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ilbgar


I am a young writer living in NH. I write stories about my favorite character, Twilight Sparkle.

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Twilight's abilities stem from her Gamer power which makes her life like an RPG. How will this affect her life? Let's find out!

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Twilight vs Zombies?
Yes please!

...Hell ID...
Twilight vs Demons, Devils, and other eldtiched abomination s and unholy entities.
Please!?

In the original stat description the "Regen" stats are described as being X%/minute but in later mentions they're listed as X/minute. Are these displays still in percentages or are they being shown as specific amounts?

I suppose it's a good thing she's unlikely to be able to increase her core stats outside of leveling up from now on, she's already 2-shotting Boss mobs of more than double her level...

Twilight nodded. "You simply push mana out of your hand with the desire to create one." She raised her hoof and the area around them cracked and shattered before revealing an identical real world. "Exiting them is the opposite." Celestia finished. "Now give it a try." she suggested.

hoof?

sweet! i'm very excited to see where this all goes. but i'm curious as to if she's going to have any other abilities you normally see in these kinds of games. like forging, or something non-magic related. well, i guess it can be counted as magic related, since i can't see enchanting not being in here, and it would make sense to forge, and then enchant, her own armor and weapons.

5779705 It's XRegen per minute. and that's over a minute, not every minute. There's a difference.

5780078 Well, the manga this is a crossover of has crafting (although it really isn't gone into after the initial discovery) so it would not be a stretch in the slightest for there to be a crafting system.

5780482 I knew it would be done gradually with a small amount each "tick" (each "tick" is generally equivalent to a "frame" and thus there are usually ~60 ticks/second in offline PC games such as Diablo 2) that's why elemental DoT (Damage over Time) abilities tend to be deemed weak (resistance gets applied to the damage every tick many times causing it to round to 0)

The query is whether the regen per tick is a value that will add up to that number over a minute or if it's a value that will add up to (MaxP/100)*PRegen.

5781347 Let me put it this way. If someone regenerated 240/min, that's 4 per second. There is no random element involved.

5781746 Okay so it's flat points. Don't know why you think I'm referencing a random value though...

Glad to see that the anthro thing was tossed, I prefer my non-pony variants to be the result of EQG or transformations...

5785195 Yes. I believe I mentioned that at some point.

In case you're curious. Twilight might be below Level 20 at his point, but she managed to earn 7 Level worth of points in Wis alone. She also earned almost 9 Levels worth of points in Int, to say nothing of the points earned for the others. That puts her actual ability Level in the thirties or more. Thus, she is quite capable of smashing through enemies that her Level says she shouldn't be able to.

5785288 To be specific, she has 311 points counting the 20 she hasn't spent yet. That's equivalent to Level 62. Still think that Boss shouldn't have gotten two-shotted?

Think you should make a chapter in the old story talking about how you've made the reboot . I see a lot of great stories that no one knows about because the author forgets to do this

5785299 sorry but this one is crap and usless. the gamer works because the normal people have no magic or special moves. equestrea has monsteres and ghost and stuff, and the people who live thier also has specail moves. you whir doing good with the other one but now your just making a rip off by replacing names . wtf hoof. im preaty sure twilight could already use mana bolt and she could already use it as a wepon. after all she fought tirek with attack magic so wtf;. how would transfering it to your hoof shoot it out of your horn. by copping them you ruin the story. go back to the old one and just use that. its more original than this one and you could have created a story line with the kingdome hearts. oh and the gods in equestrea shouls be lvl 200 maby 300

Ahem *SQUEEEEEE* Uuuh I mean. Cool.

Sooo is twilight going to have the party skill? Or would that just make everything to OP

5792265 Yes. It's going to have a limiter on it though.

Gonna be honest: not as crazy with this one as with the old version. In this we are starting out with Twilight who just woke up with all this and is leveling ridiculously fast. I'd imagine she would reach lvl ten around when she goes to ponyville after a tutorial with Celestia before she leaves for the Summer Sun Celebration. In the old version, while Twilight did get reborn with her advanced abilities which was also bad, it at least established a conflict early on with Chrysalis killing Twilight in her first life and making her restart. Besides the Legion zombie which she had created, we have no real conflict, no real drive to go for besides the Nightmare moon thing which in gaming and the show's story would have been akin to a prologue end boss. You also had many more options with the old version with the alternate game modes. True, those would be best as side chapters, but it allows Twilight to be exposed to a wider variety of situations and we can see her develop through them. We also see some interesting cameos in the last one. I for one enjoyed the arena fight with Alucard as it pitted her with realizing she could not win outright but had to run out the clock. Overall, this version just seems too... underdeveloped to really stand on it's own at the moment.

5795159 read the manga not this because this is just a butcherd version

5793082 >> ilbgar sorry but this one is crap and usless. the gamer works because the normal people have no magic or special moves. equestrea has monsteres and ghost and stuff, and the people who live thier also has specail moves. you whir doing good with the other one but now your just making a rip off by replacing names . wtf hoof. im preaty sure twilight could already use mana bolt and she could already use it as a wepon. after all she fought tirek with attack magic so wtf;. how would transfering it to your hoof shoot it out of your horn. by copping them you ruin the story. go back to the old one and just use that. its more original than this one and you could have created a story line with the kingdome hearts. oh and the gods in equestrea shouls be lvl 200 maby 300


she can summon now... THY COULD ALREADY DO THAT IN EQUESTRIA AS SEEN IN G1 WHEN THE OLD GOAT SUMMONS DEMONS

5793082 and why do you have to butchar a good magwa. this is a litteral rip off of the magea because its exactly what he does and she is doing nothing different except for the spiral bull crap you tried to mix in.
and for the people who want the magwa http://mangafox.me/manga/the_gamer/c001/1.html
just read than click on the image to go further

5793082 oh and dude you hade 500 befor you did this

5797443 ...Why are you still reading this?

