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The Conflicted Writer


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*Just in case the cover picture didn't give it away, this is a babyfur story. If you don't like snuggles and ponies acting like foals, then please, click back.*

Twilight and Rarity go to a rather... interesting spa. They both come back refreshed, though.

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Yay Randomness

Glad to see it here! The livestreams were also always fun to be in on. You have a really good story and I'm glad to see it come together!

Yay, another story by Conflicted! :pinkiehappy:

Man that was really adorable, made me smile. Above all I really quite enjoyed Twilight's little freakout over placing blocks in the wrong bin. Really helped characterize her. All in all great job.

I would like to see a 1st-grade fluttershy ( since she's the oldest) in one of these.

I love this story, fav'd. :twilightsmile:

really love the diaper fics you wright :twilightsmile:

That was fun, and does that book mean that this takes place in the same verse as Twilight's Nightmare?

As someone who can greatly relate to Twilight I can say this story was quite nice and made me smile for the rest of the day. I really enjoyed it. From the misunderstanding to them finally getting down and especially a few friends being open enough to join on the fun. This story was fantastic. Thanks.

Quite the enjoyable story, but by any chance could the French be signified somehow other than it being in French so I can know what they are saying?

Nicely done :twilightsmile:

Best adult-foal story EVER! :pinkiehappy:

Even the cover pic made me lol. :rainbowlaugh: And I just about wet myself when Twilight realized that Rarity had ordered the "Deluxe Package"... hahahahha! :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

Most importantly, though, it didn't get too weird... You know, like some stories have ponies/people instantly regressing permanently, or have abusive (spanking/humilation/BDSM-prone) caregivers paired up with foals who instantly take to it. In other words, this didn't seem like an obvious vehicle for an overly-unrealistic fantasy. More of an amusing slice-of-life-in-equestria that ended up revealing something more of Twili's psyche... and of all the Mane 6, I think Twilight was your best choice to enjoy the 'spa treatment' offered. :twilightblush:

I really like this. It is the first foal regression that I read that I really enjoyed.

Cute and hilarious.

But two complaints:

1.) Bear in mind that not all your readers are multilingual. Translations of foreign words may make it easier for readers to understand.

2.)

flamboyant navy generals.

- My stickler side for military accuracy is coming out but the navy equivalent for general is "admiral".


I also found it hilarious that Twi revealed to Celestia that she got diaper rash!

hmmmm... weird :pinkiecrazy: ,but quite enjoyable :twilightsmile:

!YAY! ITS HERE! ITS HERE! I read this Story before and must say I'm happy to see it now here, too.

But I must say It's a bit annoying for me to switch from the reading to a translater-site for the french part :raritywink:

I hope you or another one will make a chapter (or more) for the other element bearers, when they found this place.

You know Twilight would never be rude or any thing cos I think she was a bit rude at the beginning part........:applejackunsure:

Kind of long but really enjoyable. I should've known Rarity didn't know what she was dragging herself and Twilight into. :pinkiesmile:

If it isn't too much to ask perhaps at some point you could do another one of these with some other mane six members or even background ponies? I know you must have a lot on your plate already. :trixieshiftright:

I actually liked the bits with French also. While I understand some very basic French I couldn't understand what they were saying. It helped to put us in the mindset of the characters. Twi's Nounou could speak mostly English and therefore Twi could communicate with her (the standard package). Rarity on the other hoof couldn't neither understand nor communicate with her caregivers, like a real infant. The bilingual part in the story is there to help us feel as infantile as Rare and Twi.

.. I mean... If that alright with you? :fluttershysad:

3211988 Google translate dude the internet is a magical place

I wish this spa was real... :ajsleepy:

This story was awesome, great and funny mements with both rarity and twilight, the french was a great touch, and seeing twilight grow to like the treatment was a very sweet experience. However my only complaint is WHY DOES THIS PLACE NOT EXIST IN THE CANON UNIVERSE YET!?!?

Yeah I'm taking french... And I'll have to come back to this!
I loved it, it was so adorable! :rainbowkiss:

Twilight should have reccommended the place to Celestia. Have Tia and Lulu spend some time there.

Well, this truly was one mighty random piece. :ajbemused:
Can't say I didn't like it. Nay, I had some good laugh, and also it awoked some memories from my life.
Pleasant ones.
I would rather state, agreeing with everyone, that the French touch is quite... neat in here. Bloody Hell, it makes the voice in my mind reading it practically coo out every single phrase of the caretakers. Even taking into the account my terrible knowledge of French - just a tops - I have somehow managed through.

