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My captor was kind, to a point. They provided me with a comfortable private suite, three meals a day, and tried to accommodate any of my needs within reason. It was a far cry from being locked away in a dingy dungeon or straight up killed, but I still was a bit wary about the true intentions of this alicorn. 

A gilded cage, however, is still a cage.

Edited by UnamusedWaffle.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 71 )

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO YOU GOT MY ATTENTION BROTHER

I am intrigued. Truly a great first opening.

Fascinating. I’ll watch your career with great interest.

I think I'll be tracking this...

for starters, it’s pretty good, you know how to whip up intrigue

DAYM that into got me going, only problem is the next chapter button seams to be broken xd

Fun start.

I'll give you a follow.

Monk
"Yes, I will eat the Fear Turkey." -Illua

11160305
It appears this one should change his name as he has been amused… for now

A very strong start - I'm looking forward to this. Take it away!

That was very, very good. You've got my attention, brother!

Haven't noticed any errors, although I am a dingus, so don't quote me on that.

An interesting start, I think I will follow this one

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I will now make it my life’s mission to quote you on that

This is the first Stranding type fiction.

I am hard at work on a second chapter, but I can't quote an eta just yet because I need to finish some school work along side this. I think I can push it out this week though, so the wait shouldn't be too long!

Thank you all for the attention!

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Why do you always have a quote?

This seems incredibly pretentious -Connor

You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention!

The chapter is really well written. can't wait to see more.

11161030
Nah, I actually do it for the Authors. Most of the Authors here write as a hobby. They donate what little free time that they have, not on themselves, but to us. I think people forget that. They could be spending time with their partner, or playing a great video game, but what they choose to do is to focus on their hobby. They write. For us.

And after they write stories for us, they get little thanks for it, and sometimes ridicule for the dumbest reasons.

"Rainbow dash isn't blue, She is cyan."

And some Authors here are even good enough to be a professional and have published works in bookstores and libraries. For example, I just finished listening to "Underworld by Arelak". Thats a book that deserves a place in a bookstore. Sadly it never will be.

The quotes I use are only from Authors here, and its very hard to actually get on the quotes list. In general the quote has to get me to stop mid read and say, "Oh, wow."
Although I do have a few I use for short comments, like,“Come into my parlor, Ted. I have cookies!” by the great writer Reykan.

I do the quotes as both a tribute to the Authors here, and as acknowledgement for those Authors who truly deserve it.

The Monk
“Puberty was a curse for those inflicted with it, and boundless amusement for others who survived the process.” -Scarheart

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This basically confirmed my point and suspicions about who you are as a person.

Thats just the way it is homie -Connor

Finally got to reading all of this and i gotta say man.
This is gold

This story is VERY interesting. Going to have to follow this one.

Also, you said to point out any errors:

occurred too many debts

This should be accrued, not occurred.

Looking forward to more chapters!!! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you, I'll fix that and any other errors people find after I finish chapter 2!

Oh boy now in stuck to it like glue. I like it. Others may say we struck gold.

“Good morning Daniel,” Luna said. “I apologize for the sudden intrusion but I thought that I would bring you breakfast before I must return to my duties.”

-and stumble into a hallway that was longer than a football field. Shafts of silver moonlight spilled through the rows of stained glass windows, bathing the hallway in a glow that almost seemed otherworldly.

sus

This is really interesting so far. :)
My current guess at the situation is they are on the moon during Luna's banishment and nothing is real.

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I agree with half of that guess. I think they're on the moon during her banishment, but everything is real. I've read a few stories where Nightmare Moon/Luna is awake on the surface the entire time and when she gets bored she starts building a palace that spans a good portion of the moon.

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It definitely makes sense why she would be researching long range portals. But I don't see where she would've gotten the tomes, furniture, etc. Could be a dream, maybe he's suffocating on the moon and Luna is using his last moments to explain things to him in a dream before he passes.

Just a small update, I am about 1500 words into the second chapter, sorry for the wait but I needed to retool things a bit while also trying to find time to write between classwork. I do not know how long this next chapter will be, but I will keep you guys posted.

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Take as long as you like. No matter how interesting your story is to us, your class work is more important. :)
Though I'm still looking forward to the next chapter.

This is starting to remind me of "The Backrooms"

LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

An entire wing explored, and no one else? Something is definitely going on here....

Ah, I know. They're all throwing a surprise party!

Intriguing. The castle seems empty. Are all the ponies asleep? Or is there something more sinister abroad?

I’m interested in seeing where this goes. We’ll find out soon enough!

`Curiouser and curiouser!'

Oh Im loving this.

Monk

I'm wondering if this is him in a dream world because he's in a coma or something. Very interesting story.

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Here's an interesting possibility. Dream magic blurs the lines between reality and the dreaming and bends the rules in ways that shouldn't be possible. it could allow a particularly experienced oniromancer to visit a location that no longer exists and recover a tome that has long since been destroyed. it would have to be returned ultimately but not before she could read and/or copy it.

I am 1600 words into the next chapter, sorry for the wait again! Balancing writing and classes has been a bit of a nightmare this past week!

Daniel is either a version of Celestia from another world or something similar. (My theory anyways on why Luna is so adamant on being near him) since there are no windows besides the stained glass one I have a feeling that this is the castle on the Moon (this would explain why there are no servants and why there are no windows it has to be airtight and this is where Luna was banished she might even still be banished currently) that Luna created. The heat from just that one window makes sense as there's no atmosphere to block the heat of the Sun from hitting the castle full on.

Okay so now we have an established time loop or at least a time of amnesia and all that with this person but I still say he's stuck on the moon

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Maybe so, but the ink marks are more like a nightmare.

If this is a repeat that the human keeps forgetting, Luna is probably extremely frustrated that this keeps happening.

That's a good twist.

Hoo boy, this chapter really amped up the creep factor there!

Good chapter, I can't wait to see where this goes

Ok, now things are getting really wierd, and equally creepy.

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