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Queen Chrysalis, Lord Tirek, Cozy Glow and King Sombra are brought together to be part of the same team. Their task? Learn how to work together and defeat their enemies. They are not happy about it at all.

The story begins after The Beginning of the End - Part 1.

Many thanks to EverfreePony for her wonderful help with editing.

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More like Legion of Dildos.

"That fool thought that taking my bell would defeat me, but he only weakened me temporarily." Grogar turned away and began ascending the ramp. "I have spent millennia gathering power, biding my time, waiting for the perfect opportunity to seize control of Equestria," he declared. "I have seen each of your humiliating defeats at hooves of the six puny ponies!"

I think you mean "she only weakened". Gusty was a mare.

And it makes me really smile to see you having Sombra survive! I'm excited and eagerly following this story.

10109460
Oh, thanks for pointing that out.

I'm glad you are interested. I didn't quite like that they kind of just whacked off Sombra like that so I wanted to show mane six in a little bit more merciful way.

10109471
That's exactly what I felt like. Sombra surrendering makes total sense with his characterization, and I don't think the Mane 6 would kill him after he surrendered. Now we can have more Sombra-Legion interactions!

Interesting take on the season 9 premiere. I love how you are not only keeping the same dialogue but also adding extra lines for the characters to make it slightly different. Great job.

And good job sparing Sombra. Keep it up.

10109474
Thank you. I'm glad you like it. Some credit also should go to EverfreePony. Wouldn't be able to do it without her.

10109473
Glad it feels natural. In his situation, it was either his pride or his life. And yes, in this fic Twilight was ready to spare his life when he yielded.

As Sombra's characterization, I changed his speech pattern little bit. His "I destroyed the source of your power!" sound a little bit corny to me.

Neet way to spare Sombra. Too bad Discord didn't want him revealing any information.

"What do you say, Sombra?"

*pained groan*

"He agrees too."

I like it so far, nice to see Sombra spared. And go Chryssie!

10118964
Thanks. Glad you like it.

I want to Sombra live in this since I was kinda interested in how he could interact with the rest of the villains.

Interesting how the group dynamics changed because of Sombra. I also find it funny how Tirek usually does whatever Cozy wants him to do despite regarding her the same way as the others.

10157311
Well, I hope it changed in an entertaining way :)

10157331
It did, actually which is a bit surprising considering how good the trio's dynamics already were. I'm afraid that this will make the ending even sadder though.

10157335
Do you mean a canon ending? Well, it's AU so it doesn't have to end it that way.

“You want us to work together and retrieve a powerful magic artifact?” Tirek asked. “That’s the stupidest idea in the history of stupid ideas I have ever heard in my entire life.”

In addition of Discord not having a clue in the world that the trio had the bell all along despite having a crystal ball at his disposal along with his chaos powers, I completely agree with you, Tirek.

On a side note, is this Discord in disguise?

“That may be true,” said Tirek, stroking his beard. “But you still got your ass kicked by six schumacks just because they patted themselves on the back. So at the end of the day it was nothing but a big waste of time.”

A profanity tag is warranted if you’re gonna put that word there.

10157550
Yes, this is Discord in disguise. I give some thought about using real Grogar but overall is more convenient for the story if it's a Discord in disguise.

10157560
Thanks for the information.

10157576
I knew it. It’s no wonder you’re making him very suspicious in this. Will you reveal him at the end?

10157598
I kinda thought the most reader would assume that it is Discord in disguise exactly because I didn't say right away that it is, in fact, real Grogar.

As about revelation, I don't want to spoil yet anything, so maybe yes, maybe no :D

10157700
Well, I hope you will like this story, despite that Grogar is Discord in disguise :)

10157794
I’m surprised you’re aware that I hate that he was Discord. But yes, I am enjoying the story so far. Keep it up.

10158046
Well, I didn't know that you hated it specifically, but from your Sombra in the Legion I assumed you would prefer if it was a real Grogar. I have many reasons why I let it be Discord in disguise, but the main is probably that I have already four characters and I would rather focus on these then divided that focus by adding a new one. Letting Grogar being a Discord in disguise is one way how to de-emphasize him for the story.

10158967
That makes sense. I’m looking forward to more. 🙂

A different take on the S9 Legion of Doom. Interested to see where this goes owo

10161402
Glad you are interested.

I love this! A few minor notes:

Sombra, lounging in the chair, furrowed his brow. “You guys are all a bunch of losers.”

“I’m one of the most powerful wizards who ever walked the surface of Equestria,” the stallion declared.

It might flow better to combine these into a single paragraph. I did a double take for a second.

Sombra shook his head and narrowed his eyes. “Now, just wait one damn minute,” he said.

The stallion took a few steps toward Grogar. “So, let me get this straight,” he began, staring right into Grogar’s eyes. “You summon us, start bossing us around, and threaten us with violence unless we fall in line. Then you proceed with a wonderful big speech about working together. This should include you as well since we are in this together.” Sombra took a brief pause. “But when it comes down to doing something, then we are going on the errand duty while you savor the pleasure of doing nothing?”

Similarly, I'd combine these into one paragraph.

“The goal of your mission used to be in possession of a great wizard, Scarlet Scar. He was a magnificent expert on magic in the pre-classic era. Not much as Starswil himself, but still powerful enough.”

Should be Starswirl.

The villains were staring fixedly at him until he disappeared. Chrysalis let out a harsh breath and surveyed the ground. The shards were littering the floor, accompanied by a few books thrown from the shelves. One jar was shattered into a pile of glass bits, a puddle spreading around it.
“Well, do you know what that means?” cheered Cozy after a few seconds. “We are going on an adventure! Together! Isn’t that awesome?”

The spacing's messed up here. Another paragraph break would be good.

Really excited for more! I love this fic so much:twilightsmile:

10167060
Thanks for your kind words, it's much appreciated.

I took your suggestions, it should be fine now.

nice! I'm excited for more!

I laughed at Cozy's heavy voice, that was good.

“You said that like ten times now,” growled Sombra. “But for some reason I can hardly believe that even one word coming from your month is meant in good faith.”

Mouth*

10185502
It's always nice to know that this text made someone laugh.

Thanks for pointing out the mistake. Corrected.

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