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Foxhelm


Found the show in late 2015, and fell in love with it. I also like D&D (3 and 3.5), Fansty novel and movie, Sci-Fi movies. MarbleMac is Best Ship and Flashlight is a fair second

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This story is a sequel to My Little Mages: The Lost Student


After a week of relative rest following her battle with Tirek, Twilight, with the help of her friends, has made headway into making the Castle of Friendship her new home and the new library for Magiville, when she received a call for help from ... Sunset Shimmer as she tries to make amends for her past and is currently at Midnight Castle, assisting the Shadowbolts find Angus McSteer, the only member of Longhorn's gang to escape justice, while also show she is not who she was.

Meanwhile foes from the earliest days of Mystica, before Celestia and Luna ascended to their thrones, having completed their stellar exile, at the hand of Star Swirl the Great, have returned and have their sights on Mystica, but first, a launch point in needed and Midnight Castle seems just the place.


Can Twilight and the Rainbooms best these 'Dazzlings'?
Will Sunset forever be pledged by her past?
Or will the world be held to the Sirens' song?

Contains Season 7 Finale spoilers, you have been warned

No actual sex, but some ... suggestive content of a ... sensual nature

This My Little Mages AU's take on Rainbow Rocks, build off of 'My Little Mages: The Lost Student'

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 74 )

‘until sunsets no longer at midnight’

Oh, don't tell me. It's supposed to be "until Sunset's no longer at Midnight", isn't it? Worst fictional cryptic prophecy I've ever read. :ajbemused: Hey, but everything else is good. :twilightsmile:

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Its not meant to be cryptic to the reader, Sugarcube.
Anything specific you liked about the rest?

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Also, when I said worst, I meant annoyingly cheesy, not whatever the opposite of cryptic is.

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I know, Darling. Again it's not meant to cryptic to the reader, now the characters going :rainbowhuh: is the intent while the reader is a couple of steps ahead of the characters.

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Then again, I think Pokemon 2000 may have ruined cryptic prophecies for me. :scootangel:

Eh, always the same story with cryptic spells. They never work like you wanted at the end.

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Interesting fact, in the originally Japanese the prophecy called for just a Pokemon trainer its the dub that gave us the 'And the world will turn to Ash'

Hello there. I have to say, this is a great start to the story. The flashback was quite well done, as well the future adventure set-up. Of course, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are excellent. I'm definitely going to be curious to see how you plan to handle this spin on "Rainbow Rocks", but I will also be very willing to be patient, as I more than understand the fact that real world concerns need to come first.

Oh boy, just caught up chronologicly and i can’t wait for the next chapter, i do plan on readying the world map and changing of time after reading this story, cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye

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You're better off just reading them now and come back to this as I update it. Of the two storylines following Twilight's ascension, this one will take the back burner

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I made a pinkie promiss, and you know you don’t break a pinkie promiss

Comment posted by Starlight Nova deleted Mar 13th, 2018
Comment posted by Foxhelm deleted Mar 14th, 2018

Didn't Sunset have to complete an impossible quest before gaining her pardon.

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"Life imprisonment in Stonlingrad,” Celestia said almost too fast, cutting Cinch off. Cinch was taken aback, Stonlingrad was almost impossible to get out of, most of the inmates sentenced to life there died within a year with the exception of Nightshade the disgraced Wonderbolt. If Celestia was offering this, it could come out her nation’s revenue, something the taxpaying subjects would object to on principle, “At my expense.” Celestia finished, seeing Cinch ponder and knowing what gave the baroness pause.

“And should she be pardoned of her crimes in Mystica, that doesn’t translate here, however, if a convincing enough argument can be made, I might agree to commute the sentence.” Cinch was not agreeing, merely stating some of her own terms to this negotiations. Celestia knew that as well, she had dealt with other political powers in various places around the world to be foolish to assume that the deal was set.

Which means that Celestia can pardon Sunset of her crimes in Mystica and can make an argument for her sentence for her crimes in Midnight Castle to be commuted.

Also, Sunset is on parole. Being on parole does not mean one has been pardoned, she still has a sentence to serve, but she's currently allowed to move around, remember the collar that she's wearing

So please, wait and see.

Once more, this is some excellent work on this latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked how well you are combining faithfulness to the SPIRIT of the original movie with more original touches. I'll most certainly be looking forward to more of your work, but will also respect that you have to put real world concerns first.

In the lost student i did notest that one of the minotaurs stuck out when sunset was making a deal with them, i was wondering where that was going and now i know

Wait, never mind, wrong minotaur

Interesting characterization. You gave Adagio a type of seductiveness that is honestly more creepy than alluring, but maybe that was the point.

Well, this will be intriguing to see. More characterization of the Sirens and Sunset working with the shadow five.

Noticed what could be a slight error,

rawr, untouched

Did you mean to say “rare, untouched potential,”

It also looks like you’re missing punctuation near some of the quotation marks, that’s an easy one to miss in the proofreading process.