Thank you, dear author. This is not just one great piece of writing, this is also a very intimate and specific reminder for everyone who had ever nursed a brother or sister. You have my respect and my fav. :twilightsmile:

3214871 Come on it's not rocket science, why do you think such a thing wouldn't be allowed to exist in the show? Use your head. :facehoof:

3215491 I smell sequel!:scootangel:

Princess Rarity might want to think twice before angering her Prench subjects. They tend to take their revolutions seriously and it never ends well for the ruler. :twilightoops:

I found this really enjoyable. My only complaint is that this piece of dialogue didn't really make that much sense to me:

“And the last fifteen times she gave you more than a month to complete your homework?”
“... Giving the test more than once?”

But other than that, I really enjoyed this. I hope you make this into a series. I look forward to reading more of your work. Any chance we can get a story like this between Spike and Twilight or the CMC and their respective sisters? That would be interesting.

Eee! Omygosh I loved this story! Please oh please do some more like this?:heart:

oh lala I loved it. I was smiling the entire time. Never read a story about a spa and it flowed so well. If only there were real spas like that. And I loved the letter to Celestia and the p.s. part lol.:twilightsmile:

Absolutely loved it. It flowed nicely, characters worked and did i mention it flowed great? p.s i also enjoyed put it through google translate, very funny. Not to mention you practically taught me french while doing it.

3217026 I dont think thats a sequel you smell :trollestia:

3216777 I cant, it was destroyed by the cuteness of this story.

As someone who is fluent in french(it being my first language and all) I must point out to those who aren't that the french in this story is just as mangled as the english spoken by the spa ponies, if not more.
Just a fair warning to those who would take this, pass it through google translate and expect it to be a helpful lesson in french in any capacity.

Edit: Oh yeah, definitely mangled beyond recognition. It's basically gibberish. I imagine it consists of english phrases passed through G-translate with no other alteration. I suppose putting it back in there in reverse would produce coherent enough english for the purposes of basic comprehension, but it's definitely far from even-barely-decent french.

Still, that was a cute, fun little story.

so cute!:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

3220143
Oh, believe me, I know. >.< I wish I had someone that knew french, but I only knew someone who understood enough to tell me if some other word worked better. I hope you enjoyed it for what it was worth, I did my best. :P

3220894
Eh, it was okay. Knowing the words and the way a cold, dumb machine would translate them allowed me to piece together their english equivalents in my head, which proved almost easier to understand. It was a bit of a strain on the ol' thinkpan, though.

I guess that's what I get for being too languaged... Ignorance is bliss, as they say.

3219494 First off they've never used Prench in the show. And second and more importantly despite how well this was presented this kind of subject matter could very well rub the overprotective soccer moms the wrong way. Think Derpygate only ten times worse. :twilightoops:

As many have already stated, the Prench was a very nice touch (took me a while to get the pun though) but I do think there should be a bonus chapter which adds translations for it, as it does get rather annoying to translate it all. Just adding in translations to the one chapter, however, would kind of ruin some of the effect it initially had on me. Usually, I can let a story go when it's done and be fine. But this is a unique concept that worked surprisingly well! I don't think it should be a "one time thing" personally. One of the things that kept me wondering was the spas history, how they got their cutie marks/grew up in prance, or maybe another pony stops by? All in all, excellent work, I had fun reading it, and (hope) we will see more of this.

there should be a sequel to this, i enjoyed it very much

Quite an intriguing little tale.

Still I can't believe a spa like that doesn't exist in reality, I feel sad now:applecry:

Well, this was the cutest thing I've read in a while. Everypony was in character, or so I felt and behaved quite naturally. I did like the transition with Rarity, especially, but Twilight's arc here is a pretty interesting one, too. Not only that, but the way you write made me smile through the whole thing. That means you have good writing skills, sir, or lady. :duck:

The concept of this kind of spa is something I can see in Equestria, too. It just fits the overall atmosphere that the show has, in my opinion at least, and I'd genuinely like a story going into detail about the inner workings of such a facility.

Anyway, have a fav and keep on being awesome. :pinkiesmile:

Wait a sec... Was that book at the end an allusion to a future story?

Conflicted Writer does it again!!!:yay:

Now if only Pinkie Dinky Pie would update! :flutterrage::pinkiesad2:

wow , wasn't able to finish reading , got more than half way through i think , but this story kinda does everything right in terms of well padded ponies i guess , cause it doesn't really fit into the traditional ad/bl categories.....

3262269 I agree entirely :pinkiehappy: I really enjoy the genuine writing style he uses, but I'd love to have a sequel to his story about Pinkie Pie :twilightblush:

Make more of these fanfics only with other ponies

Like Fluttershy & Rainbow Dash for example

Ah haha! Oh~ I was grinning from ear to ear from the very beginning. Pinkie's foreshadowing was wonderfully silly. I love the bath-salt “trap” that keeps them enjoying their stay. Rarity's reaction was just so... in character. X3 I'm glad Twilight learned to relax tough. It was a really cute story. By the way, I found a typo: “He ears twitched as she heard Twilight laugh,”, I think you meant “her”.

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