When Twilight loses control of her magic, she finds herself in the realm of the the eternally damned, Tartarus. In order to survive she is forced to learn and change. However, when Twilight finally escaped from Tartarus, how will Equestria deal with a Twilight who has been forged in hellfire?
Author's Note: I want to point out that the Dark and Gore tags are not all consuming. They are there only by necessity. There are going to be some dark material in here, but nothing grim.
On the same note, Twilight is the only anthro in the story, and there is an in-story reason for it, so don't let that big nasty Anthro tag scare you.
One final thing. It has been some time since I've done any real work on this story. To make clear how long, this portion of the author note was added July 5th, 2019. This story is currently sitting in that little area between "Hiatus" and "Cancelled". Time will tell if I revitalize it.
So this story has a version of Tirek is not out to conquer Equestria then? I will track to see where this story goes! Also great to see you back!
Can't wait to see where you take this. Great so far.
The other story which I had read some time ago which had Princess Twilight in Tartarus was a very dark affair which she didn't really survive her experience.
Wondering upon how dark this story shall become...
Very interesting concept I've only seen once before. If you need some inspiration I could link you that story.
Also can't wait for next chapter.
7239358 It'll touch on gore and the like, but nothing real dark. This is more of a story where Twilight kicks ass and takes names. I originally intended on it being a dark story, but in the end I decided on comedy.
7239510 If it's not too much trouble, I would appreciate that. You can never have too much inspiration.
Thank you everyone for the... surprising response to this. I woke up to 13 notifications, most of which were favorites and watches. You all rock.
Hey there. Thanks greatly for getting this story started. I really appreciate you going to the effort. As usual, very good job on the exchange, emotional content, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. And since you mention this is primarily a comedy, I'm guessing you are also planning on going for the Comically Invincible (Anti)-Heroine route (though I will freely admit I could be wrong on that). Now, I have a couple of suggestions for later chapters (note: later chapters, NOT necessarily the next chapter in either case):
1. About the time of the Summer Sun Celebration, Celestia could send Cadance to oversee said Summer Sun Celebration (after all, it seems logical that the Alicorn of Love would be a very good candidate for the Element of Magic [the Element of Magic is ALSO the Element of Friendship, and what is love, but merely friendship intensified?]).
2. At an appropriate point (I'm guessing that Twilight is probably going to either escape from Tartarus or be released from it just about the same time Nightmare Moon escapes), Twilight can snarl to Nightmare Moon how she has survived villains and monsters in Tartarus that would make eternal night look like a kindergarten prank.
and 3. When Twilight returns, she could chew Celestia out for the lack of logic in the fact that, after a thousand years, she has not had her ponies develop weapons AT LEAST as powerful as the Elements of Harmony, even though the place she has spent so many years trapped in has developed weapons powerful enough to make the Elements look like a pea-shooter in the SAME amount of time.
That is, of course, assuming you like the ideas enough to use them. If not, I profusely apologize for wasting your time and still look forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Of course, if my guess is wrong, I profusely apologize for wasting your time.
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this story was intended to be dark so it might help with the darker aspects of yours. its called
cracks in reality
Hope this helps you a bit. hyped to see how it turns out as badass twilight fic with a bonus that is comdey.
Welp, Twilight in deep %^&@ now.
Not much I can say other than, once again, excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places in this latest chapter. It may have taken a while, but was definitely worth the wait. I'll keep trying to think of other stuff and will definitely still be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Hmmmm, interesting setup!
I would hope that this story will be different than Twilight's Inferno by PaulAsaran. I did not like that story.
I get the feeling that Celestia will not be able to find Twilight and she will go into a deep depression at the thought of losing her student.
Is Twilight ever going back or staying? If she goes back is she good or bad? Does she side with Tirek or not? Is Tirek draining her of her magic, is she helpless? Love the chapters they give me more questions. How does her friends relationship change? Hope to see more.
Hey there. Thanks again for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I will keep trying to think of stuff for this and also still be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Can we get to the funny stuff? It is getting kinda dark here.
7277399 Hate to say it, but about the first five chapters are going to be a little dark. The humor should kick off once Twilight's back in Equestria. Just take comfort in the fact that I'm only giving brief descriptions of the really gruesome stuff, instead of paragraphs dedicated to describing her pain in horrid detail.
I actually have a couple funny things planned for the next chapter. Nothing grand, but might get a chuckle or two out of everyone.
7277487 to lighten the mood
... I'm deciding whether or not I want to know what exactly happened here...
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. As usual, splendid job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. And, yeah, the "tea chat" Celestia and Cadence had WAS pretty amusing at first. :-D I can't help much concerning the name of the cult, but I WILL still be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Rats! I was hoping you had more chapters in the pipeline bit I guess now we enter the waiting game. This chapter was funny but I get the feeling that Celestia will not like what has happened to her beloved student. About how old was Twilight at the beginning of this story?
7279379 Roughly? I like to think she was at least eighteen before Celestia went and gave her the responsibility of overseeing the Summer Sun Celebration, so somewhere between sixteen and eighteen. I think I'll settle on sixteen.
And fear not, I managed to crank out another chapter today. I'll probably post it in a bit after I'm happy with how it looks. Cyberfire has enough on his plate right now without me adding to it, so I'm trying to take my time and edit everything.
