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Foxhelm


Found the show in late 2015, and fell in love with it. I also like D&D (3 and 3.5), Fansty novel and movie, Sci-Fi movies. MarbleMac is Best Ship and Flashlight is a fair second

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This story is a sequel to My Little Mages: Enchanted Enigma Elixir


It has been less than twenty-four hours since Twilight Sparkle completed Star Swirl the Great's unfinished magic and she is at the top of the world. She has recently been crowned a princess and has ascended into a demigod. All of Mystica, it's protectorates, tributaries and allies have come to Chantalot to affirm their fidelity and loyalty to the new princess. However, in the ocean of well-wishers, one in the crowd plots ill for Twilight.

Deep in the night, this one makes her move, as a former student of Celestia and her own band of cohorts is able to steal the all but the Elements of Honesty and losing the Element of Magic through a magical mirror in the process.

Now, Twilight and her friends have to venture through the mirror after the thieves, reclaim the stolen Elements of Generosity, Laughter, Loyalty, and Kindness and find the lost Element of Magic all the while keeping the remaining Element they have before the former mentee of Celestia and her mentee force the Elements to attune to them. To make matters worse they have to wait a week before they can use the mirror to return to Chantalot.

Can Twilight et al reclaim the Elements? Or Well the Elements of Harmony be forced to have new bearers?

This AU's take on 'Equestria Girls' taking elements from 'The Friendship Games'.

Cover art by Didj and used with permission.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 93 )

Uhuh, this will be an hell of a ride, in the best way obviously.

Looks like Sunset’s plan won’ t be a simple “sneak and grab”, but something more spectacular.

1.“From a true, true friend!” the five sang together, which brought a much *need smile on Twilight’s face.
2.This forced Twilight’s friends to go ahead without her, not that they were going to wait bored, Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo ran to Princess Luna and tackled her in a group embrace, not that Luna *mind it, little sisters have to stick together.
3.Rainbow Dash also disembarked when she saw someone she never expected, a harpy, *grant she was with a small group of harpies, but she stood out to Rainbow Dash with her gamboge brown wings, gold talons.

1*needed
2*minded
3*granted

Not much I can say other than sorry I took so long to get around to reviewing this. Nothing to blame for that except self-admitted laziness. Still, you once again did an excellent job on the start of this story. Once again, I love, not just the characterizations, but also the bits and pieces of increased detail AND how you make more sense than the actual source material (particularly with the setting AND a more elaborate plan by the villains) and include elements of later stories. Since we read a story that takes place after this, we already know this is going to turn out all right, but it is still going to be great to see HOW.

I'll definitely be looking forward to more, but will be quite willing to be patient.

Starting off the chapter with Flash and Twi kissing? It's almost as if you want me to like this story or something...

But anyway, all in all another great chapter! I especially loved the fights against the Shadowbolts, though I feel like Rainbow Dash and Indigo's battle should have been a little longer...

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Starting off the chapter with Flash and Twi kissing? It's almost as if you want me to like this story or something...

Why yes, yes I am, but not solely for the FlashLight ship.

though I feel like Rainbow Dash and Indigo's battle should have been a little longer...

, that's a fair critique, however, hold your horses... pun unapologetically intended, and these two will have a fitting round two. The main thing about it is how unprepared Rainbow Dash and the others are and now planned out Sunset et al's operation was, while also addressing Rainbow Dash's use of her bow and not a melee weapon and how at close enough ranges bows and such weapons are less than useless.

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The main thing about it is how unprepared Rainbow Dash is and now planned out Sunset et al's operation was

True, I mostly chalked it up to that and RD already being a little worn out from the party.

Can't wait to see the other world and what you do with it!

That was one hell of an eventful night! These Shadowbolt are a real danger for the mane six.

Nice the choice for Sour Sweet' s class, combined with her double personality is perfect.

And Sugarcoat's magic is based on Earthsea, huh? I thought it was based on the Truenamer class from d&d. Still, it's perfect with her personality.

Very little I can say that hasn't already been said. But still, once again, you did a VERY good job on this chapter. Yeah, the villains' strike was quite well planned out and executed. Superb action and emotional content of course and the touches on your versions of the Shadowbolts were quite well done and make sense. But, as I said, most of that (if not all of it) has already been said.

Once again, I'll certainly be looking forward to more, but will be quite willing to be patient.

Another great chapter! I wonder what else Celestia is hiding...

Also, are the Dazzlings gonna play a part in this story? I mean, you brought the Shadowbolts and Cinch in early so I'm a tad curious.

Wow, the situation is way more complex than the movie.

Once again, you did an excellent job on the added information, the characterizations AND the differences in canon that both make sense for this universe AND make things harder for the heroes. I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be very willing to be patient.

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To quote Rarity "No Spoilers"

I wonder what are Cinch´s actual stakes in this game. I doubt this is only about getting rid of Longhorn´s petty gang for her.

I can definitely understand about the death in your family. That IS very bad news.

However, this chapter is quite good. In addition to providing a little more information on just what the heroes are up against, it also makes me curious as to just what Cinch's big game is. The exchanges between the two sets of rivals are quite well done too.

I'll very assuredly be looking forward to more of this, but will also understand the next few chapters take a while.

First of all, I'm sorry for your loss.

This chapter was really good! Can't wait to see how all these plans and subterfuges will clash with each other!

Again, this is some excellent work on this chapter. The characterizations are quite well done (particularly with Rainbow and Indigo developing a mutual respect) and the action in the race was superb. And, yeah, as much as I dislike Cinch (but ONLY in the way I'm SUPPOSED TO), she, unfortunately actually has a good point about certain cultures' differing legal systems. I'm still curious what her planned end-game is (what would she be up to that would require her crew to wield the Elements?), but that's what future chapters are for.

