This story is a sequel to Friendship Games: Friendship Makes Magic
It's the annual Canterlot High's camping trip to Camp Everfree and things are about to get interesting. After the recent events of the Friendship Games, Twilight Sparkle and her friends thought they can spend a relaxing week in the great outdoors and get away from the magical escapades that they experienced.
However, things didn't turn out as they had expected. Strange occurrences began to happen as a mysterious phenomenon befall the campers. Close bonds will begin to shake and reason fails to meet reality.
And then there's the new transfer student: Starlight Glimmer. Being the only person who was never exposed to any magical experience, he world will be knock upside down as she will experience a rebirth of new discoveries. Some of which... that might not be so good for her.
Set into tracking mode. Can't wait to see what continues from here.
Hmm... pretty good premise so far... I'll put this on my tracking list for now.
Yeesh,I can tell you rushed this one(there are a couple of mistakes with the grammar) but at least the story plot is interesting(this worlds Starlight Glimmer? Nice!)
Not much I can say beyond except start to this story. I'm definitely going to be curious as to see where you will be going with this (especially with Starlight), but that's what the future chapters are for. All in all, a very good start to what promises to be quite an intriguing adventure. I'll definitely be looking forward to more, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
I'm interested to see where this goes with out Sci-Twi's angst
Expectations have been dialed to eleven. Let's see how this goes...
Once again, superb job on the exchanges, humor and future chapter set-up in this chapter. Yeah, I can't blame Sunset for being freaked out (considering how things are probably going to go, it could probably be considered Properly Paranoid), though I know she will at least overcome it enough to be helpful at the right moments (I don't know HOW she will, but I know she will). At any rate, I'll definitely be looking forward to more, but will also be perfectly willing to be patient.
Of course she would panic about it having the same name as a forest back in Equestria!
Then... go home, Starlight.
(Seriously, here's a typo that we found)
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Thanks. That was super embarrassing. Especially when I already stop myself from making that same mistake several times through out the chapter.
Hey there. Thanks again for getting this next chapter up. Once again, splendid work on the exchanges and characterizations. And the author's notes do a good job explaining the added details.
As for the next chapter, yeah, it's pretty clear that it's going to catch up with a few of the other students who didn't come to Camp Everfree.
As for some of the stuff that could happen, well,
1. Your choice of the students can participate in a charity song-and-dance competition (loosely based on "Dance Magic" except that it is set DURING "Legend of Everfree" instead of AFTER and none of the usual main characters are involved)
2. Some of the students (again, your choice which ones) could try going out to eat before catching the latest action movie.
3. Your choice of any of the students could be playing your choice of either baseball, football or basketball.
and 4. Somebody of your choice could be at their homes when their families receive visits from friends of their parents.
Of course, you can choose which of these ideas you want to use if any. If you don't like ANY of the ideas, well, I will profusely apologize for wasting your time.
Once again, I will definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be perfectly willing to be patient.
I actually enjoy the "relationship" between Twi and Flash here. Certainly works better than it did in the movies.
Hey 8317079, thanks for commenting on my chapter as always. I always look out for your comments whenever I publish a new chapter (you and now 8317397). However, I have a few... "critiques" about your latest comment.
1. Your ideas of possible scenes sound a bit generic. They're a bit bland and lacks a bit intrigue. But then again, my idea involving the characters that have in mind eating in the cafeteria so I can't be too harsh.
And 2. You don't state any character's names. I know that you are trying to be polite and don't want to get too ahead of yourself, but one way to advertise a scene is by stating which characters you want to be in it. Which one sounds more likely to grab your attention: "[INSERT CHARACTER NAME HERE] singing in a charity contest" or "Sweetie Belle singing in a charity contest"?
However, I will admit that you might not know which characters I'm going to use in my next chapter (why does that sound condescending for some reason?). So as a hint, here's a list of students and faculty currently on the school trip
And so, any characters that I haven't mention will have a chance to appear in the next chapter. So think about what characters who are at Canterlot High that isn't on the school trip that I will be focusing on? (And here's another hint: it won't be an OC or any background characters).
Oh, you poor poor pony, Sunset. You should really listen to Cross' lecture on tempting Fate.
A breather is always nice every once and a while. Seriously, the show needs to get its act together.
Hey there. I have to say, this IS better than anything I could have come up with (especially since, by my own admission, I was literally unable to come up with any names to go with the ideas). Excellent work on the characterizations in this breather chapter.
I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this story (on both ends), but will also be very willing to be patient. After all, I am fully aware that real world concerns have to come first and inspiration can be hard to come by.