5801244 because i want you to go back to the athure one and not to copy storys. fan fiction maens that the fans take a caracter and makes a cool story, not takes characters and copy a story

5801400 OH YES, because everyone loved that one. If you're here just to pester me into going back to the other story, then you're wasting your time. Seriously, who reads a fanfic just so they can tell the author to go back to their other story?

wub it!!!!!!! though i liked twilight the traveler a bit more than this, this is a excellent piece of work :twilightsmile: though i have already read the manga so i know its basic premise, i love it! :rainbowkiss: though if i could suggest ( not meaning to be rude ) if you could add you own ideas to the story like obviously not make her OP but if you do add more twists turns and a monster or two :rainbowdetermined2: take things from your childhood your adult life and your entertainment :D plz forgive me if this feels like im pushing you around or it sounds like im forcing you to make more what i am saying is that thank you for the good stories you've made so far and i hope you add some of your personal creativity to this one instead of following exactly like the gamer manga :heart: thanks bye

--- MuffinLord4Life ruler of the ninth realm of muffania

Gamers were supposed to advance quickly given the proper tools and motivation, but to essentially become invincible to conventional mages in a matter of hours was terrifying growth.

Indeed. Please be careful, as making Twilight too OP will just make physical conflicts either pointless (she stomps all comers) or silly (DBZ-style power increases until planets are exploding left and right). You can still have social conflict, of course, especially if Twilight wants to socialize but has trouble connecting with non-Gamers, unless she is able to dump skill points into friend-making.

Is this story going to go anywhere soon or is Twilight just going to level up for years and then kick Nightmare Moon in the crotch, the end?

If you don't mind some unsolicited advice, look at the manga you're basing your story on. Yes, he goes around beating up monsters and leveling up, but that's not the entire story. He has friends, strange encounters, girls he likes. The manga is a story of the life he lives as a video-game-character-like entity. Your story isn't a story about a life. It's a training montage. Think of a movie with a training montage in it. Rocky, Rambo, it doesn't really matter. But imagine that that training montage lasts for the entire two hour movie except for thirty seconds at the start to introduce a bad guy and thirty seconds at the end where he goes up to the bad guy and rips his head off.

Don't write that story.

Maybe you already have all this in mind, and you just haven't gotten to it yet. If that's the case, then it's not as much of a big deal that it's just taking a few chapters to get into the plot. But I don't know that, so I wrote the above.

And, well, maybe you DO want to write an endless training montage. And, hell, maybe there are some people that want to read it. But not many.

umm it stops :fluttercry::raritycry:

next chapter plz :pinkiehappy:
(just do it at youre own pace)

Not as good as the first run but a fun read none the less~:pinkiehappy:

So, you've flat-out made this a crossover with the korean manhwa "The Gamer"... alrighty then.

5806390 "The Gamer", and technically it's a Korean Manhwa (meaning you read it left-to-right).

it's a good thing I thought to check if you started this yet, I wouldn't have found it otherwise... though this time around it just feels like a slightly bastardized ponified clone of "The Gamer", not bringing much new to the table. I have faith that it will get better though.

I loved your Twilight: The Gamer, up until the extended fic-within-a-fic. (I didn't mind the Kingdom Hearts, I just think it would have worked better as a side story, like "this is what happened while Twilight was Keyblade Master Twilight".) This, however, just feels like an edited carbon-copy of The Gamer. I was looking forward to seeing how Twilight progressed, but it seems that she's just doing the same things as Jee-Han, with Celestia standing in for Sung-Il. (Of course, it's certainly within Twilight's character to dump points into INT ^_^) I'm still reading because I enjoyed your earlier writing and I hope to regain that feeling once Equestria-specific plot events (the Summer Sun celebration, meeting her friends, etc.) start affecting the path of our protagonist.

I'm glad I decided to check on you otherwise who knows when/if I would have found this fic. Also the previous sentence was a none too subtle hint that maybe you should post one more chapter on the canceled version saying the new story's up.
Now story criticisms, you might be pulling alittle to much from the manga only reason it's only a small problem is your running out of material you can nick without getting ridiculous. Anyway glad to see the new fic can't wait to see where it goes, and Thanks for Writing!

5907632 you know what makes no sence, she knew no magic in the beginging, i call bull shit on that, also aperinatly she needs to consentrate it in your hoof, he is just compleatly stealing the story, plus all of theos magic spells can be done in the real my little pony univers

5950463 You know, I have yet to begin the Ponyville section of her life, she's just building up her abilities right now. Since she has the Gamer Power too, it makes perfect sense that she would end up wih similar abilities, at least a first. Things will change up for her soon.

5953183 nun of us want to just be reading cut secans pluse this is strsit steal form the mang, expesaly since you made her use magic from her hoves and since she did not already clow magic bolt or a magic attack which we can clearly see her using in bthe canterlot weding

5953886 One, this is Twilight from birth with no past lives that she can remember. Two, work on your spelling, I don't know what some of those words were supposed to be!

5954120 story plot stolen, carbin copy of story, transfering energy to hoof to use magic from horn, just gringing. your bigest problem in the other story was just showin g skills and copying everything from the show and than adding a small something at the end. your doing that here.

5960440 I'm going to tell you something: If you don't like the story, don't read it. It's as simple as that. Also, if you're going to give the author criticism after criticism, suggest ways they can improve.

5960440 I believe I said I wasn't taking suggestions from people any more since doing so ruined my original version of this. Things will diverge from being a copy of The Gamer, which is kind of on purpose, but only when I say so. It's my story, and if you hate it so much, why are you still reading it?

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