At any rate, I'll very certainly be looking forward to more of this, but I also get that the real world doesn't always allow one much writing time.

Still, I'm glad your grandpa's service went well AND you had a good time at that convention.

Another good chapter! It was nice to see RD win back her element!

But I can't help but feel lIke something is... off about this good sportsmanship. Why would they go through all the trouble of stealing the Elements and yet give it up so easily?

... something else is going on here...

8309564, Sunset is the one that wanted the Elements, Cinch is letting Sunny indulge in playing the 'game of power'

8309818, Wait and see, darling:raritywink:

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Yeah. I forgot about that. Thanks for the reminder.

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It's okay. To err is human.

Uhm, interesting. What will Sunset and Cinch cooking in their minds?

Well, that was a full series of events. Now we' ll see what Flash and Spike were doing in the meantime, and the end scheme of the Shadowbolts.

Holy cow. Again, this chapter was well worth the wait. The action in the competitions was quite well done, as were the characterizations. I also kind of like how the Shadowbolts are getting so conflicted doing SOMETHING they obviously take no pleasure in despite at least developing a real respect for Twilight's friends. I have a bad feeling about what Sunset might be up to concerning the blood samples, but it is the kind of bad feeling that makes me extremely curious about the next chapter. Anyway, I'm definitely going to be looking forward to more of this (especially the final two trials), but will also be quite willing to be patient. After all, I know real life concerns have to come first AND inspiration is NOT always easy to come by.

Again, excellent job on the action, characterizations, exchanges and future chapter set-ups in all the right places. I particularly liked the stuff included in the author's notes, Flash's practice sessions, the flashback, the scene with Twi and Flash, the chat between Sunset and Longhorn AND the fight with Applejack, Sugarcoat and Angus.

I'll definitely be looking forward to more, but will more than respect the fact that real life concerns have to come first.

YAY, FLASHLIGHT MOMENT!! Now all the story needs is a Sparity moment and it'll be perfect.

Ohoh, very interesting chapter. So many things will happen in the next ones!

Hello there. Thanks again for getting the next chapter up. Once again, the exchanges, characterizations and action were all well done in all the right places. I LOVED the fight between Flash and Longhorn as well as the argument between differing legal systems. Though I have a VERY bad feeling about what happened to Spike (as well as, as aforementioned in my review of an earlier chapter, what Sunset might need the blood samples for), it's the sort of bad feeling that will make me curious enough to keep reading.

At any rate, I will very certainly be looking forward to more of this, but I will also be quite willing to be patient, since I am fully aware that real world concerns have to come first and inspiration might not always be easy to come by.

A chapter with an awesome song, an awesome fight, and Flash being a badass! Can things get any better?!

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Not sure, but they sure as Hell can get a whole lot worse.

Well this was a satisfying ending... and now you have me hyped for the sequel!

That being said, if you ever need help with new ideas or storyboarding.... I'm more than willing to help.

That was an explosive ending for this story!

Now, with all this foreshadowing, the excitement will be terrific!

Hey there. Thanks greatly for getting the final chapter up. It took a while, but was definitely well worth the wait. Once again, excellent job on the action, characterization, exchanges, general wrap-up and future story set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked how Twilight proved to be right about how the Elements hate to be forced AND the mother/daughter moments between Celestia and Sunset . At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of your work, but will also be quite willing to be patient.

This was not lost on Spike, “JUST KISS ALREADY!” the dragon shouted shocking the two as he left them. “Geez, humans just have to make things so complicated, she’s attracted to him, he’s attracted to her, any other species would be….” Spike muttered under his breath as he headed into the actual ball.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Oh! Oh my! That was comedy gold.

Twilight silently nodded and accepted the arm, once they actually got to the ballroom floor the musicians started to play a waltz.

🎵Ah-ah-aah, kiss the girl.🎵:raritywink:

Pinkie the flip a glass case that covered a big red button. “A gift from a friend, Vinyl Scratch. It’s a BASS CANNON!” Pinkie yelled as she hovered her right index finger over the red button, “And as Vinyl would sign, FEEL THE WUBS!”

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: How many of your readers have you killed with laughter?

“And we call it bella notte,” Flash started to sing softly as he turned his head to look at Twilight, “Look at the skies They have stars in their eyes On this lovely bella notte.”

:heart: Aww.

“There is an old saying, ‘a single grain of rice can tip the scales.” Celestia countered. “I care for my current apprentice, sentinel. Also, Sunset will have many advantages where she went to, the odds are against the Bearers, we need to alter as many odds into our favor as we can, if that means adding additional variables, then that is what it needs to be.”

I don't know what I love more, the Disney reference or the chance to see Flash do something other than being the fandom's punching bag.

The stadium was silent before Rainbow Dash took the microphone, “Trust me, don’t question it and go along, you’ll keep more brain cells.” and everyone just gave an ‘oh’ in response.

Is she going to be doing that throughout the whole games? :rainbowlaugh: Pinkie Pie, I mean.

As Pinkie prepared to do her vaulting which she would use to spring on to the next part, another balance beam, “Cause I love to see you beam, beam, beam Yes I do Tell me what more can I say To make you see That I do It makes me happy when you beam, beam, beam Yes it always makes my day”

:rainbowlaugh: I get it.

Hold on I thought Shadow Bolt was Sunny's father, unless Sunny and Sour are sisters. :applejackunsure:

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