• Member Since 23rd Jan, 2014
  • offline last seen Sep 25th, 2014

Lilith Evanson


Rainbows and cupcakes and lesbian ponies. Shippers and cloppers and all of the bronies. Applejack licking all up Rainbow's wings. These are a few of my favorite things!

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Comments ( 51 )

Really well written! I could see the whole scene clearly in my head. It even had just the right amount of "Daaawwww"

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Thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

This was an amazing story, you did a great job writing it and I must say that hit me right in the feels :twilightsmile:
You have just earned yourself an upvote and favorite.

haha the title and discription sounds like some kinda clop fic! Lawl tardmuffins

Also like for cuteness and total dawww factor

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Thank you! I never thought I would enjoy hitting someone in the feels, haha!

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I laughed harder than I should have at your first comment. Thank you!

Alright...

Gotta give you your due.

This was quite the fluffy tale you made.

Loved it, well done, man.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Thank you, kind sir! I really appreciate it. :raritywink:

Absolutely adorable. Really made me smile, nice job.

Wait, 4 years... First pony-based story?

If so, I gotta say, that's an amazing start. Likely to get featured. Original and EXTREMELY fluffy, with a extra helping of cuteness. Aside from a few grammar errors, really well done.


No place for wimps

Nice. Continue writing, now that you've started back up! I know what a slump is like - I didn't write for ten years before I got back into it.

A wonderful story!! (Really, you haven't written in 4 years?? You're a GREAT author!!) Definite thumbs up - looking forward to reading more of your stories :)

Oh my gosh, this is so cute! :twilightsmile:

Man for being out of it for four years, you're better than I could ever be for being in it for sixteen years. I loved it, just a cute daww inducing story. I can't wait for you to write even more!

A little technical polishing aside, that was a nice little fluffy tale. And a hint of AppleDash certainly didn't hurt things. :ajsmug::rainbowkiss:

I bet Sweetie's going to be sad she missed out, though. :unsuresweetie:

"Two many"? For fuck's sake, how did you screw that up?

D'awww! This story was cute. :rainbowkiss:

If I had any technical problems with it, it was that it had a little too much telling, and not enough showing.

Most of the story is relayed to us in terms of "they x'd, and then they y'd, and then they z'd." That distances us from events, and we lose a little of their impact.

Since the entire story was built around Applejack thinking back on what happened, the story might have worked better if you had presented the past events as a series of actual flashbacks, so we got to "see" snippets of what happened "as they happened." This would add a little more immediacy, and make the cuteness even cuter. :rainbowkiss:

In any case, this was an adorable piece of AppleDash fluff, and I approve. :twilightsheepish:

Outstandingly adorable. :pinkiecrazy: is there anything more to say?
likes*

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Thank you so much! Yes, originally the story was going to be from Applejack's point of view with dialogue and flashbacks but I didn't feel confident enough to do that. That's why the whole story is more descriptive than anything.

However, I will definitely take your advice for my next piece. Again, thank you so much!

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Umm...oops?

Well, thanks for pointing it out NICELY.

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Thank you. Haha, Sweetie was actually busy helping Rarity with a special order. She was just glad to be spending more time with her sister. :twilightsmile:

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Aww! That is very sweet, thank you so much. :heart:

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Ahh, yes, I have been completely out of the fan writing loop for a very long time, but thank you so much for your kind words! I hope one day I can be a good writer. :pinkiehappy:

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Oh my goodness! Can I give you a hug? That is a very long time, longer than me, but I applaud you for writing again! I promise I won't give up writing and thank you so much!

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Yes! The last piece of fiction I wrote was for Kuroshitsuji/Black Butler, my favorite anime at the time. That was back in 2010! Time does fly. Thank you so much for your kind review! It would be wonderful if it did get featured but I highly doubt it. Maybe one day. :pinkiesmile:

There is just nothing I can't like about this. It's short, but not so short that it feels cut off, I think it's just the right length. It's just the right mix of fluff and bittersweet introspection to be absolutely heartwarming, and it's just all-around very well crafted.

Excellent work, sir or madam.

I enjoyed reading your story! In fact, I featured it in a blog post of mine. It's not much, but I hope it'll get you a couple of extra views. Keep up the good work! :ajsmug:

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Thank you so much! Your review really means a lot to me. I've always been a fan of your work. Again, thank you! :twilightsmile:

An adorable little story it just made me think what Applejack meant by saying she would lie about them being her family. It kind of made me feel sad for her like maybe she couldn't have foals of her own. Idk still a nice story.

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Thank you so much for your kind review! Sometimes I imagine AJ not being able to have a foal, although in my headcanon Pinkie is the one who can't have a foal. In the end, AJ just wants all three ponies to be her own little family and it's one of the rare times she gets to hold all three of them to her.

Sorry for the sad!

3975104 its ok it was just a dash of sad but the rest of the story was so warm and fuzzy it didn't even count

I personally think there should be more slice of life story like this out there. Like just telling a little episode of our beloved colorful equines' life. Calm, soothing, cute and enjoyable to read. You really managed to snap me out of the harshness of reality, which is rare. Than you! :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for your kind and really sweet review! I'm glad I was able to make you smile!

:pinkiesad2:OMG how nice!! I really love your story

Very cute and cozy, :) Nice work on this.

A few typos: had awaken her (awakened)
radiating of their (off)
setting sun peaking (peeking)
portion closes to (closest)

4395225 Thank you! Also, thank you for the corrections, I needed that. :twilightsmile:

This was really, really sweet and a very cute read. :)
Thank you for the smiles! Keep it up, you did great, especially considering you were on a four year hiatus with your writing! Job well done, indeed!

Very enjoyable, you more than earned my 'favourite' and 'like'. :pinkiehappy:
WOOT :pinkiegasp:

4874295 Aw, you're welcome!
'Tis was a very fluffy little story. c:
Cuteness overload :derpyderp2:

I can't think of any reason I didn't have this on my fave list, except that I just forgot to hit the button.

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