Starlight can't interrupt herself! I think you meant to make it say Sunset interrupted. Otherwise, pretty good chapter.
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I fix it, but that's the 2ND time I made that mistake.
This story does Starlight's backstory better than the show, at least IMHO.
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Hm, How?
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Well, it makes it more... relatable, I suppose. In the show, it felt contrived, and lent no weight to why she did what she did. But here, it makes her more real, especially to those of us that have been sidelined by friends in the past. The story has more to it than just "Oh, one afternoon he got that mark of his and now I hate marks because he left." It's more in-depth, which I appreciate.
Worth the wait
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Thanks. What about makes it so "Worth the wait", if I may ask?
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The character interactions they always bring a smile to me and the promice of plot twists
Well, now they can't hide the magic from Starlight, or more importantly, from Gloriosa.
Totally, Pinkie...
Okay, how did Celestia get magic? This gets more and more intriguing every time I read a new chapter.
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Here's a clue: What happened towards the end of the Friendship Games?
now the author has't to come up with powers for all the characters. like the my little mages stories.
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I came up with powers for most of the character. I just need powers for Derpy, Bulk Bicep, and Lyra
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Those are easy, bubbles/empathy, giant power/ shout power, hypnotic Lyru like Orpheus in Greek myth, or ability to see the the unseen(Bigfoot spirits and the such
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Those are my two cents at least. You do you
Sorry I took so long to get around to responding to this. Nothing to blame except self-admitted laziness. Anyway, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations, humor, action and future chapter set-up in the last few chapters. I particularly like how almost literally everybody who was at the Friendship Games seems to be getting these abilities and NOT JUST the Rainbooms as well as Starlight's reactions to said magical happenings .
And yeah, I'm definitely going to be looking forward to more of this especially with the implied check back up on Apple Bloom and her friends in the next few chapters , but will also respect that you have a life outside the computer room.
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Oh! Hey! I thought I wouldn't hear (read) your comments again. Don't worry. You're not the only one who is lazy.
So, I got 2 question if you don't mind me asking. 1, what's your favorite power/student combination. And 2, where do you think the story will go from here?
... I think I know where you're going with this, but I'll hold my opinion until I'm proven right or wrong.
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Dude, just tell me your theory (either through private message or cover it in a spoiler bar). I'm not good when somebody says they have something but just won't tell me what that something is.
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Okay then. Starlight is the one who turns into the mega evil psycho instead of Gloriosa[./spoiler]
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1. My FAVORITE combo would have to be Vinyl and Octavia and their shared solid hologram power (assuming I wasn't reading that wrong [I had to re-read the chapter a couple of times before I responded]), but they were ALL good.
as for 2. For the MAIN story, I can't guess much beyond Celestia and the other kids playing a larger role in at least reasoning with "Gaea Everfree" when she strikes and, eventually Starlight and/or Trixie eventually discovering her/their own magic. For the SIDE story, obviously, there's going to be some sort of shenanigans at Diamond's party (maybe not as extreme as what's going to be happening at Camp Everfree, but certainly more than enough to keep the kids who DIDN'T go to camp from getting bored [for better or worse]).
Sorry I've been too lazy to respond to this until now, but, again, wonderful job on the latest chapter. Yeah, great catch up concerning the Dazzlings and Scootaloo's party . The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up were, of course, well done in all the right places.
I particularly liked the reasoning for the Dazzlings still accepting the gig even after their realizations as well as Scootaloo's aunts' chat at the end of the chapter .
Once more, I will most assuredly be looking forward to more of this.
I thought Holiday and Lofty were sisters. Well, artistic license I suppose.
That last part sounds foreshadow-y.
Did they kiss? Also, aw, poor Sunset.
Please tell me that the Flashlight is going to get better. I know you gave Flash some terrible luck in this series, but please tell me that Flash and Twilight will get over that. Also, I know that date sounds terrible at the moment, especially to a perfectionist like Twilight, but it could be pretty funny in hindsight. Furthermore, swapping childhood stories sounds like a fun way to get to know someone. I personally love talking about my childhood.
Well, someone's going to be real ticked later in the story.
Look, I don't mean to be demanding, but is there a reason why this story hasn't been updated for a year?
I appreciate Timber being nice to Flash, but I still don't particularly like him.
Now what?
So, Flash is basically clawless Wolverine.
I just thought of something horrible. You just gave people an excuse to use Flash as a meat shield.
When the next update? This going to hiatus?