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Every year, Dinky is part of a big Hearth’s Warming gathering, and this year she impulsively decided to invite Lily Longsocks, her fillyfriend. Of course Derpy says yes; the more ponies, the merrier.

The only problem is, Dinky hasn’t mentioned that she and Lily are more than just friends, and she’s worried what Derpy might think.


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Comments ( 68 )

Very nice! Always happy to see a good story of Dinky

“I almost got sick of cookies.”

Derpy nodded. “That’s how you know we’re doing it right.”

Best line :)

Oh my goodness! This was so cute! I love it!

You perfectly captured Dinky and her mature for her age innocence. Lily is also really good, and the talk about family is the cherry (Berry) on top.

Thanks so much for the gift!

Awwwwwww, this is cute.

Like, so perfectly cute and warm.

“I almost got sick of cookies.”

Derpy nodded. “That’s how you know we’re doing it right.”

Best line right here, that sounds soooooo Derpy.

I like how you kept her father secret, like let us imagine who it is. An accent like that... Lucky Clover maybe?

jxj

I really enjoyed this one. I have a real soft spot for derpy sparkler and dinky and always like to see them done well.

“I helped make the wine this year, but I can’t tell you what kind it is, that’s a secret. But I helped trim all the elderflowers off their stems.”

“Is it elderflower wine?” Lily asked.

“I can’t tell you, it’s a secret.”

Nice :)

Parents do know alot more than children think they know. An enjoyable slice-of-life :)

Very cute, though I got a bit confused between Berry Punch and Berry Pinch (her daughter?)

btw

they said that she belonged in teh sky and I’d forever have my hooves on the ground

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and sometimes they sad that as if I wouldn’t hear but I did

said

This was obscenely adorable and I loved it.

“If your big sister says its okay, then it is,” Lily declared. “Sisters are supposed to tell you what’s right and what’s not, just like friends, and I don’t think that Amethyst would lie to you.”

I smell a rat, or possibly pony sisters are very different from human sisters.

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I'm guessing Santa Hooves.

So I wonder how long Derpy has known? Let’s see in the next chapter.

Knew it. Her mother has known for a long time.

Calling it here.

Dad is Santa Hooves.

:derpytongue2:

A very good sweet story

Wonderful stuff from start to finish. Thank you for an adorable Jinglemas treat. You always do a fantastic job of capturing the close-knit community feel of Ponyville. :twilightsmile:

“She’s an earth pony and she’s really strong.”

Jonathan Young & Caleb Hyles: *deep breath, music starts* Onnnneee Punnnnch!

Yes, that is where my mind went. :rainbowlaugh:

And now I know how to use the word pensive in context, thanks, that helps.

Lastly, you did not fell me cuteness this time Admiral. T'was a valiant effort however. :eeyup:

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Very nice! Always happy to see a good story of Dinky

Thank you! And you’re right, it is. Dinky’s adorable.

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“I almost got sick of cookies.”
Derpy nodded. “That’s how you know we’re doing it right.”

Best line :)

:heart:

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Oh my goodness! This was so cute! I love it!

Thank you! :heart:

You perfectly captured Dinky and her mature for her age innocence. Lily is also really good, and the talk about family is the cherry (Berry) on top.

Dinky is mature for her age, I think. Mostly ‘cause she’s got a good mom and good older sister. And family is the most important thing.

Thanks so much for the gift!

You’re welcome!

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Awwwwwww, this is cute.

Like, so perfectly cute and warm.

Thank you! :heart:

Best line right here, that sounds soooooo Derpy.

It is totally something she’d say.

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What can I say, she's my favorite fily! And never saw that pic of her before

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Nice :)

Berry Pinch is not good at keeping secrets :rainbowlaugh:

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Very cute, though I got a bit confused between Berry Punch and Berry Pinch (her daughter?)

Yes; she’s also, sometimes called “Ruby Pinch” in fanon (although there’s some debate on if that’s actually a different pony, since there’s a similarly-colored earth pony filly Berry’s been seen with [I think in Sisterhooves Social IIRC]).
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btw

Correction made; thank you!

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I smell a rat, or possibly pony sisters are very different from human sisters.

I figure that in general they’re more protective and honest with their little sisters, although of course that could vary by age gap, the pony’s mood, and the pony in particular.

