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Sometimes, heartache is a place, and you can leave it. But more often than not, it is both point and line, and though you leave injury behind you... you perhaps never truly are free. It lingers. Rainbow Dash learns this the hard way when Spitfire gives her free tickets to a Wonderbolts show in Cloudsdale as she's recovering from a terrible injury.
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This is a fine fic. I like your presentation of Rainbow's voice.
1802673 Thanks. All the others I've done with them have been Rarity. It was an experiment. I'm glad you think it went well!
I haven't read anything else in the series, but it stood on its own fairly well. I liked it, was sad when it needed to be, was happy when it needed to be. I don't know if that Fluttershy-esque mare was Fluttershy. Maybe Rainbow couldn't remember, or if she was disoriented, but other than that, which could be solved by reading the rest of the stories, it was an enjoyable story.
1802758 No, it's just a nice lady who's a bit freaked out.
The whole Fluttershy thing I wanted to serve two purposes--if you've read the others, it has a deeper meaning. If you haven't, I wanted it to be that Rainbow is kind of out of it and having a "Fluttershy" there to watch her be weak just makes it worse.
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
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Could you tell me the order of the stories in the series so I can read them?
1802805 Absolutely!
Here's how it stands:
Lilies of the Field (almost complete probs.)
Browsing Among the Lilies (NSFW)
A Lady Does Everything With Feeling
Where the Sun is Silent (Tangential, but it sets up this story and others)
Catch For Us the Little Foxes
Like a Mighty Flame
Great Heart Will Not Be Denied (Adventurey, upcoming soon)
All the Wealth of Her House (last one, weeks off)
I do love when people ask this. :3
I get it Rainbow. There's flying then there's flying. Some ponies just don't get it.
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Thank you, I'll get on it. Later. After I catch up on my other stories. :\
Hold up sir, "Rarity and Me" is incorrect. Check yourself
It actually feels kinda nice reading a fic of yours without the editing goggles on. This is a good one; you handled Dash's voice quite well.
Stop writing raridash so well. It's giving me second thoughts about my otp
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See that? Yeah. Might wanna fix that.
Also
heartache is a place
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1803116 Yay! :D I'm glad. Experiment a success.
An excellent addition to the Songverse, if I do say so myself. I only encountered three errors. Great work, Cynewulf!
"Goggles down and wings out" is my new catchphrase.
(With your permission, of course.)
This line. So many feels, so much truth... words fail me.
1807328 I'm glad you liked it Lonely! :3
Yes, you may use that. I like that phrase. :D
This should have an orange tag, rather than a pink one.
Sadness is tragedy of a transient nature, this has very few hallmarks of transience.
It's a good story, I suppose... I miss a lot of the context though.
1815706 Yes. The others you can read easier without context. This one is a lot harder to do that with.
Hm.
I'm not sure about that. I think perhaps it's valid in that her ability to fly will never be up to what it was, but it's not quite tragedy. Tragedy means, to me, that Rainbow loses. I'm not sure she loses here. Yes, she can't race anymore. But I think perhaps the fact that she can still fly serviceably argues in favor of merely sad. As does... well, the fact that Rainbow may yet triumph over loss. I suppose.
A fine piece of RariDash. Rare's generosity shines through, quietly and subtly, as it should. By itself the story leaves a lot untold, but read as part of the Songverse, it fits nicely.
1889648 I have found that is the problem with writing long ongoing things like this, over multiple stories in this sort of environment. It can be done! I just think I'm not really there yet in skill or audience.
I'm glad you liked it! I really like this one. It was fun, wrote fast and easy
..what happened to her wings?when did this magical trap thing happen?
2397043 It is actually part of a continuity. I do mention it, though I'm vague. The trap?
Basically, an elder god shows up wnating to screw stuff up and tries to kill the elements. Nyarlotep of the Crawling Chaos and all that. He used Fluttershy as a Trojan Horse and sprung a magic trap that yanked them out of Canterlot and into his own realm. There, Rainbow, maddened by that place, tried to escape and
well.
Traps.
I had tried to recap it, but I could have done a lot better.
This is really good!
2397279 Yay! Thankya.
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I also loved your Dash characterisation. You really nailed her breathless excitement when she was describing the Wonderbolts.
I really love your style and your treatment of RariDash.
I will need to check out the rest of the stories...
2398510 I suggest Catch For the Foxes, it's probably the best of my Raridash Songverse fics.
Yay! That part was actually the one I was least sure about.
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I will certainly check out Foxes. Do the rest of the stories form an overarching storyline, or are they more loosely related?
2398758 Yes!
I have a continuity of fics called the "Songverse" There's a box on my page on the left side for navigating through them! :D The best place to start is really with Where the Sun is Silent or Foxes. I likes continuity :3
Missing wings I can handle. Paralysis, broken bones, even torn muscles unable to stunt fly again. But not spasms, unpredictable weakness, PTSD, true lifelong disability. This is my nightmare, this is what scares me deep down. I'm glad I read this, but I also don't think I will read the rest of the Songverse, because this one was too real, too true and hurting.
