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The feared, legendary sorcerer Grogar has returned to Equestria, plotting to reclaim the land of the ponies for himself. To accomplish this, he has recruited all the villains who have rejected friendship, and now this villainous league will fight to bring down Twilight Sparkle and her best friends.
My take on the Legion of Doom. And no, Discord won't turn out to be Grogar.
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You have my attention with this story
i'm loving the story so far. i always found the storm king to be kind of annoying, shame Grogar couldn't summon the Sirens as well
Now THIS is a Good, and a Clever MLP Villain Team!
This is How the Original Season 9 should happened. With the Real Grogar with his Non-Reformed Villains V.S. Main Six, Spike, Young Six, Starlight, Trixie, possibly Sunset and the Human Main Six ( Rainbooms), Tempest Shadow, Celestia/Luna, Cadence/Shining Armor and Flurry Heart, The Pillars, and Discord ( Who DIDN'T made his Stupid Plan, and betrayed his Friends a Second Time! Luckily for him.).
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I might throw in a reference to the sirens later on, but they won't show up for real. Sorry, I just liked the idea of Grogar having his own Mane Six.
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There won't be any Equestria Girls characters in this.
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Okay. I just thought our Pony Heroes needs Back Up. Especially have Sunset to help? Because her Original Home World is in great danger by a Evil Villain Alliance.
Maybe throw in the Pony of Shadows?
Are you gonna kill of Sombra or no?
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Nah.
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Sombra's not gonna go it alone and get killed by the Mane Six like in canon. As to whether he'll die in this story, you'll see.
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Personally, I think Sombra should fake his death. And comes backs to Grogar's Team and make the Ponies think that he was "Defeated/Dead". And when we get to the Finale Battle. Sombra can sneak attack Twilight and her Friends when they least expect it. 😈
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Call me biased or whatever, but I'd honestly like to see Sombra redeemed and perhaps even Cozy Glow. I just can't imagine how that filly turned out to be a megalomaniac at such a young age, whereas Sombra... since the only origins we have regarding him are from the comics (which are not canon or at least a separate continuity or even some kind of semi-canon) I'd like to see how you handle him; preferably better than he was in his so-called comeback (UGH, I hated his voice...)
Every good villain needs an origin story just as much as a hero, and except for Nightmare Moon and maybe Tirek and Grogar, we know nothing about the other villains' pasts, which was a pity and a loss of opportunity to explore.
I mean, look at Tempest Shadow aka Fizzlepop Berrytwist - Her origin was tragic and somewhat understandable as to how it turned her into the villain we were introduced to in the movie
Although I didn't hate anything that was done with the Legion in canon, even the twist in the finale, I admit this is a good start. The one thing I wish was different was that there were at least six members, which is accomplished here. A concept like the Elements of Disharmony was also something I speculated over a bit.
I have seen one or two stories where Storm King was brought into the Legion, but giving him Lightning powers via Grogar was clever.
I know you already have your bearers of Disharmony, however maybe you can throw in Nightmare Moon/Daybreaker by going into the minds of Luna and Celestia.
Going to take a shot in the dark. Grogar represents Doom, (because duh) Chrysalis represents Deceit, (again, duh) Tirek represents Greed because he tried to steal everyone's magic, Sombra represents Despair because he plunged the Crystal Empire into a state of complete hopelessness, Storm King represents Betrayal for betraying his most loyal servant for seemingly no reason, and Cozy Glow represents Cruelty for almost condemning all of Equis to an inevitable collapse for seemingly no reason.
I'm finding this interesting.
Wow, Grogar just showed the Pony of Shadows who's boss. The bell being a key to Tambelon is interesting.
It's only the second chapter and you've already put the writing staff to shame. Looking forward to the next chapter.
But I don't want the princesses to retire.
Still interesting story though.
Looks like Storm King needs to consult the elder gods.
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I didn't even think of that!
Pfffff!
Kinda wished the Pony of Shadows joined teh Legion but oh well.
I know Twilight didn't really mean it. But she sounds rude to me. Plus, she might regret not getting additional help to protect the Tree.
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Well, Twilight can't help it. She's just trying to save a magical tree that's responsible for linking her and her friends' fate to be together before they met. I mean who wouldn't want to destroy an object that pulled the strings of anyone's fate?
Alright, looks like the battles have officially begun.
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She needs Princess Celestia. More than she might realize.
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The Villains obviously.
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And that important statement will bite her in the flank. Because, it's okay to have additional help and backup. Especially to protect a VERY IMPORTANT Tree is better safe than sorry.
Okay, I’m glad I found this. It’s staying true to the finale, but tweaking it in a way I very much enjoy and it feels like I’m reading the show.
And the best part, NO BASHING!
Nice work, I’ll be watching this one.
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So uh, are you going to update this story once a month or something?
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I'll try to do it more often than that. Chapter four is almost done.
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Oh OK cause I saw the dates they were published and I thought there was like a pattern.
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So which villain represents which element of disharmony?
Hope you reform some of the villains.
I have no idea how the ponies will win against this
Man, Grogar defeated Discord brutally. This is going to be a tough fight for the Mane 6.
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You'll see!
So when’s the next chapter gonna be ready?
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I don't know. I'm working on a piece for a contest, so that'll take up my time for a while.
What's this? A dc animated movie?
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Well at least I hope it’s sooner than later.
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So how’s it coming?
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I'm about four pages in.
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By that you mean?
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I'm not quite sure how long it'll be, maybe ten pages, max.
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By pages you mean chapters?
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No, the next chapter has four pages done. I do it chapter by chapter. The actual story will be more than ten chapters.
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I’ll be honest I never knew you could actually make pages for the chapters since well you know it’s all digital.
Oh come on, a cliffhanger?! Why?!
This... Was one awesome battle of 6 VS 6
They need help now!
Damm, that was brutal. I like it.