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So I wonder how long Derpy has known? Let’s see in the next chapter.

Parents always know more than you think.

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Jonathan Young & Caleb Hyles: *deep breath, music starts* Onnnneee Punnnnch!
Yes, that is where my mind went. :rainbowlaugh:

If there was a one-punch filly, it would be Lily.

And now I know how to use the word pensive in context, thanks, that helps.

You’re welcome!

Lastly, you did not fell me cuteness this time Admiral. T'was a valiant effort however. :eeyup:

I tried my best . . . here, have this:

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I like how you kept her father secret, like let us imagine who it is. An accent like that... Lucky Clover maybe?

He could be anypony. He might not even be from Ponyville (especially with that accent).

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I really enjoyed this one. I have a real soft spot for derpy sparkler and dinky and always like to see them done well.

Thank you! :heart:

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Parents do know alot more than children think they know.

They do indeed.

An enjoyable slice-of-life :)

Thank you!

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I'm guessing Santa Hooves.

Heh, wouldn’t that be a twist?

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Knew it. Her mother has known for a long time.

Of course she has. :heart:

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Calling it here.
Dad is Santa Hooves.

That would be a twist. . . .

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Wonderful stuff from start to finish. Thank you for an adorable Jinglemas treat.

Thank you!

You always do a fantastic job of capturing the close-knit community feel of Ponyville. :twilightsmile:

Aww, thanks! :heart:

You know, it reminds me of where I was on Christmas . . . not with my family, unfortunately; instead, I was working at one of the group homes and took one of our residents to visit his dad and sister. They’re not well off by any stretch of the imagination, and yet they offered to feed me as well, since I was there.

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What can I say, she's my favorite fily! And never saw that pic of her before

She is! I just came across that one and, well, it was too adorable to not share. :heart:

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Fair point. Keep up the good work!

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If there was a one-punch filly, it would be Lily.

Someone here, and I don't remember who, they wrote a crossover where in Saitama goes to Equestria and he and Lily fight.

It was epic! And they both had a lot of fun.

It's on my recommended reading list.

I also recommend listening to the English cover of the OPM these both Johnny and Caleb did, they are awesome.

Awwww! :heart: That picture is sooo cute! I want hug all three of them. :yay:

jxj

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it's probably never going to see the light of day, but the first fic idea I had was an OCxDerpy fic. It's changed a lot over the years, but that's still the foundation.

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it's probably never going to see the light of day, but the first fic idea I had was an OCxDerpy fic. It's changed a lot over the years, but that's still the foundation.

Heh, I know that feel.

Sometimes you can kinda repurpose the ideas that make up the bulk of it and work them into something else.

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Someone here, and I don't remember who, they wrote a crossover where in Saitama goes to Equestria and he and Lily fight.
It was epic! And they both had a lot of fun.

Ooh, that could be interesting. I’m not really up on OPM, so there’d probably be a lot that went over my head. . . .

Awwww! :heart: That picture is sooo cute! I want hug all three of them. :yay:

:heart:

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I’m not really up on OPM, so there’d probably be a lot that went over my head. . .

Not really. The writer, which is Emperor, did a really good, to the point job of showing who Saitama is.

What's more, very little time is spent in OPM's world, just long enough for Saitama to get out of bed, see the portal, get dressed, leave a note for Genos, and go through.

Everything from happens in Equestria until Saitama goes home.

The Title is The Caped Badly vs Lily Longsocks by the way.

It was fun to read it again.

jxj

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Honestly, I'm not likely to actually write a fic. There's some pretty big gaps in my skillset that I'm not sure how to cross and writing just isn't really my thing. I'm more into the worldbuilding side than writing side and I'd rather do that. I have some fic ideas that are more in that direction and those are more likely to actually have anything written (still not likely though). The fic isn't really developed enough to have a bulk to re-use but I did manage to re-use some characters.

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Not really. The writer, which is Emperor, did a really good, to the point job of showing who Saitama is.

Hmm, I’ll have to give it a look. I’ve hung out with Emperor and he seems like a cool dude.

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He did a damn fine job writing the story.

Aww. That was so sweet. Glad I finally got around to read it... Thanks for the smile. :raritywink:

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