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Rainbow Dash is tired after the competition at Rainbow Falls, and decides to take a nap.

Ditzy Doo is left temporarily jobless after her vouch to become RD's replacement leads to the Cloudsdale Mail Service to become flooded with fan-mail.

What do these two events have in common? Motor boating, of course!

Now with a YouTube reading! :pinkiehappy:

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Comments ( 62 )

it's beautiful

So... Lrya just got a mouthfull of BonBon butt?

The amounts of yes release at the story as I came!

dat cover image

What in the name of... what?

This is madness! :rainbowlaugh:

I have no words.

That cover image is so hilarious! :rainbowlaugh: Not really sure how it passed moderation, it's REALLY skirting the rules about cover images, but right now I'm laughing too hard to care.

Comment posted by Mr Grimdark deleted Jan 22nd, 2014

How the hell is that pic not used for a mature story?

lol, grade A Comedy in a quick attack package.

Happy 200 followers!
I'ma do a reading of this to celebrate.
It's been too long since I've done a reading.
Is it okay if I do a reading?

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Do eet, filly! :rainbowkiss:

I'd also be really really happy if you did that.

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I ain't no filly!
And I just finished. I've got to edit it and stuff, but it should be out tomorrow. With my new story, actually.

I was looking around for that image:pinkiehappy:

:derpytongue2::heart::rainbowderp:tush.
I needed a good laugh. This hit the spot, so thanks for writing it. Upvote from me.

“You hypocrite, you’re no better than she is sometimes!”, BonBon chided to Lyra with a shout, planting flowers in her garden.

The emboldened comma is superfluous. Also, The second b in "Bonbon" should be lowercase or there should be a space between the Bons.

BonBon rolled her eyes and resumed her gardening of the pair’s house, bending over to tend to the dirt with a shovel.

The second b should be lowercase, or there should a space between the Bons.

Lyra was caught on by BonBon’s flank, swaying side to side as she moved from soil patch to soil patch. Lyra looked back towards the book, and then looked back again at BonBon.

The second b's should be lowercase, or there should spaces between the Bons.

“Sometimes I willingly get myself into trouble though.”

There should be a comma between "trouble" and "though."

This was a cute little tale, it is not very often you see a Dershie? story. I will favorite and upvote.

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Thank you thank you! I'll fix it right away! :pinkiehappy:

Yuss.

Alllll my yuss. :rainbowlaugh:

Thought I left my Mature tag on, so I checked and found that it was off...

You sly dog :moustache:

HAhahaHAAAAAAAAAA! :rainbowlaugh:

Um...

Well.

Ok then.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

This....

I have no more to say.

Finally someone who enjoys the bearer of the element of sincerity and lyrabon

That is one move I need to try on my GF :pinkiehappy:

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Basically, yes.
Also 9 is best Doctor.

I liked it this was funny. BUT When Derpy is looking for Rainbow Dash you could do with replacing Ditzy Doo with the word she and her. Her name is used 21 times and It would flow better is some of them were replaces with "Her or she" or something.

Its still a good read though :pinkiehappy:

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That was actually done on purpose. The 2nd section of the story is supposed to mimic a rather simple narrative mindset, like speaking to a kindergartner. :twilightsmile:

That cover image is better than life itself.

i could totally see someone use this as the basis for a romance story between derpy and rainbow. possibly a mature rated story, if that's the kind of writing the writer writes.

Goddamnit Smiles! You've gone and made me happy, now my day is ruined.:twilightangry2:
:trollestia:

Party in slow motion, I'm out here in the open... mmmmm... motor boatin' :derpytongue2:

Derpy, Check!
Motorboating, Check!
Lyra with her human obsession, Check.
More moterboating? Perfect! :rainbowkiss:

I love this fic and you smiles. This really did give me a small smile but it won't last long. I'm more determined then anything really. Why you ask? :unsuresweetie:

[12:10:03 AM] Shutterguy: Dang it smiles!

I have him on skype and I talk to him regularly so I know you must be in one of the skype chats I'm in. :trixieshiftleft: I must make sure your added and give you a hug. :pinkiehappy:

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Maybe it passed because we all know...
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So technically, anywhere should be fair-game for blowing a raspberry aside from what may get inferred from between the reader's ears based on real-world experience or other sources.


Never change Derpy...never change.

Surprise Buttsecks!

Is this supposed to not have any pronouns?

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