(Book one of the Anon-a-Miss trilogy)
Sunset has had enough. After one last attempt to reason with her friends -- which failed miserably in her face, she ends everything with a literal bang. Unbeknownst to her, her deed would affect Canterlot High School forever. The very next day, the CMC, the true culprits behind Anon-a-Miss, confess and are finally brought to justice. But it's too late to make any amends. And now everyone, completely unable to live with a guilty conscience, falls into a deep depression, not knowing how to move on. Until one day...
Rated T for profanity, violence, blood, and mature topics such as suicide, alcoholism, and eating disorders.
Chapters (7)
This is a dramatic improvement. I'll track this.
Ok this was a lot better, I like how Sunset blew up at them trying to reason with them, she just yelled or screamed at them, and the ending makes a lot more sense and is more dramatic. and hits harder.
Good job.
Fluttershy's confession of love really makes it more tragic as well, and big fan of that pairing.
Only mistake you made was . I really, really, really, was Anon-a-Miss wasn't you; but there's no one else to blame. Forgive me, but I hate you."
think you meant Wish not was?
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Indeed.
nice improvement
Okay, this is much better than the original. Sunset's method of suicide is much more realistic and the Rainbooms reactions to her last attempt at "manipulating" them is much more like them (especially when you remember that they're human teenagers and not the ponies we know and love).
I have only one request for this fic: do not have the Rainbooms celebrate when they find out Sunset committed suicide over this like in the previous version. If anything, they'd be shell shocked that Sunset would kill herself over something she started before Princess Twilight shoves down their throats the fact that she never was Anon-A-Miss and that it's mostly their fault she's dead because they focused too much on the person she used to be when they accused her in the first place.
good luck with this i enjoyed your old one but hopefully this one works better for more people
This one is off to a way better start! I am looking forward to future chapters! Just dont have the girls or the audience celebrating sunset’s death. Also just a question would it be considered to have Princess Celestia visit the human world at some point along wih Twilight?
Small typo here
From getting killed
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Sorry, auto-correct
Much better! Please keep going!
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much better. u mean
So... Is this story based off of the novel/film A Wrinkle in Time?
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movie
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or being killed
...I feel like the premise might be the problem...
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Here is the original, for comparison:
- MLP: FiM
- Equestria Girls
- MLP: Comic
- Adventure
- Drama
- Sad
After Sunset committed suicide due to Anon-a-Miss, her friends along with Crystal Rose travel the universe to find her lost soul.9338375
Yeah, I've been just wondering how the author wanted to fix OOC if the original Anon-a-Miss comic was OOC to begin with. Making them in-character would mean there'd be no story.
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I don't think that would have been a bad thing.
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Touche.
An improved beginning from the original.
However, you should fix these two slip-ups.
Really wished Anon-a-miss wasn't you
when the battle of the bands I helped you guys and Twilight from getting killed by the sirens
Hope to read more chapters soon.
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Your not wrong
I like where it's going. You have a good story upon your hands.
They screwed now
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What do you mean
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Well sunset is dead and the human 5 are calling in twilight so stop sunset for a super obvious frame up. Twilight is going to be uber pissed
I'd love to see the CMCs reactions when they find out that Sunset is dead
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The girls are going to call Twilight over to the human world, AFTER accusing Sunset of lying to her when Sunset was trying to get them to read the journal. Twilight is in no way going to side with them, instead she is going to chew them out something fierce. That is seriously the only way that can go.
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Bet ya 10 bucks that it’s gonna be Gud!!
The Rainbooms are screwed. Lets hope she hasnt learnt how to use the 'Royal Canterlot Voice' yet, or that it doesnt work on the human world.
Yet again, a massive improvement over the original version. Keep it up.
Uh oh, I hear a train coming. And wouldn't you know it, the Rainbooms are still standing on the tracks...
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I will! Thank you!
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No problem. I will make sure to review this in the near future.
Great chapter cant wait for another one!
Eeeeh
Oh, boy.
That assembly isn't gonna be fun for anyone, and especially not the Rainbooms, once they find out the whole truth.
I'm hoping Twilight takes Sunset back to Equestria (and home) for burial.
*Pulls out large tub of popcorn*
"Hey Discord! wanna share? This could get fun"
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You posted this before.
Anyways nice chapter, please please don't have the Rainbooms act like you wrote in the last chapter. Celebrating a person's death like that no excuse and is horrible!
I would really think they be in shock, denial and when accepting the truth devastated, thou poor Fluttershy may go into shock, and seizures thinking it all her fault. Her final words with Sunset at the time.
9373779 I did?
Huh.
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Yes from the first version.
9373859 Ah, okay.
Guess I forgot.
I still would like to see Sunset go home for burial, though.
After everything she's gone through because of those three brats, plus the Rainbums and the rest of the school, she deserves that, at least.
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Well, that's the first thing in the next chapter that I'm gonna write.
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Not the cheering part, right? That was so OOC of them.
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I’m betting my 💵 that a nuclear war is gonna happen next.
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Yup.
I kinda don't like how this chapter skipped the situation you set up at the end of the previous chapter.
no no no no
thats exactly what your deserve. in fact you deserve more.
It was getting so much better-UNTIL you left that line in. Cut it back to:
"By Celestia, I swear that you're all gonna get what's coming to you," she muttered grimly.
Otherwise, good chapter.