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If I could be so bold, but hold off publishing it for a week so we stop getting so spoiled! I would not want somebody to stumble across this story and think you put out material as fast as you have been. Plus it should give you some time to spot any errors before you publish it.
7279411 Probably a good idea. I'm banging my head on the wall over how to handle Twilight's actual return scene, so that'll give me time to figure that out.
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Well as you know if you would like any help never be afraid to PM me! I would have her doing a Big Damn Heroes entrance. She arrives just as Nightmare Moon is about to win.
Wow that was sad, but makes alot of sense.
Hey there. Thanks immensely for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places.
Hey, I just thought of something for the next chapter (or the one after that):
1. Maybe the following exchange could take place:
Starlight: (after she and Sunburst return to their Equestria via a dimensional portal)Another alternate universe, another failure.
Sunburst: Well, I can't help thinking that researching alternate universes still puts us on the right track, even if we keep getting the wrong universe. Though, I get the feeling that this time, we ended up going at least a couple of years in the future in addition to an alternate universe.
Starlight: Yeah. THAT universe's Twilight turning out to be a reincarnated super-hero from yet another alternate universe was certainly not something I expected.
Sunburst: Yeah, but THAT universe's biggest surprise (and not in a pleasant way) was that universe's version of YOU.
Starlight: Yeah. I can't say I blame THAT universe's Twilight and her friends for the initial misunderstanding. Especially since that universe's me WAS just enough like me to remind me of how I could have turned out if I wasn't shown the error of my ways. Still, we discovered thirteen different alternate universes in the past year and NONE of them turned out to be the right universe.
Sunburst: Yeah. There's been a Twilight in each universe we visited, but it's always been that universe's NATIVE Twilight. Still, we ARE getting better at the "finding and exploring other universes" part.
Then again, I will completely understand if you don't like the idea. And, at any rate, I will still be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
A quick question, when did Twilight regain her lost eye? In the last chapter you said that she had lost her left eye to a demon, but in this chapter you state that she rolled her eyes implying that she had two. Also I now see Twilight being a female Cable, any enemy she faces is so screwed.
7292198 Thanks! But... I see where Twilight widened her eyes, but I don't see where she rolled her eyes. Was this in another chapter?
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Sorry I had it rolled in my head for some reason. You got it correct!
Already pretty interesting. But what i love most about this is how Tirek is not only the Lord of Tartarus: but is seemingly as close to a god as you can get if he can do things like this with such ease. I'm looking forward to reading this.:)
So begins the time Twilight will most likely spend as the apprentice of Lord Tirek. And with his......disposition, i'm sure it's going to be "loads" of fun. A shame for everypony else, though. They'll most likely go mad trying to find Twilight, and fail.:(
This is really getting good. And at least, while becoming something of a "lethal protector" as they're called, Twilight still has her morality to hold on to. Yet what's also interesting is that Tirek is apparently not as much like the other demons as one would think. Maybe this one is more like his G4 counterpart than i anticipated. I hope there'll be a chapter that explains how he came to rule Tartarus, and become so damn powerful. It should make for an interesting backstory.
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting this next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. And I understand concerning Cyberfire. Unfortunately, I don't have the time and energy to do any editing myself.
But any rate, once again, excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the touch of Sunset and Sunburst being twin siblings. I will definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Glad to see the update, and curous to learn what happened with Susnet, where she came froma nd how did Celestia damaged thinsg betwen them....Sorry from what I learned about Celestia or Princess Celestia she sually half at fault for Sunset leaving her, or being exiled.
Sure Sunburst will be wanting to know as well, and WHY she didn't tell him!
Very interesting developments. In Equestrian time, how long is it until the 1000th Summer Sun Celebration
Crap Twilight actually be like Cable when she shows back up. Twilight will be old when she gets back , unless Tirek somehow slowed down her aging, she is going to be very off put when she returns. The next question is Twilight like how she was in Equestria Girls or more anthro?
7377145 I'd say about four months and a day. Maybe four months and TWO days.
7377209 I'd say probably more along the lines of anthro, though I will admit I could be wrong.
*sees no next button* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
So Twilight will still possibly need the Elements. I hope Twilight becomes Sunset's parole officer cause she is not going to take any crap from little miss bad attitude.
7383023 Maaaaaaybe!
Hey there. Thanks immensely for getting this next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I REALLY LIKED Twilight's "Big Darn (Anti)-Heroes" moment (hey, give me a break. I don't typically use profanity on public forums, even if I respect the rights of others to do so) as well as Twilight and Nightmare's battle banter. As for Starlight and Sunburst's whereabouts, I have a feeling we'll be finding those out, if not in the next chapter, then at least in a relatively near-future chapter. At any rate, I will definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
7384195 Thank you.
7384315 You're quite welcome.
I'm guessing it's the complete lack of headbutting during the fight.
At least Twi got an exciting reception on her return!
7386625 *Holds up finger*... Ow... I can't imagine Twilight doing that with a shattered horn on her head. It would probably hurt just a bit too much.
7393224 Ooo but just think how much it would hurt the other guy!
Hmm . . . Good story. It could use a little polish, though I can't put my finger on what could actually be done to provide it.
Not to sound whiny, but how is the next chapter progressing for you?
7552923 Currently seven hundred and forty three (743) words in. Not nearly enough to post on, but it's slowly climbing. I just need one of those "Ah-ha!" moments. Thanks for checking on it!