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BlueSun52


Hey there, everypony! I'm a big time video gaming nerd and love to write stories and make art. Hope that you all like my stories and become good friends!

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Follow the story of a human who has died in his world and has come to Equestria to defend it from a coming darkness. Reborn with magic and strength, his must team up with the bearers of harmony to fight against monsters of all kinds of form and learn what it means to be a hero.

This fanfic takes place in the middle of season 3 of MLP:FIM.

Chief Editor: thetreepony

Chapters (18)
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Comments ( 64 )
Comment posted by BlueSun52 deleted Sep 29th, 2013

3274907 Thank you, this is my very first fanfic.

very very veeeery interesting in my opinion

3287716 Thank you, I appreciate it.:pinkiehappy:

Whenever I plan to release a chapter for the weekend, I get too impatient about it and I end up posting it.:twilightblush:

this is going to be fun.:pinkiesmile::twilightsmile::yay:

Then went to the grabbed everything he needed and went back to his car. Then he just remembered that he forgot the milk, so he ran back to the store, only to get hit by a car.

...Wow. What bad luck this guy has. :rainbowderp:

"INDEED, NOW LISTEN TO ME CAREFULLY," said the voice.

STOP SHOUTING!!

3475613 That's what happens when you forget the milk.

nice chapter.:pinkiecrazy::heart::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile::yay:

ok its an ok chapter just why did you have to give a snake a lisp I think that's stereotyping man

Hawke asked,"WHO ARE YOU?"

Twilight then asked, "WHO ARE YOU!?"

"OH GOD YOU CAN TALK?!", he replied.

Twilight answered, "YES I CAN TALK, SO CAN YOU!?!"

"IN ENGLISH?!?," he asked.

"WHAT’S ENGLISH??? I TALK IN EQUESTREN!!," she replied.

Hawke then asked, "WHAT’S EQUESTRAN???"

"I GUESS IT WOULD BE ENGLISH FOR YOU!," She answered and asked, "AND WHY ARE WE STILL YELLING?"

"I DON’T KNOW AT FIRST I WAS SCARED BUT NOW IT SEEMED LIKED FUN TO ME!!!," he answered.

:rainbowlaugh:

Is his name Hawke or Markus?

I always liked calling the big Timberwolf a Lumberwolf.:pinkiehappy:

3566693. Oh sorry about that its hawke. I originally used my name for the character until i came up with one.

Wait.

Snake lower body.
Human upper body.
Snake head.

A Naga!

Ah hah hah hah hah hah hahhahah to funn in the yelling part

Is the ponies human or is it just hawke?

3856943 no it's just Hawke. Everypony else is in anthro form.

For the love of Celestia (breaks T.V.) what the *squee* (throws computer out the window) I'm gonna murder that son of a *squee* (repeatedly beats the computer with a sledge hammer) that mother *squee*(throws a grenade at the computer) he thinks he can get away with this well that mother *squee*ing peice of *squee* (the grenade blows up) HE WILL PAY (morphs into the ghostrider) *distorded voice* DIIIIIIIIIIIE!!!!!!!!!!!!

One would think, that if someone will find himself in some kind of limbo and a mysterious voice would suddenly appear, that same someone would at least began to panic and scream. (Sorry for the spalling, english is not my main language)

3914416 I guess I didn't think of that when I was starting to write the story.:facehoof:

3913127 That is probably the most interesting comment I have ever got on any of my stories, in the last few months ever.....of all time.:rainbowderp:

3916203 where is that mother *squee*ing piece of *squee* he thinks he can get away with this we'll think again that *squee* will pay where is he so I can burn his soul to a crisp... *distorded voice* well... TELL ME!!!!

cool!!!!!

Hey man I know you can make it good it's been a good story so far and I'd love to see how it ends can't wait for the the last chapter, and don't feel pressured to finish, nothing ever ends well rushed

4062930 Thanks for the fave:twilightsmile: and I'm glad that you've enjoyed the story so far.:pinkiehappy:

Great story. I can't wait for the sequel.

Been meaning to finish reading this and great story and cant wait for the sequel.

Loved this story:heart: can't wait for the next installment.

your literacy skills are horribly amateurish :twilightangry2: but thats ok because ponies..... yep just ponies :yay:

4133437 Yeah, my writing skills were terrible back then:twilightblush:, but they have greatly improved over time and I hope to keep on improving as I write more.:twilightsmile:

I think this song suits Hawke very well...
Far From Home by Vic Mignogna

4159384 I love it!:heart: It does fit him well!:pinkiehappy:

3566971

i like to call them king wolfs.

Aside from the need for an editor I'd say the story is pretty good.

Don't you just hate yuan-ti?

:rainbowlaugh: i love how the voice is just yelling at him. ominous voice be like: :flutterrage: ARE YOU READY FOR YOUR DESTINY OF EPICALLY AMAZING ADVENTURE!? WELL ARE YOU!?:flutterrage:

I seriously hope, for my sake, that this story is much better than the cover art

5136485 Well it was my first story I have ever written and I didn't really know I had very bad grammer problems as I was writing the story, but still I'm sorry that it wasn't to your liking.

My biggest peeve has been your confusion of "than" for "then." "Than" is used for comparing things, while "then" is used to show a progression of events.

Hawke asked,"WHO ARE YOU?"

Twilight then asked, "WHO ARE YOU!?"

"OH GOD YOU CAN TALK?!", he replied.

Twilight answered, "YES I CAN TALK, SO CAN YOU!?!"

"IN ENGLISH?!?," he asked.

"WHAT’S ENGLISH??? I TALK IN EQUESTREN!!," she replied.

Hawke then asked, "WHAT’S EQUESTRAN???"

"I GUESS IT WOULD BE ENGLISH FOR YOU!," She answered and asked,

"AND WHY ARE WE STILL YELLING?"

"I DON’T KNOW AT FIRST I WAS SCARED BUT NOW IT SEEMED LIKED FUN TO ME!!!," he answered.

:rainbowlaugh: I laughed for about 5 min.

Pinkie can really piss me off sometimes.

Deus ex octopus

3570590
I KNOW WHAT THAT IS YAY

So he fought Drapion and Heracross

It was another day for Hawke as he was looking up to the sky wondering what would be like to actually fly among them. While he was day dreaming, Twilight called up to him and said, "HAWKE! STOP DAY DREAMING AND GET US OUT OF THIS MESS!"

This is when you know you've been fighting too many monsters when you daydream while fighting them

Fool! For letting his guard down.

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