Sure, maybe the world as we know it is coming to an end. That's really no cause for alarm, now, is it?
Just accept it. We were all gonna die sometime. It may as well be today.
And since it's today, we may as well use our remaining energy to tell each other how we really feel.
This should be delightful.
Inspired by the song 'How Far We've Come'
Teen for language and alcoholic references.
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As much as I want to upvote this story for it's setting I've gotta stay neutral. The idea of the world coming to an end, I liked it. I liked seeing their interactions as everything was coming undone.
But the ending...sorry dude, it seemed like a cheap ploy hastily thought up for an ending.
Not half bad. Luna wasn't exactly in character, and Twilight seemed overwhelmingly hostile at times. But the story itself was quite good. I would like some more detail when Twilight inadvertently told on Luna, and the ending was kind of open. But all in all, a decent idea.
One Pinkie for you.
it was fun to read
It was an awesome idea, but honestly, the portion of the story in which the mane 6 talked about their feelings seemed a little rushed. I would have liked to see each one delve into their feelings deeper, and really experience stronger emotions. From the point where twilight had her sudden epiphany about canterlot intrigue and further, felt very hastily put together. I dunno, but all in all, it was a very interesting story, and I want to read more of your future fics.
I liked it!
i kinda wanna see a sequel to this without her simply telling the town its a fake and them believing her
This merits punishment worse than death.
So, now... you take a nap.
When you wake up, you will have Cupcakes read to you out loud exactly 666 times.
...fine. Only 13 times. This is slightly better than death, I think.
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Didya catch the slap?
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Well, to be honest, I was going with a darker fic at the beginning, but it sort of became a comedy. The original ending (which involved the death of the entire mane six as well as their pets in the ruins of Twilight's library) did not fit with the new feel.
And I am not frightened of dying, any time will do, I
don't mind. Why should I be frightened of dying?
There's no reason for it, you've gotta go sometime...
That's some pretty dark stuff... and yet I was amused.
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Thank you for adding it to Twilight's library!
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You're welcome! I hope you can live with it being the "Dark" folder, though, 'cause I didn't think it was "laugh out loud" enough for comedy, and it didn't really seem to fit anywhere else.
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I don't care. Just like being recognized.
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I know that feeling.
I did notice a couple of small errors in there, but nothing to keep it out of the Library. (I think one was of the to/too variety, but I can't say for certain.) I'm sorry I didn't take notes, but you might want to give it another quick once-over when you have the chance.
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Yeah, I make stupid mistakes. The worst is missing hitting the shift when I type 'I.' And that looks really stupid.
Mixed feelings about this story...
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Would ya like to... share them?
3100458 Oh, right, sorry. I feel happy that it was back to normal for a moment
. Although, I'm sad that it kinda looks like they have to go through it again. Plus I don't normally read these kinda fics, but it was amazing. A good read.
I liked the Royal Rumble, just crazy! keep it up!
So is there going to be a sequel
Moar
Good concept ruined by forced shipping, a forced ending and one of the biggest bits of character murder I've ever seen in letter form. Also editing issues at pivotal scenes and Flashlight even being acknowledged, let alone supported. 3/10.
Equestria's neighbors would lose all awe and respect if they saw its three rulers having a scratchfest...
I think that this story is post season 3, pre season 4
literally
While things could be(and justifiably)considered OoC, I found it enjoyable. The shipping in some cases dragged it down. And that ending... I hate endings like that. Everything is back to normal? Bull.
Rarity x spike. Good.
Rainbow x Aplejack. Good.
Rest of parings. Meh.
The actual bare all hatefest... Never delivered.
Great brawl at the end. The black out is where it should have ended.
Huh.
Did you see the Equestria Girls movie?
Your story was so much like the movie I had to do a double take.
I felt that this was short and to the point, but got the job done.
But at the same time, for this to be a one shot seems rushed and things over looked.
I mean so many things could be avoided is ponies thought for once. Seriously, newest alicorn princess left to die? Sounds like a big flag to be investigated.
And the fact it was all a dream is such a cliched ending, I felt like a kick to the nuts.
Written well and presented in a good way- but making this chapter based and things more fleshed out could make this story better.
Final note: I didn't like it, but not hate it.
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It wasn't a dream. Twilight was knocked out by Luna. It happened, it was real.
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Let me ammend it then:
And the fact it was
all a dream'here we go again' is such a cliched ending, I felt like a kick to the nuts.I liked the story, but not as much as i thought i would. Still, it gets a thumb up for being well written, and a fave because i at least 'semi-liked' it.
What irked me the most about the story was the cop-out right at the end. Skipping what happens to Luna because Twilight 'blacked out' after a solitary punch? She was just in a fight and didn't show any signs of a concussion or starting to lose consciousness before then. That part had the potential to be some great development in the story, and an actually justified chance to show some righteously pissed off Celestia.
Edit - Changed 'because she 'blacked out'' to 'because Twilight 'blacked out''. Friggin sentence changes.
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No, no. Twilight blacked out because Luna was angry and punched her one last time.
Luna was upset because, up until then, Celestia didn't know anything about her 'experiment.'
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Right, just before posting that, i had messed with the sentence, and forgot to look it over and make sure it looks right. Apparently, i mistook 'she' as '<implied> Twilight'. I also changed the original post to be correct.
My point still stands, all three are very much conscious at the end of their fight, and one last strike knocks Twilight completely out? Luna must've put a lot more force behind that strike than any previous one.
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I see. A lot of people had the same problem. I am thinking of doing a re-telling, using my original plan for an ending and adding a bit more discussion in the middle.
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Hey, i liked the story in the first place, if you do re-tell it, i'd read that too!
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Okay!
It'd be an entirely different feel, though. More sad and dark than funny and light-hearted.
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Some of my top ten favorites are more dark than anything, so it won't stop me any.
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Sounds good!
Starting it now, actually.
This Fic was just crazy enough... I only have one thing to say about it...
Keep Calm and HAIL SITHIS >:C
I've read many fanfics on this site.
This is one of them.
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Erm... good?
i laughed and was very confused but all in all it was AWSOME
rarity sure loves ice cream tho
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It's her secret obsession.
There should totally be a story about that nuclear reaction...
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*Throws hands in the air*
I relinquish it to you, my good sir/madame!
One free review, comin' right up!
Grammar score 6.5 out of 10. There were some random capital words and some random non-capital words that should be capital. A couple sentences that could have been written better and a few misspelled words.
Pacing was done well and didn't feel rushed.
Characters were portrayed well and seemed in canon. Except for Luna, I don't really think she would have done that but somepony had to and she was the most likely suspect.
Overall score 7.5 out of 10
I really did enjoy reading about the end of the world... PONY STYLE!
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
Victoria Justice anyone?
in the yellow corner at a height of 9ft 3inches the solar goddess princess celestia of equestria
and in the black corner at a height of 6ft 5inches the princess of the night luna
and in the purple corner at a height of 4ft 2inches the princess of magic a wielder of the element of harmony princess twilight sparkle!!!
filly's and gentalcolts, dragons and griffins.....lets...... get........ ready........... tooooooooooo........... RUMBLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!