Thumbed up.
I have much to do today, but this whispers in my ear... I'll have to be resolute, though. Later.
Is this a continuation of Foxes? The thought that it might be excites me greatly!
2400166 It is! It is another stop along the Songverse way.
Go forth and work, it remains here for you.
2399478 It sucks, don't it? It sucks a lot. Because you can't go home again and life changes and the world moves on and it sucks. And I knew that, and it made me sad because I was really attached and I loved them but life is so sad and I had to tell the truth. But I don't do tragedy, I don't believe in it. Because the world moves on! The world swallows it up. So Rainbow finds work with the weather team and lives a quiet life, and festering gives way, I think.
I'm glad you liked it. It made me feel stuff too.
(Also I remember your username it always interested me)
*sighs* Why does reading something so wonderful hurt?
Probably because it's written so well, and also touches on something I love. I don't know if Dash can ever reach the place where she can accept that she will not be the best, cannot achieve with the highest. It's an odd place to be- there's sadness but also some comfort when you can put aside a desire whose impossibility torments you. But at the same time, it's sad- like a little bit of death. Some can mourn it and move on; others can't.
I think you are bringing her much closer to acceptance than others have been able to, and by that I mean in showing how her character is shaped by events. I still haven't worked out how you seem to approach some of the story from... I want to say 'sideways' but that's not correct. Oblique is the word I'm looking for; I read and suddenly realize that I'm feeling the way the subject does, and it's a little surprise.
This hurt a little to read, but I'm very glad I did. Wonderful, as always. Thank you!
And congratulations on this getting up on EqD!
2403788 Hm. Oblique/sideways? I'm curious. I'd hear more of what ya mean! Shoot me a PM.
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I discovered my "cutie mark" after I lost the job that revealed it to me: I'm good at copying. I am really good at copying. I excel at the art of duplication across media. Document scanning is my specialty; I know the major formats intimately, I am acquainted with the minor formats, and I almost always get the printout I want formatted the way I want it on the first try. I also portray a calligraphic scribe at our church's annual Night In Bethlehem event in December.
So when I became a fan, and when I needed an Internet moniker to brand my stories with, I chose the OC name Greene "Duplex" Fields. He's a unicorn who works in a book bindery in Ponyville. He's a total geek for typesetting, able to put together a whole page in less than a minute using only a few simple (for him) spells. He had a good home life as a child, he hasn't seen any big tragedies, he doesn't have any limbs replaced by metal or wood, and he doesn't have a love interest. (Well, he has a crush on Plumsweet, but he's never done anything about it.) He's never been seen in stories, outside of a few drabbles in the MLP General.
It's my headcanon that ponies customarily change their name to fit their cutie mark / destiny upon discovering their talent. This is a convenient way to explain why so many marks fit their owners' names.
That was very nice, I shall add the rest of the series to my reading list.
Typo: You mention at one point a 'Spitefire', and though that sounds like an awesome name for a flight drill sergeant, I doubt it was intended
2406507 Spitefire!! Pffffft that is awesome.
Whoops. I remember that being in the initial editing, but I must have forgotten it. Fail.
Certainly not my cup of tea.
Some of my issues come from it being an AU, namely how off-cannon Rarity was, and how the Raridash angle felt largely tangential to the rest of the story. Still, I imagine these are probably explained somewhere else on the series, and I wouldn't really judge the story for requiring prior experience with other stories (although a disclaimer on the description would have been nice).
No, the greatest issue I had was with the handling of the emotions. There was too much of trying to beat me over the head with how sad and depressed Dash was. It would have benefited a lot from having a more subtle touch. This way the character feels too disconnected, which certainly affected my enjoyment.
Still, it was well written, with a competent portrayal of somepony trying to avoid dealing with a specific issue, with all the hedging and misdirection. It was good for what it was, but it also felt incomplete, even considering it as part of something larger.
Really good, emotional piece. I haven't read Catch for Us yet, but it turns out this stands alone pretty well. :)
Reading this as a stand-alone fic (by which I mean without having read the others in the series) I personally felt that it still worked well. The fact that Rainbow had a problem was shown and explained well, without focus being stolen away from what I see as the main points of the story, Rainbow dealing with it and how it's affected her ability to enjoy the wonderbolts, and flying in general, and her dream of joining them, which I fell is important in short stories like this one. Your characterisations worked well, and your writing did well to reflect the tone of the story, and even at the beginning when Rainbow was excited and cheering, the sad tone still came through well.
I'm going to go on and read the others in the series, as if this is anything to go by they should be good.
You are the best RariDash writer ever. Don't you ever even try to deny it.
4441353 hehe. Aww. Thank you! I have to tho, I firmly insist that Salvation is the best of all of it. Razed, me, the others... we all come from a single tree, the one Gardez planted. We are fruits of a tree of sadness.
Intense.
At least Rainbow isn't completely earthbound....