This story is a sequel to My Little Mages: Goddess of Midnight
It has been a few weeks since Sunset felt Sci-Twi dissolve in her arms. Even though the small oak that Sunny Flare said housed Sci-Twi's soul, Sunset is haunted by her failure to save her. Needing some time from the reminder she elected to go back to Mystica and elects to partake in Magiville's Summer Sun Celebration.
While everthing seems to start out well, after the arrival of two people, with Timber the younger brother being more noticable of the two, from the other side of The Everfree Forest, minor things have been going wrong in the set up. And Sunset seeks to know.
Can she solve the mystery?
What is Timber up to?
And why is there trails of diamonds everywhere?
A My Little Mage retelling of Legends of Everfree
Phew. Finally. Looks like everything is off to a great start.
Great job on the prologue. To be honest, I've been looking forward to this. Partially because, well, while I definitely respect how well you work in your own little added details to the episodes, you tend to put a bit more imagination into your analogues to the EG series.
The prologue with Mystica's founders is a pretty good indication of what I am talking about.
At any rate, you did a very good job on the exchanges and characterizations in this "distant prologue" and now I'm on to the next chapter.
Excellent job on this chapter. Sunset's guilt-induced nightmares were a great touch and the scene with the Shadowbolts before Sunset left for Magiville was wonderful. Having this take place very shortly after Flurry Heart's birth is also a really good way to explain main Twilight's absence for the story.
Anyway, the exchanges and characterizations are all splendidly done (not only in Sunset's case, but also in the cases of the Shadowbolts AND main-Twilight's friends) and the details explaining a typical Magiville Summer Sun Celebration are excellent too.
So, yeah, I WILL be looking forward to more of this, but will also respect that you will also be busy with other stuff.
Finally caught up. Thats a whole lotta alternative universe.
Are the geodes, the Tree of Harmonies attempt to make a secondary gifting Elements that enemy forces as such dont know about?
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sorry,Darling, but no spoilers
Really good job on this chapter. It may have taken a while, but was definitely worth the wait. I especially liked the "older sister" argument, how AJ and Rarity argued with Spoiled (particularly the difference between a "tramp" and a "prostitute" [I'm paraphrasing]), Timber's attempts to cheer Sunset up and the working in of "Campfire Tales" in this universe.
Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places.
Aww, why did you write Timber the way you did? Now, I actually feel sorry for him and am low-key shipping him with Sunset.
I mean, having him be more sympathetic is definitely a good thing for sure, but the shipping side effect is worrying me a little.
Really loved the chapter but i have a question:
Are you shipping Timber with Sunset? Or Sci twi?
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I actually don't ship Timber and Sunset, but I can't in good faith make him a villain or fully willing partner to the main antagonist of a story and be just towards him. Due note it's not that I like him, it's because of how much I dislike him that I can't make him worse then a reluctant partner to the antagonist.
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I ship Timber with niether
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Yeah, but he also isn't as much of a braggart in this universe. Was that intended?
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It's more of a 'I, the author, wants to get this story done, leaps of logic, plot armor, plot contrivances, plot holes be d@##3d! Timber being or not being a braggart doesn't really affect the story I am telling, and since it's not needed I am not using it' type judgment call on my part. And on going back to a previous comment, if I were to try to make him a braggart, I would do it so hard it would come off as if I was just tearing this character apart for my own pleasure and it would be utterly unjust for me to do that.
Something red under his nose, please tell me he didn’t get a nose bleed
And gaea putting her hand on the ancestor’s belly, i’m guessing that was to make one of the decendents become a vesal for her?
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Sorry, Darling, but no spoilers
What there a ‘nightmare Rarity?’
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Yes. It was one of the earlier stories in this series. It might take some hunting to find it, but you CAN find it.
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My Little Mages: The Phantasm of Philanthropy
Hello there. Thanks very much for getting the story finished. The exchanges, characterizations, action and general wrap-up are all well done in all the right places. I especially liked Sunset's getting through to Gloriosa/Gaea, the reflections on family and Sci-Twi's resurrection. Plus, yeah, the set-up for the next story is great too.
As for possible ways to include a heavily modified version "Rollercoaster of Friendship" perhaps it could be mixed with "the Mean Six" in a way. In this case, "Vignette Valencia" could be Chrysalis in disguise (which, frankly, would make A LOT more sense anyway) and trying to discreetly capture Starlight's friends one-by-one and replacing them with an evil clone after they are captured. This would be intended to ruin the reputations of Twilight and her friends AT MINIMUM (though it would be preferable if the clones ALSO found a way to locate and steal some sort of really powerful mystic artifacts that Chrysalis could use to make herself powerful enough to effortlessly crush Starlight).
And "Spring Breakdown" could be combined with elements of the "Reflections" arc of the IDW comics, in that Sunset, Twilight and Rainbow could end up entering a mirror universe by means of an experimental portal newly created by Starswirl. In this new universe, Mystica is ruled by a GOOD version of Sombra and Celestia and Luna are the main villains.
But that's just "food for thought" stuff. You don't have to do any of that if you don't want to.
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Ohh! Thank you for the heads up guys!
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welcome
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could you pm me idea?
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I can’t say I have idea exactly, but I like the sound of ‘Rollercoaster of Friendship‘ and the ‘Mean 6’ together is very interesting. Only if you want to and that it is ok, cause I think your stories makes up for the AU of my favourite shows. Different but the same characters that in a different form.
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I'll think about it...
Oh dear
You've never actually watched Legend of Everfree?
So, what made you dislike Timber to the point where if given the opportunity to let loose, you'd make him a worse antagonist than in my story?
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I have seen a couple of reviews shortly after it aired, I know from them that Timber is a camp console and having been one myself and an RA in college, knowing he makes moves on Sci-Twi just rubs me all the wrong ways because seeking a relationship with your campers and or residences is a BIG NO-NO!!, also the beach shorts with him didn't help his case... at all... because I have taken lifeguard training and he was so bad at his job... I just... just no...
9537329 So, you hate him because he gives the people who do your jobs a bad name? Okay, I can respect that.
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Him being unstated but pretty much canonically shipped with Sci-Twi in EQG starting there... well, it didn't start the fire of my ire, but it keeps it burning
It's probably unlikely, but does Sci-Twi now have all the geodes powers?
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No
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Alright, just a random thought that appeared after reading this. That's fine too.
*Sees Gloriosa in that picture.*
😍
REALLLYYYYYY DUDE THAT WAS A GOOD SONG!!!
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Which song?
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it's a joke
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fair enough
oooooooooh BURN.
WOW......
YOUCH, she is getting wrecked
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