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Foxhelm


Found the show in late 2015, and fell in love with it. I also like D&D (3 and 3.5), Fansty novel and movie, Sci-Fi movies. MarbleMac is Best Ship and Flashlight is a fair second

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This story is a sequel to My Little Mages: Weight of the Crown


Following her lack of involvement greeting of the Magetonian duke and duchess for the Mystica Games, on top of so many things since her coronation and the return of the Elements of Harmony to the Tree of Harmony, Twilight finds herself in doubt about herself and her role as a princess.

However, a mistake from a year ago has come to haunt her as another old foe Celestia and Luna faced has escaped Tartarus, Lord Tirek, the Spell Thief.

In the meantime, the box the Tree of Harmony gave her remains unopened.

Can Twilight solve the riddle of the box?
Can she and her friends defeat Tirek?
Or will Tirek leave Mystica as little more than dust in the wind?


A retelling of Twilight's Kingdom in this My Little Mages AU.
Cover art by Didj and used with permission

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 56 )

1. Nice job breaking it, Blueblood! :facehoof:
2. Is the Moana reference going to be a regular thing with you?
3. Of course, the one guy in a group of girls is always the pack mule.:ajbemused:

I'm getting amped for this story. Looking forward to the next chapter!

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1) :rainbowhuh: what did Blueblood break?
2) maybe:trollestia:
3) Yeah, a 22-year-old soldier carrying more than three 12-year-old girls. :ajbemused:

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1. It's based on the name of a trope. There should be an entry for it on TVtropes.
2. Have you considered the coconut? :trollestia:
3. Oops. I misread that part. I thought he was carrying everything. :twilightsheepish:

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1) OH!:derpytongue2:
2) I could be worse, I might just not 'Let it go! Let it go!':trollestia:
3) 'Hey it's okay, it's okay, you're welcome, I am just an ordinary demi-guy!'... I regret nothing

Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the story started. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Again, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places; as well as on the recaps. I particularly liked the (VERY understandable) reluctance on the Princesses' part to send Discord unsupervised. That is a very good detail.

Unfortunately, Blueblood couldn't have played into Tirek's hands better if he were actually on Tirek's payroll (then again, for all we know, he IS). . Sorry about that (sheepish grin) I just couldn't resist a morbid joke for some reason.


Of course, I WILL be looking forward to more of this, but will also be more than willing to respect that real world concerns have to come first.

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I knew I should have done an Author's note explaining my intent concerning Blueblood ...:facehoof:

And here begins the new saga!

Nice insert of Blueblood in the story, as douchey as possible!

And good reference of Moana. Loved that song!

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Nice chapter, looking forward to what happens next. Also, interested in how you'll handle the "posse" foreshadowing thing.

Oooh! Fluttercord. :raritywink:
Also, did Tirek just Discord Discord? :applejackunsure: I'm assuming that's what happened when Discord started changing color.

Hold on. Regarding your author's note, is Blueblood meant to be Prince Wu in this story?

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To Quote Bane from The Dark Knight Rises, "Which shall break first, your spirit or your body?" in this case Discord's spirit and not his back was broken

Hmm, Discord's talk about Fluttershy sounds like a guy who doesn't realize he has a crush because he's not used to feeling that kind of emotion.

Not much I can say beyond very good job on the latest chapter. The exchanges were quite well done (particularly the one between Tirek and Discord and the one between the former element bearers) as were all the characterizations. And, yeah, the points you made in the author's notes were quite well done.

Of course, it wouldn't take much intelligence for the demigods to realize that no matter WHO got the power, they would HAVE TO fight Tirek eventually (anybody even moderately Genre Savvy would realize THAT), so it would make the most sense for the most experienced demigod to hold on to the power (in this case, this would be Celestia) - giving the power to the LEAST experienced just makes the others look like cowards.

After all, it would make a lot more sense for Twilight and her friends to get the final key later on by helping out the people of Our Town learn about REAL friendship (assuming there was a way for them to find out about the town's existence that didn't require the special map).

Then again, while it would make a lot more sense, it wouldn't be anywhere near as climatic.

But I digress.

At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also respect the fact that real world concerns have to come first.

Welp, nice chapter! Long and wordy, just like I love them.

Looking forward to the next, and probably last chapter!

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Thank you. Any thoughts on this one you would like to share?

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Well, I thought this chapter was pretty good, but, I feel like there could've been a little more conflict from Discord in regards to his betrayal. I'm also curious to see how you connect the G1 characters in this storyline.

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You have to remember, Discord is used to being the puppeteer, he's used to be the one messing around with other's psyches, he's not used to being on the other end and has been a puppeteer for so long, he didn't think he could ever be the puppet. Also, tricksters are often victims of their own pranks.

