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When my parents told my sister and I that we would be moving to Canterlot, Virginia, I thought it would be a chance for a fresh start. Finding out that Canterlot was populated by cartoon characters put a dent in that plan, and being the only one who noticed for some reason didn't help. On the plus side, I made two new friends! Sure, they might be a little insane eccentric, but at least they haven't ghosted and/or knifed me yet.
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Will the Dazzlings be appearing in this story?
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If I get to the events of Rainbow Rocks, then definitely
I liked the chapter, I'll wait for the next one.
Translated by google. Spanish - English.
Normally don't care for OC stories, but this has peaked my interest. Good luck.
Fun read, looking forward to the next update.
Now I want to say mean things! Too bad reading your story didn't inspire any truly mean remarks.
Seriously, so far it seems like an entertaining and amusing story. I look forward to seeing more of your perspective on how Canterlot might look to a 'normal human,' and the funny or horrifying events that might unfold.
LOL
This looks really good!
Your writing style is very readable, and the protagonist, while not super identifiable yet, is the perfect sort of generically entertaining for this story.
Starlight is… well, Starlight, so obviously I’m going to love her, but I do like the idea of her having her own clique of political radicals in high school. She seems like the type. Plus, you’re doing the “human Lyra is obsessed with magic ponies” bit, which I always enjoy.
I also love the concept of CHS actually being on normal earth, it’s just that no one notices the bizarre-looking people.
Really good start, and I look forward to seeing the rest! Especially Sunset and more of Glimglam.
Good amount of humor, interesting oc, probably gonna get in a bunch of crazy problems, I have a good feeling about this fic.
this is very good, what a surprise.
keep the good work, yes yes
Lyra has vivid visions of another world and Glim Glam is just a fucking Communist. This shit is hilarious. Keep it up man.
Stalin butchered communism in USSR.
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Careful, that kind of talk will get you thrown in one of Starlight's Harmonic Re-education Lodges
I can see Lyra being a monarchist: after all, Equestria is an absolute monarchy[1], and it works fine...
[1] There's a parliament or something in a lot of fanfic, but that's all it is: fanon.
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Sunburst's family got him into a fancy private school her parents couldn't afford: clearly, the capitalist system was to blame.
It's hard to justify why I'm enjoying this story so much.
On the one hand, the story seems to lean light and fluffy gently comic slice of life.
On another hoof, this story seems to very casually start off on one of the more interesting things I've seen done lately with the Equestria Girls 'people in all these weird colors' canon.
I also enjoy how the story starts off by PARTLY telling us about how it will develop and end, setting expectations and foreshadowing the tone but not too much.
I hope you will keep going with this, and you're taxing my usual policy of very seldom updooting a story that isn't 'Complete.'
So when you say four months older do you mean 4 minutes older cause there twins right, loved the chapter by the way.
Honestly if I leaved in a world with pinky, the higher dimensional god. I would be right scared.
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Nope, that was intentional. Four months.
There are a lot of factors contributing to why they're a little standoffish towards each other.
Is this story based off of the The Simpsons/Arthur crossover fanfic?
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I didn't know that existed, so no
Looking good, interesting start. I've never read a fic that had similar topics to this one.
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I, too, was wondering about this, although I'm sure there are circumstances in which it could make sense.
This is a wonderful story. Looking forward to the continuation!
I bet our mc is immune to magic making it so whatever makes people think that everything over there is normal does not work on him.
Loved it, worth the wait.
You take that back Jack! Ponksie Poo is a wonderful cartoon being!
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That's weird, isn't the minimum age difference between two brothers supposed to be one year? How would I be older by 4 months? Unless someone is adopted...
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maybe they just had jack REALLY fast after jill?
extremely funny and unique in its delivery- im excited to read more of this!
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Perhaps...
Nice. Love it <3
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Wow, how'd you find a picture of this universe's Fluttershy?
I might use that as a gag in a non-canon omake sometime in the future.
So is this only gonna be the events of the first movie or will you go over the other stuff too.
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If everything pans out, it'll run through the Friendship Games. For now, I'm just taking this one movie at a time
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Friend, their age difference is 4 months, as I explained there the minimum should be 9/10 months
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I think they are stepsiblings, with parents who married after the kids were born.
(Either that, or AU universe that includes some brightly colored people also has a somewhat different biology.
)
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had not considered that option, although quite certain it is a little rare that neither of the two alla considered that but usually a normal teenager does not usually consider those things
About your second choice... it would mean that the protagonist with his family always lived in that world and for some reason the prota’s brain never considered that
Burn!
Also we are listening in on a therapist listening to him right?
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You don't question what is normal for you.
Like whatever magic is leaking out of the portal is making the family think coloured skin is normal (except for the dad as he grew up around them)
And the mc seems immune to it.
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. Jack's Mom is a normal human with a normal pregnancy cycle.
It's not the second option lol
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A therapist? I suppose you could say that
Oh, I forgot to mention that Ponk knows EVERYTHING. Now I mentioned.
Yassss! Glim-Glam!
I don't remember seeing you sign any contract with a specific release schedule on it.
The chapter is very interesting, I'm looking forward to the continuation! Don’t worry about the delay, do everything at your own pace)
Lovin this
God, how I like it....
Yes she is secretly a magical horse in disguise.
(Maybe the portal makes a Chu Cho Chu cha chi sound.)
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Blessed be the author whom prefers delayed stories over bad moneygrabs.