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You can probably tell exactly what went wrong and how. Pls to forgive for terrible "romance" (read: feces) brick that I threw in there. As low as my qualifications for writing any OTHER material are, they're a hundred times lower for mushy goo-goo.

But it was late and I was riding high on not-sleeping and I did this all in one draft and please don't hate me. Look! There are jokes in there! Those are good, right?

Dunno what you're worried about, it was fine. I hope you don't give up on this for no reason. Write more.

Aw, now I'm worried Dash might have blown it with Applejack. I'm 95% sure she didn't, but still... :applecry:

In any case, a very cute little story. Also, by establishing that Twilight knows a body swap spell, you've set the stage for numerous other shenanigans.

Thats... not what i thought the Story would be. I thought that Scootaloo and Dash get their bodys swapped by an accident, Discord or whatever. They only tell Twilight and while Twilight tries to fix it, Scootaloo (in Rainbows Body) does Dashs Job and so on and in the end Scootaloo and Applejack fall in love with each other.

Read title : check
Read description: che.... wha...
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edit: tracking

unexpected and fun :trollestia:

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IDK, the AppleDash snippets you put in DR were pretty good for what they were.

Yay pinky and the brain reference!

Aw, crud... I KNEW I did something wrong!

I'm so, so, so, sorry to everyone who'll be disappointed by this, but it appears that last night I forgot to do one very important thing.

This IS complete and will NOT continue. I'm marking it now and preparing to be shot. I swear that was an accident.

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.”

You sir, are a genius. I had to stop for about five minutes to calm myself after reading that.
As for the rest of the story, it was great!

Wait.
Twilight, what were you doing with that shovel?
Wait a second.
Two books out of place. Spike is usually the one who puts books away.
OH MY GOD!
...
T-twilight, what did you do to Spike?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png

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:facehoof: Damnit...

People often make fun of the gimmick of 'switching places'. I don't know why, if handled well its quite a pleasant read. I quite liked it, honestly.

What? No closure? I actually really enjoyed this, but it seems incomplete. Appledash needs to be reconciled, darnit. Anywho, nice job. If you were ever to write a sequel... well, I'd read it.

What are you talking about? This is really well written and the romance part is great, as is the overall plot. All characters are in character and the main plot would make a good episode for the tv show. You transported the feelings and you got your points across, all of them. Add a little more detail and you are golden.

This was very fun. :) Dash-as-Scootaloo was a great character, and the way they 'tricked' Twilight was very smart indeed (even if not quite smart enough to fool her). Nice work!

I liked it. Could've had more content regarding what happened between Applejack and Rainbow, but I don't mind the tease.:twilightsmile:

Darn, wish there were more chapters in here.... the suspense! Well, it was a great read either way, nice work. :ajsmug::heart::rainbowdetermined2:

1756202 what was Twilight doing with the muddy spade?
And wheres Spike?:rainbowhuh:

You simply must write an epilogue with the conclusion.
Right now, AJ's thinking that Dash ditched her and doesn't love her back:raritycry:

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.” :scootangel:

The best line ever.

Tres cute. also the author's note killed me.:rainbowlaugh:

Consarnit it, I'm trying to connect the dots and read between the lines, but I don't get it, and argh! Why can't I can't come up with the inferences I need to understand this fic? I thought I did a pretty good job of following the plot of "Double Rainbow".

Ezn

This fic made my head hurt, but not to the degree Double Rainbow did. Still, a neat little story, though I imagine I would have got more out of it if I were a dasher of apples.

Your profile pic is weird.

Oh my gigglesnort :rainbowlaugh: this left me gasping.

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.”

Best. Line. Ever.

My only complaint is that I took so long to wait before I read this.

Reading this directly after reading The Birds and the Bees. 'Tis awesome.

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.”
Somehow, the sound of a record-scratch reverberated throughout the building. Mr. Cake dropped a batch of cookies on the floor and stared at Scootaloo with worry in his eyes.

I didn't actually get that until I read it twice. Then I ROFLMA'd.

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I also wish to have these questions answered.
Though I think she was fixing the hole at Fluttershy's...

This fic is amazing.
Just one thing:

I need closure!

Anyways, this should have gotten like ten times the attention it did. Literally.

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:rainbowhuh: What author's note is this? :unsuresweetie:

2990022 The authors' comment under the fic.

The birds and the other birds. That is funny line right there. Interesting story.

"Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take tour body for a spin until five" Ha ha ha ha... Gasp *Silently dying on the floor after that line*

That was a very clever ploy those two pulled, convincing someone a problem existed, and by doing so, getting her to create that exact situation. Scoots and Dashie must get props for at least conceiving a plan that could have outsmarted the local smartypants. :rainbowwild::scootangel:

1759962 1776407 2521295 She was filling in Fluttershy's hole, and Spike was watching. Spike is still at 'Shy's cottage finishing up.

Any theory that plays on the authors dark implication is garbage; TittySparkler recently submitted a Cupcakes-level gorefic about Twi killing Spike repeatedly, so I am currently sick to fucking death of unsympathetic Spike abuse, even when just done for humor.

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.”

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This is a really cool idea for a story. :rainbowkiss: I cant think of a better gift for scoots than the gift of flight she may never be able to achieve on her own.

:ajsleepy: Sad Applejack makes me sad though :fluttercry:
I really hope Rainbow got back to her quickly
Nice job :ajsmug:

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So Twilight killed and buried Spike? That's a moronic thing to imply in a story like this. The author should save that sort of thing for greentext.

I really love this though I still don't get it. I don't even get if i get it or not ._.
It's like I clearly see what it's all about but still I'm not sure.
But the romance tag sure gives a hint. Not about the spade though.

Wait so was Applejack in on it like Twilight? Or was she being genuine?

“Ten bits if you look the other way and let me take your body for a spin until five.”

Somehow, the sound of a record-scratch reverberated throughout the building. Mr. Cake dropped a batch of cookies on the floor and stared at Scootaloo with worry in his eyes.

This part really made me giggle. Really cute all around.

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