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This story is a sequel to A Novice Swordsman in the Canterlot Court


"Everyone is a moon, and has a dark side which he never shows to anybody."—Mark Twain

Alan Williams Goldenhoof, Pendragon of Equestria, now married to the love of his life, has taken a step back from the world to enjoy life.

Of course, this is quickly ruined as the world comes to get him. Now Alan must leave behind his peaceful home in Equestria to face the rebel forces of his old enemy General Ironclaw. But all is not as it seems, for the General has a trick up his sleeve that will force Alan and his friends to face their darkest secrets.

This will get ugly.

Book 2 of the Harmony for All Trilogy.

Chapters (30)
Comments ( 1267 )

Ahhh, Excellent! It has arrived! Great first chapter, and I'm really looking forward to seeing more of the story :pinkiehappy:

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*sees this*
*SLAP!* YES! (high pitched-voice) FUCK YES!!!
Now I'm so happy that I could even kiss you.
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Off to a good start, although was slightly hoping it wouldn't be quite so war centric this time around. Oh well.

Quick question though, are we going to see any of their downtime before you go throwing us right into the action? The few times we got to see it in the prior story was very nice.

Ipod has achieved moderate sentience.

The first thing I thought of when I read that was I hope the Ipod saves the world.

Like it gets to the final confrontation and then all of a sudden it stats playing "Love is all you need" thus saving the world.

It seems that... you got a TrIpod in you room!


Beware! Beware! Or Tom Cruise will come and save the world!




It's a good work, keep going!

Lets get this party started! :pinkiegasp:

My man card is forfeit... I done squeed. At least there are some epic reads in the future now, thanks DM! :pinkiehappy:

Woot, my friend. Woot.

Last i remember the character was changed into a pony. So why the human tag. Unless he changes back into a human the tag should not be used.
And befor you try to argue, being human is a matter of species, not of mind.

Finally! Let's roll! :flutterrage:

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Of course they'll be down time. Alan's got to be a cool guy first before becoming a hero (again).

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Yeah, I had issues with that tag. Tell you what, I'll ask the audience in the next chap note.

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Or you could just remve it now because there are physically no human characters, which is when the tag is supposed to be used as explained by the FAQ.
Like i said, unless he changes back into a human the tag should not be used.

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And someone thinks otherwise enough to downvote your comment. I want to please the majority here, let me ask, and then we'll see.

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That is the thing though. The person who down voted is either someone who is really a fan that hates negative comments of any type, someone who can't face the fact that once a character is ponified they are no longer human, or both. Just because the majority think the wrong thing is right it does not make it so.
My biased aside the human tag should not be used based on the tagging rules. No physically human characters mean no human tag.
So please, just remove the tag. The only thing it is doing is giving false advertisement.

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Or maybe not. Maybe they have a valid point. Maybe they do, maybe they don't that's why I'll let my readership decide. That's my final word on the subject.

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Okay then. I will just report you for using incorect tags, which is apparently a valid thing to report a story for.

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Dick move, dude. Dick move. Fine.

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Sorry. But rules are rules.
You can block me if you want to. I won't hold it against you.

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Yes, rules are rules, but this was kinda a grey area, one that I struggled with for hours before coming to my decision. I was going to give both sides a chance here, but...

Just enjoy the story.

*hugs DM* thank you for this blessing upon this world i was hopeful for this in a few weeks but you just completely surprised me by popping this out now.
i came on fimfic and noticed this... about 5 seconds later i would have passed out if not for the fact that i recently woke up, keep up the good work.
As far as the human tag i don't see a problem with it because of the fact that he WAS human. while he may not be human at all in this story the fact of the matter is that his mind still functions at least partially like a humans.
again *hugs DM*

2946940It is not really a gray area. Being human is pretty much a matter of physical species. Some could argue that it is about the mind, but that is more an outcome of environment, and brain chemistry.
Change a human into a pony, and you change the brain chemistry. That is actually kinda shown in the previous story, in the chapter after he was change against his will, when exclaimed how good grass was. Not to mention that even before he was changed he was still integrating into the environment around him. So his 'human mind' was slowly going away anyway.

If it makes you feel better I didn't report you. I couldn't do it in good conscience.
So i guess just do what you want. I won't bother you anymore. I will just swallow my annoyance

Good luck with all of your endeavors.

..........Shut up and take my mustaches! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Comment posted by The Lonesome Sniper deleted Jul 27th, 2013

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Nobody really important. Just a reader with strong feelings about certain things. Why?
By the way, read further.

First off, good to see the sequel out so soon! (I don't have any issues with the ending and I'd have to see the comments to know whats up, but its your story and all that!)

Also:

“Well, it is an Apple product...”

:pinkiehappy: Totally made me laugh here.

