When three well-known cider lovers team up to get to the whole barn of it, nothing can stop them.

Well, almost nothing.
Reading by Rennoc215
Russian translation by FoxcubRandy

Rated Teen/Sex for innuendos. Mostly.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 22 )

Nice little story.

Brilliant. From the beggining to the end. :rainbowlaugh:

You have a way with words. This is comedic gold my friend. :rainbowlaugh:

I swear I kept on expecting them to get drunk and have a bigger reason for the Sex warning to be on.

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Thanks :pinkiehappy:

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Don't give me ideas :rainbowlaugh:

I see a few minor grammatical errors here and there. I shall present them in reverse order to make it scan better:

"Hmm, I don't know how about Berry, but sitting in the closet is not your thing, Bonnie..."

Extra 'how' here.

“That sounded like an unicorn hitting the ground, don’t you think?” Berry asked.

While 'an' is appropriate right before a vowel sound, the u in 'unicorn' is palatalized like the semivowel 'y', so the correct form is 'a unicorn' not 'an unicorn.'

“If you don’t stop staring at my flank, you’re gonna land down there with my the trace of my horseshoe imprinted on your face…”

Left an extra 'my' here.

“Because, as she put it, ‘you’re a bag of bones with a 100 Watt light bulb attached to the forehead and she has huge earth pony’s flanks’. Relax, it’s only few more inches…”

There should be an 'a' before 'bag', 'flank' should be plural, and 'pony's' doesn't need to be possessive.

Beyond that, this 'twas an entertaining story. Cider's on me! :pinkiecrazy:

Ew AppleDash.

Upboated.

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Thanks, it's fixed now :twilightsmile:

Not bad, Samey. I laughed the whole way through. Dirty mind went into overdrive.

That was great. I loved all the banter and whatnot. A fun story.

Well, it's been forever, but I finally got a nice, quiet period of time to myself. I decided that I really needed to get back to you all, so here you go!

I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed your story. Take this bonus thumb and star with the vid! :twilightsmile:

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Hmm, I forgot about that too... Thanks :pinkiehappy:

*Grins* Nicely done. Bravo.

This is probably one of the funnest takes I've seen with this cast of characters. Delightful takes on their personalities. Well earned up and fav :rainbowlaugh:

Now this was one funny little story!

“Please excuse the crudity of this model as I didn't have time to build it to scale or paint it.”

Huzzah! Back to the Future reference!

6187946 Knew I'd heard that phrase before somewhere.

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