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Hmm, you make a good point. I've recently seen a crash course episode on trickster stories, and some of them do end up the victims of their own schemes. Carry on, and I look forward to your next update.

How does a chapter so heavy and serious end up so funny at the same time?! I can't tell if I'm amused or horrified. :fluttershbad::rainbowlaugh::applejackconfused:

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Discord... Pinkie Pie... Discord and Pinkie Pie are part of the reason. But yeah, there can be humor found in something serious.

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Furthermore, there's something oddly humorous about the two sisters getting into a shouting match with each other and Blueblood attempting to be useful and possibly developing feelings for Rarity. :pinkiesmile:

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I was not intending the Sisters' shouting scene to be humorous, but yeah. As for Blueblood, only time will tell:raritywink:

Hey there. Thanks greatly for getting this next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. I really liked the explanations you provided for pretty much every detail and how well you combine episode faithfulness with added information. The action, characterizations, exchanges and climax set-up are all well done in all the right places. I'll very certainly be looking forward to more of this, but will also be willing to be patient. After all, real world concerns have to come first and inspiration is not always easy to come by. I get both of those.

Nice, really nice. But I was expecting a bit more conflict in the betrayal scene, instead of it going like the show. Or to be different in another way.

Still, a good chapter preparing for the next, full of action!

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you have to remember, Discord is used to being the manipulation, not the manipulated.

" ... you can start by destroying your window."

Figured this would be what bites them, but not by recreating the original scene.

I figured Tirek would notice the destroyed window, wonder what Celestia had tried to conceal,
and restore it, thereby learning about Twilight.

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That would make sense... but you're forgetting about Discord.

Tirek could not help but have a good laugh at Discord’s antics and he started to walk the hallway again, “Amusing. But we have no time for such things. Even without their magic, with the princesses out of the way, there is noth–” Tirek paused as he looked at a window showing Twilight’s ascension into her demigod state. Turning to Discord, assuming it was some sort of joke on the Erisadies’ part, “ is this meant to be
humorous ?!” there looked to be a vein or an artery along his forehead that looked like it was about to burst.
Discord turned to Tirek and waving his paw and talon to the sides like someone denying and action, “Oh, no, I haven't touched that one yet,” the embodiment of chaos lied, he knew Tirek was a bigger threat than anyone or anything else, he too knew better than to trust his partner fully at all other points.

Wait. This part confused me a bit. So, Twilight destroyed her window, and then, Discord used the broken glass to create a different image, right? So, did Discord restore the window after he was done playing with it or what? I think I might have missed something. :applejackunsure:

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You're forgetting the window Tirek destroyed. Discord in short restored the one Twilight destroyed while no one was looking after making a 'new' window from the one Tirek destroyed.

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Oh, okay. I think I might have rushed through Tirek breaking his window the first time. Oops. :twilightsheepish:

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It's okay, Sugarcube.

Pinkie’s hair seemed to fizzle and fuzz, “What do you know? I had some leftover magic after all.” Pinkie’s hair then deflated like a popped balloon as all of the items in Pinkie’s hair fell out of it and her pockets burst to empty themselves of their contents too. “Well, it looks like that’s the last bit of magic I have.” No one pressed the matter, having long ago realized that to do so would compromise their sanity.

Ah, the magic of plot convenience. Of course. :ajsmug:

"You mean Firefly's pipedream actually got off the ground?" Surprise asked in turn. Pinkie nodded. "Tell me more, tell me more! Did I have children and grandchildren, I always wanted to name a son or grandson Holder Colbalstone and or Tanzanite Thrower," Surprise couldn't contain herself, neither could Pinkie.

Oh my gosh! :pinkiegasp: Speaking of which, when is you-know-who going to be reborn? :trixieshiftright:

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Ah, the magic of plot convenience. Of course. :ajsmug:

:eeyup:

Oh my gosh! :pinkiegasp: Speaking of which, when is you-know-who going to be reborn? :trixieshiftright:

patience is a virtue, Darling.:raritywink:

Once more, you did an excellent job on the final chapter. Again, the action, exchanges, characterizations, general wrap-up and future adventure set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked the added G1 references particularly the spirit forms of Twilight 1, Applejack 1, Sparkler, Firefly, Posey and Surprise and, in general, the added details concerning the chest and the detail of the acorns .

All in all, this was a very good story and I will definitely be looking forward to more of your work. However, I will also be quite willing to be patient since I know real world concerns have to come first.

Amazing job! With Tirek being in a more "close" size to Twilight, their fight was more great to imagine!

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