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So... I have a bit of an issue with this statement... Mainly because you tried to validate your point with "rules" that don't exist (the FAQ does not list the proper conditions for the HUMAN tag, and thus we are left to use our best judgement). Now, I don't have a problem with you voicing your opinion, but do try to keep things in perspective. It is just that, opinion. There are no rules concerning the human tag (although there probably should be something added in the FimFiction FAQ guide). If you want to refute this statement please show proof of such. The Tag guidelines for FimFiction can be found here: http://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide#Tags

My own opinion is that a human is what you make them out to be. If that means that you have your character originate from earth then keep the tag after dramatic changes to their body, I think that's a valid application of that tag.

PS - Not going to turn this into a comment war, so I won't be responding to this part of the comment. Just putting that out there for everyone.

This has just made my week :pinkiehappy:, I'm looking forward to the rest :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

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The human tag is not mentioned there. They shou'd update that.
Anyway, my statement comes from the faq, which does say when tags should be used.

Anyway, I gavevmy poinsvin other comments. And justblike every other argument like this that i have seen we will just have to agree to disagree.

it so good for a first chapter I shall sing you a song
cept I cant record myself singing so instead lemme pull it out of youtube

yes its spanish
LEAVE ME ALONE!

Can we please stop fighting about the human tag? All ponies have the same sentience as humans, Al is a pony but was raised a human, and Al has a pony body assisted by mana-construct humanoid hands. Trying to decide on the human tag is like trying to classify a piano.

So just shut up.

Ah! I've been looking forward to this! Though, I'm surprised it came so early. Not that that's a problem, though!:twilightblush:

Just... No balefire bombs, okay? I still have flashbacks to Fallout: Equestria... The good kind mind you, but still.

Still, that would be totally awesome, in a bad way.

Alan stood above the smoldering craters, one hoof cupping a golden ear-ring.
"I have become death, destroyer of worlds..." He muttered. His insides felt cold, as if a hand of ice had clutched him.

Behind him stood a black, almost unbelievably gaunt Alicorn. It rolled it's eyes and mumbled, "Not cool Pendragon, that's my line."

Damm son, this is good and it's already of to a roaring start.

Alan Williams Goldenhoof, Pendragon of Equestria, now married to the love of his life, has taken a step back from the world to enjoy life. Of course, this is quickly ruined as the world comes to get him. Now Alan must stand by his friends and family to face an enemy from the past. Join them as they travel to the far reaches of the world to face their darkest fears and deepest secrets. This will get ugly.

Dark secrets? An enemy from the past? Far reaches of the world!? Extra points if you use the words "roller coaster", "action-packed adventure", or "(blank) was just an ordinary guy until..." You say he must stand with his friends and family as though he would not ordinarily. Its kind of a poor description, and tells me nothing about the story you're writing, other than the fact that its a sequel. "This guy was happy until a bad guy came, now he's rounding up his buddies to fight the bad guy." I know you don't want to give the story away, but you need to tell us SOMETHING. You wouldn't buy a novel with such a vague blurb on the back. Perhaps something more concise, like:


Alan is the Pendragon of Equestria, happily married, and settling down to enjoy peacetime. Then (blank enemy) and (this event) come for him. Etc., etc.

Give us 3-5 sentences that really SAY what this story is about.

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Fair enough. Nice to meet you, by the way. Yeah, I had a little trouble with the short description for this one, the last one was better.

2947498 You too, you do good stuff! :pinkiehappy:
(which I why I kind'a pounced on you about the description, sorry, haha...)

Well credit where credit is due, clever way to create dissent amongst Griffon kind to launch a coup, his plan for Equestria not so much, apply brute force, that will work...

But there is a flaw in his initial plan as well, may I welcome back to Equestria, the Windigo! :pinkiecrazy:

They don't know it, but winter is coming... whether literally or figuratively I do not yet know...

It's Here!
It's Here!
It's Fina-lilly Here!

Alan smirked. “Well, it is an Apple product...”

Yeap, we all need to be very afraid. After all, Apple was the one to create SkyNET. :trollestia:

First, a little question.
You seem to use word "magick" instead of just "magic". Is there a reason why or is it how the pronunciation is somewhere?
I do know that "magick" is the older way to pronounce the word, is this the reason?

Second, I always love these happier chapters. Because it means that shit's going down soon.

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Dude, what the fuck? I was going to support your original statement about the tag but you just ended up making yourself a butthurt douche (oh dear... I called you by names. Fun fact, that's exactly what you did become) Come on!
btw I'm on writers side only because ^ that ^...
Yeah.

Fucking... stupid arguments.

This went really well. Quick start, quick to post, quick to read (for me, at least.) Huzzah!

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I believe I explained it once in ANS, but that was a while ago.

Magic is the art of the arcane.
and, as far as my headcanon is concerned,
Magick is the physical manifestation of the arcane.

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