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Featured on 5/19/2013
Princess Twilight has taken her place as the newest member of the royal family. After some time Discord becomes Twilights personal advisor and they are driving each other crazy. In more ways than one.

With their partnership comes many changes to Equestria and Twilights political power has started overshadowing the Royal Sisters.
This was Celestia's plan all along, but it doesn't stop there.

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6ix

2601477:twilightblush: you'll be happy to know ch2 is already half ways done

This is the funniest thing I've read on Fimfiction so far :pinkiehappy:

Hehehehe, pecker. Simple, yet hilarious.

Concerned that some poor anime may have been hurt

I would be concerned as well :trollestia:

sounds like the beginning of a slow-building twicord story, very nice by the way.

Comment posted by Dracon_Pyrothayan deleted Dec 7th, 2013
6ix

2602648 I had a couple of guys i know look at it...:fluttercry:

2603068 you have no idea how awesome it was to find that lol, My thought while reading it was Fluttershy was concerned for anime? EPIC!

6ix

2603114 after all this feedback more is already on its way. im going to write the shit out of this plot:pinkiecrazy:

Twilight... at the Disco.

The first scene she panics...

Panic... at the Disco?

I LOVE this! I can't wait for the next chapter, this was pure awesomeness. Discord is so much in character it is ridiculous, as well as Twilight. YOu did an AMAZING job with them. :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

And lawdy, it was HILARIOUS. The whole thing with peckers made me laugh like an idiot. :rainbowlaugh: Discord, you perv. :pinkiehappy:

Though sometimes, I ran into parts I had to read more than once to understand. Is English your mother language? You're using many very good phrases, and have a thing for storytelling, but sometimes I kinda get confused and am not sure what are you trying to say. You should think about getting an English fluent editor, just in case. :pinkiesmile:

Inb4, this is SO getting featured.

What's this? Original idea? Funny execution? No hooomans? Pure (mostly)pony bliss and only a handful of typos to oppose all that goodness? :raritystarry:
I smell an epic story in the making, great job so far! :twilightsmile:

Um... sugar. How to put this? Not to be a downer, but this fic needs the attentions of a cleanup editor. It needs commas, punctuation corrections, spelling corrections, grammar corrections, and repair work done on the worst of the homophone confusion. The core idea is sound, and even interesting, and the characterization is fairly solid, but in its current form it's painful to read. Which is a pity, as the underlying story seems worth following.

6ix

2604175 your feedback very welcomed. No really I do need the help. Unfortunately I do have an editor, well I may have to get someone isn’t a friend to look at my work. Who would you suggest? Please keep on criticizing away, after all can’t fix it if you don't know it's broken

Not sure how I feel about Twilight/Discord but it looks interesting.

2604255 Absolutely grab a couple of beta editors - not just beta readers, and not just one editor, but people (fans or otherwise) who are super-nitpicky about words, punctuation, sentence structures, everything. FiM fans would be a bonus, as they'd be more likely to know the characters, canon characterizations, history of Equestria, and so forth. Friends are fine and dandy for a quick overall assessment, but you can end up overstocked with joyous Pinkie Pies and enthusiastic Dashes when you need a bunch of paranoid-mode Twilights or freaky-knowledge-of-language Fluttershys.

...Cutie Mark Crusader Copyeditors, yay!

6ix

2604343 dont worry ill win you over. come to the dark side, we have cookies

I'd read this, but the description... Ugh.

Come to find out this is what Celestia was hoping for.

One can only assume it was what Celestia was hoping for, since she's the one who gave her all that power to begin with, and this is the sort of thing that goes at the end of the description, not the middle.

The princesses’ rule was becoming stale, unprogressive even.

Gashp! It'sh ash if Daffy Duck took over thish shtory! Hereshy! Blashphemy, even!

Now Twilight has to deal with a very chaotic advisor, but she is determined to make it work, and to both of their surprise, it works out better than anyone foresaw.

This is a really long sentence.

I understand, descriptions are hard, but to be frank, you fail at them.

6ix

2604528 I didnt like it ether. What would you suggest? ( I’m not being snide I’m really asking)

2604546 Well, the purpose of the description is to lay out the premise in a short and concise way. Everything you said can probably be summed up in two or three sentences. Twilight's got a lot of responsibility, Discord is her adviser, and whoops, they're falling in love! Bam, bam, bam.

6ix

2604593 so i should make it more simple, i do tend over explain things

6ix

2604630 how about this?
Princess Twilight is finding herself with more political power than both Luna and Celestia. Not wanting to upset the balance of power Twilight brings her concerns to the other princesses. Unfortunately the royal sisters won't be much help, after all change comes slowly to the immortal. However, for a certain sprite, change in an everyday thing. Now Twilight has to deal with a very chaotic advisor, but she is determined to make it work. To their surprise, it works out far better than anyone foresaw.

6ix

2604726 alright its been updated, hopefuly that will make it easier to understand

2604693 Hope you don't mind my input.

Princess Twilight is finding herself with more political power than both Luna and Celestia. Not wanting to upset the balance of power Twilight brings her concerns to the other princesses. Unfortunately the royal sisters won't be much help, after all change comes slowly to the immortal. However, for a certain sprite, change in an everyday thing. Now Twilight has to deal with a very chaotic advisor, but she is determined to make it work. To their surprise, it works out far better than anyone foresaw.

Princess Twilight has found (watch your tense. You get them mixed up a lot during your story, and it's one of the few parts of it I'm not very happy about.)
Fortunately for her, there's a certain spirit for whom change is a common thing.
Now Twilight must deal with a very chaotic advisER
Take out the part about her being determined to make it work.
Optionally you can take out the last sentence as well.

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I think that's not the video you meant to link. Here's the one i thought of before i started your vid.

Edit - your song is a good one, and fitting, but not what you were leading up to.

2604519 Sorry but I'll always be a Discopie shipper :pinkiesmile::heart:(this is where my discord smily would go IF I HAD ONE) Doesn't mean I wont enjoy the story though. Also I have been in the dark side for quite some time now and the cookies are delicious.

Princess Twilight is finding herself with more and more political power than both Luna and Celestia. Not wanting to upset the balance of power, Twilight brings her concerns to the other princesses. Unfortunately, the royal sisters won't be of much help; after all, change comes slowly to the immortal. However, for a certain spirit, change is an everyday occurance. Now Discord has become Princess Twilight's advisor, and they are driving each other crazy.

However, hate can morph into lovebut they'll still be driving each other crazy.

Sorry, couldn't help myself.:twilightsmile: After all, synopses are important.

Twilicorn? "Comedy"? (Aka we're too lazy to write a proper story so we'll blame every failure to immerse you on you not getting that it's a comedy.) Twilicord?

i.imgur.com/FuIcF.gif

Still, take this. Have a nice day, gentlemen.
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