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The mental contest between Chrysalis and Cozy Glow over who would manipulate who has gone on for far too long. Luckily, Chrysalis recently found a foolproof method of finally overcoming the filly's impudence! With a genius like her at the helm, there was no way her plan would backfire.
Probably.
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An entry in the 4th Annual Cozy Glow Story Contest, using the prompt "It wasn't a problem until... Chrysalis started feeling things."
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I enjoyed your work and definitely encourage you to expand it beyond this one shot.
Cute
Great story! It's always nice to see more Cozy/Chrysalis stuff. I liked how Chrysalis always had an excuse to consider this somehow a part of her plan.
Aww... Another story of Bug Mom and Her Evil Pony Daughter. This brings smile to my face. :)
I must say, this is my favorite contest entry so far. The way Chrysalis noticed Cozy's urges and how she managed to manipulate her while also having it backfire was great and absolutely adorable.
This is going straight into my favorites. Not many stories make it there so know this was exceptional! I have an OC who is mentored by a villain who is seeking to corrupt her only to have it backfire as she becomes a mother figure, so this story was very relatable in that sense and I might refer back to this if I ever decide to write out such a dynamic
You managed to make their relationship very cute and somewhat believable while keeping them more or less in character. Well done.
Nice one! The gradual shift from manipulation to genuine mother-daughter bonds was gradually paced and well-handled. Chrysalis’s narration made for some golden moments of introspection and comedy. Plus, the closing image of her hugging a sleeping Cozy was adorable.
More Chrysalis/Cozy Glow mother-daughter stories!!! I love in how in-character they're written, specially Cozy's dialogue. And of course Chrysalis's stubbornness and pride. I love their possible found-family dynamic so much.
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I'm glad you liked it. I actually listened to the YouTube reading of "Worse Way to be Bad" during the writing process, and it definitely helped me nail down what I was going for with Cozy's characterization.
Cozy is one of my favorite villains in the series, and her teaming up with Tirek and Chrissy was just icing on the cake. So as a result I am all for a family dimanic between the three of them!
Daw daw daw daw daw daw daw dawwwwwwwwww mommy Chrissy (and ya I was jus thinking about 30 minutes how it made absolutely no sense for her to stay a villian) and I absolutely loved how you added in that the very idea of cozy’s heartbroken expression made her want to vomit, I knew something like that was coming but still and maybe cozy is what finally convinces her to change for the better and vice versa (but I’ll be honest part of me wants Chrissy to go on with her plan for her to condescendingly mock cozy in front of everypony for how pathetic and feeble she is while her conscious screams at her to stop as cozy robotically congratulates her slowly backing away shaking as she tries to cooly walk away, but not being able to help running only for Chrissy to slowly realize her major mistake as everypony murderously glares at her (particularly starlight and trixie)