• Member Since 25th Feb, 2012
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This is the story of a young pegasus stallion, or you specifically. After the passing of your mother, and your ever increasing distant father, your brother has never felt safe in the cloud home. Afraid of heights and normal life in Cloudsdale, you decide to abandon your former life to start a new one on the ground, in a town called Ponyville. While there you find a cute mare that runs the local post office who goes by the name of Ditzy Doo.

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All I could say was dawwwwww when I read the description. Now I'll start reading.:twilightsmile:

dis is sooo touching hes such a good big bro :pinkiehappy:

Just, dude.
Are you a famous author? This is incredible.

No. No. No.
*clears throat*

I think we can do better than that, now can't we?
*Sucks in a deep breath* :yay:

POV stories aren't too common. Not bad, not bad at all. :pinkiehappy:

How very sweet. Muffins at a Pinkie Pie party.
One good muffin deserves another.

D'AWWWs Coming, just from looking at the comments... Tracked.


Read. Tracked. Looking forward to more. Keep up the good work, mate. :moustache:

wasn´t there a similar one but with rainbow dash?

This could turn into something really awesome! I like this, well done! :pinkiehappy:

This is good man. POV stories aren't easy to come by here. On the inside, I'm all like :pinkiehappy:, but on the outside, I'm all like :twilightsheepish: (bad poker face)

Hi there, newfound faith in second-person OC fics. Glad we could formally meet like this.

... Indeed. And the best part is, I am awkward, so the character really works. This is good, very good. Keep it up. Do it. DO. IT. Please... do it.

I'm giving it a track and I will read it later, but for now have a hoof up. :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

I love these kind of stories, the kind where you are IN the story and even choose what you look like.
I also love Derpy, so this is gonna be GREAT!

Let's derp da derp! D'AAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!:moustache::derpyderp1::derpyderp2::derpytongue2:

I Dont usually like POV's but i think i just might be interested in this one.

I like it. *Insert dawww* Tracked.

D'aawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Why do I love DitzyXOC and FluttershyxOC so much??? I almost ALWAYS love an OC and Fluttershy ship, and find the same true for Oc and Ditzy...



A lot of the dialogue sounds so awkward and forced. Besides that, POVs aren't really my thing, but GOOD LORD use contractions when writing dialogue, it sounds so bad without it. Really, for the future, ALWAYS read your dialogue out loud to make sure it sounds and flows naturally, otherwise it'll sound incredibly awkward. :raritydespair:

Not gonna keep my eye on this since POVs aren't my thing, at all, but I just thought I should at least give you this advice for the future. :ajsmug:

I usually dont rate fics cause i cant be bothered to scroll back up to the top of the page.

I did just now. Make more. This is like until you met her but even more appealing since ditzy is da cutest

This was just plain adorable. I really needed a bit of cute romancy stuff at the end of a sucky-ass day :pinkiehappy:
Great stuff, I'm tracking this to see how it goes. :twilightsmile:

Who doesn't love Derpy, though not sure why "Ditzy Doo" is being used instead of Derpy Hooves. :derpyderp2:

This is gonna be awesome!

Okay, so I'm walking 'round town and :pinkiehappy: comes bouncing up to me. At this point, I'm all like :ajbemused: and then she's all like :pinkiehappy:. She's all like "BLAHBLAHBLAH, BE MY FRIEND, BLAHBLAHBLAH, WELCOME WAGON!" and I'm just sitting there like :applejackconfused: at this point. Then she insults my favorite movie and I'm all like "YEAH WHATEVA!"

MAYBE the start of something?!:facehoof:

Sweet Celestia, I hate the "But"!

258089 "Derpy" is sometimes used as a nickname

All of my D'aww take all of it

I vote for more of the this story. Even if we lost her as a character in the show there is always fan fiction. So the bosses in corporate can...wait for it...
"SUCK IT." Long live Ditzy Do. This fic was very D'awww, well written and well paced.

Dawwww can not wait for more


We didn't lose her as a character, she's still going to be around, they just can't call her "Derpy" anymore

That picture makes me wish the Derpy dolls on eBay were cheaper, so I could buy one and give her so many snuggles :rainbowkiss:

So adorable.

258418 The name "Derpy" sucked anyway, seeing as the term "Derpy" is generaly taken to mean "stupid".

258031 Sure I'll keep that in mind, thanks for the input

257777 Yes, "If Wishes were pegasi" I believe, I cant believe you caught on to that, that fic actually was one of the first fics I have read and got introduced to the 2nd person. And was the inspiration for this fic. :rainbowkiss:

D'awwwwwww INFINITY.

Beat that.

I cried manly Lycanthrope tears. I love Ditzy... Derpy... whichever name she's called I always smile when I read about her, see her, hear her. She's just so adorable. I JUST WANNA HUG HER SO BAD.

And you, the 4 people who disliked this story... you've got an angry werewolf watching you.

257642 :pinkiehappy: No this is the first fanfic I have written. I was just really inspired to write this. Means a lot, thank you.

To everyone that enjoyed this fanfic THANK YOU! I love you all so much, I have the next two chapters written already, they just need to be tested in the fires of criticism (AKA they need to be fully edited). You shouldnt have to wait too long

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