You’re still not like here

also, it kind of looks like you have a rogue e at the end there.

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No the word choice is not an error.

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Just making sure

Have you finish this one yet?

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Please read the author's note.

Ah, Wesley's famous secret pickup line from The Princess Bride. I don't know why, but it sounds so fitting and natural coming out of Flash. :twilightsmile: Also, no, Twilight! Don't bring Flash! The boy's going to get hypnotized and raped. I just know it. :fluttershyouch: (kicks you out of the plot explosion bunker) You can come back in after 12 hours. :ajbemused:

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Ah, Wesley's famous secret pickup line fromThe Princess Bride.

actually I was referring to another story I wrote,
In the Chambers with Twilight; A My Little Mages Supplement the The Princess Bride reference is accidental.

The boy's going to get hypnotized and raped. I just know it. :fluttershyouch:

You are jumping the gun a little.

(kicks you out of the plot explosion bunker) You can come back in after 12 hours.:ajbemused:

Okay, I deserved that. (leaves a plate of snickerdoodle cookies at the entrance and backs away).

Nice flirting there, good Flash! And poor Spike, you'll have a loooong Guy's Night now to organize.

Again, excellent job on the characterizations, exchanges and future chapter set-up here. I particularly liked the points that were made in the arguments concerning Flash as well as the demonstration of how the Sirens are pretty much amplifying the pre-existing anger concerning certain details. I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this, but I also respect that you do have other matters in your life that require attention too.

I don't know if you ever realized this, but I got the idea of Dash's dismissal of Flash's contributions to the plot with his haters in mind. I feel so evil. :rainbowlaugh: I wonder if anyone is going to get the joshschorcher references that we put in there.

Excellent! Now the battle will be even more heated!

i like all your work. but if i'm honest i enjoy your equestrian girl take the most because you are a little more original. and the story isn't so much a retelling.

i love what you do setting up the midnight castle and the shadowbolts.

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I'm glad you enjoy my EQG answers. I can get why you enjoy the two thus far more than the rest of my works. I think you'll like my answer to Nightmare Rarity and my thus far two supplements.

Well, Flash is developing a new power from his connection with Twilight, but Adagio is using her own magic and emotional manipulation in a way to deal with the potential threats with greater ease. This is getting suspenseful for our heroes.

I've read your other stories, so I know that he's not going to get eaten, but I can't shake the feeling that you're going to have Adagio eventually eat Flash.

I really liked how Pinkie jumped into Dash's arms bridal style. Reminds of that previous stories that hint about her maybe having a thing for Dash. It is nice to see moments like that.

Wow, Dash' is being more of a problem than the Syrens!

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I know, right? Hey, Foxhelm, maybe you should retitle this story How Rainbow Dash Nearly Doomed Humanity? :rainbowlaugh:

Adagio's pendant isn't orange. It's red.

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Adagio's focus gem is orange and she wears it as jewelry from her belly button.

Oh, shoot! I forgot to check the first half of this chapter for editing issues. Whoops. :twilightoops: You've got words and punctuation marks and such missing.

Hey, Foxhelm, I'm not sure if you're ever going to see the movie, but I hope that the extensive historical liberties present in The Greatest Showman doesn't end up ruining this song for you. I don't know how you're planning on resolving the issue with Flash, but I hope the resolution makes up for how much Flash scared me in this chapter.

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I hope that the extensive historical liberties present inThe Greatest Showmandoesn't end up ruining this song for you.

The liberties taken with The Snow Queen by Disney for Frozen doesn't uncut my own enjoyment of 'Let it Go', as well as the cultural liberties (which are actually very few) taken in Moana concerning the songs in it, and while 'You're Welcomed' is the one I use the most, my favorite is actually "We Know The Way"

Hold on. I forgot that I had wanted to comment on this, but was Flash supposed to give me an Anakin Skywalker from Attack of the Clones vibe? :twilightoops:

“Well, now he’s DEAD, and I’m NEVER going to get to see him or talk to him again, and the LAST thing I’m ever going to remember about him was that he got angry with me ALL BECAUSE OF THAT HARLOT!” Twilight shouted back at Sunset as her anger and sorrow grew as she spoke, however, her sorrow overpowered her anger as she then collapsed to the ground, curled into the fetal position, and wept while she still held Flash’s shirt. Sunset could only look at the ceiling at a lost of what the seven could do.

WHY?! WHY?! Are you happy now, haters?! He's dead! :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry: I'm so sad that I can't even find the lever reference funny. Why?! :raritycry:

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He's not dead. He and Twilight make reference to the events of this story during the Crystalling counterpart (I think that's the fic).

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To quote Applejack from the second Nightmare Night episode, "Will you try and keep up the illusion?" :ajbemused:
Now, where was I? Oh, yes.
:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

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