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vincent5000x


Currently accepting all awards and donations in the name of milk. Its always been there for me, filling my cereal bowl.

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This story is a sequel to Dinky: A Filly That Is Loved


Derpy thought that everything would be better with Glittering Gem in jail and Dinky in her permanent custody. But things are never that simple, as Derpy now has to balance taking care of a foal and finishing school. Lets just hope that thats all she has to worry about.


Cover art by: DJwolfdragon
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Chapters (16)
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Comments ( 140 )

I hope shooting star has some problems with ponies at school finding out what she's done. I'm clearly a little evil to ponies who are cruel to others.

It seems that I am missing some back story I will read up on later also is derpy in college?

Yes, you clearly need a proofreader.

Yes, I do volunteer. You're getting better, but with a bit of guidance, this could be great.

As a warning for future chapters, as well as your upcoming revisions on your previous story, I should like to point out that pegasi is a plural of the word pegasus. It refers to more than one of them. You keep using it as a singular. For example:

“So how did she do today?” a large pegasi asked as he walked into the living room, buttoning a blue police uniform with his hooves.

It should be:

“So how did she do today?” a large pegasus asked as he walked into the living room, buttoning a blue police uniform with his hooves.

Otherwise, I look forward to the rest. :twilightsmile:

I go in for mindless catharsis every once and a while, but I'm a sucker for a good redemption story as well. Call me curious as to where this goes with Shooting Star.

2910408
No, this takes place in Derpy's final year of highschool.

2910427
Wait... Really?

2910508
I can see, it just sounds really weird whenever I used it and my brain automatically switched it to sound better to me.

2910535
You and me both.

2911648 Yeah, really. It's just some really quick little things, mostly to do with punctuation. I'm willing to help out.

small error on the 'flashback'

Derpy just felt her angle boil

should be anger unless I'm really reading that sentence wrong, also love Derpy and Dinky:derpytongue2:

I believe you were right to go easy on Shooting Stark, but that may be due to my ability to see good in everyone even those with pure black hearts.:scootangel:

i love it and in this story is it going to show Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter

2959337 and i can't wait to read more of chapters when they come out

2959660
Thank you. I'll try to work on another, but I'm going to Bronycon this weekend so I dont know how long it will be until I get the next chapter done... sorry :twilightblush:

2959710 Your welcome and ok and please promise me that you will finish this story

2959729
Its all good! I already have a bunch of ideas for how I want it to go and a ending. I just gotta write it all. :derpytongue2:

I'm curious... you may have already answered this, but how does Sparkler fit into your headcanon (if at all)? She's usually considered Dinky's older sister due to Sisterhooves Social, but then again, Applejack was going to compete with Sweetie Belle, so it's not like anything's set in stone.

“Uh huh,” Derpy replied as she felt Derpy try to get her attention. Looking down, the pegasus noticed that Dinky had dropped her spoon and couldn't reach it. “She’s one of my teachers in school.”

I caught this while reading through it. Should be :

“Uh huh,” Derpy replied as she felt Dinky try to get her attention. Looking down, the pegasus noticed that Dinky had dropped her spoon and couldn't reach it. “She’s one of my teachers in school.”

Sorry, just had to point it out. @_o... *twitch twitch*

Other than that, love your stories! Fav. and follow!

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She fits, but you won't see her in this story.

i love it and i can't wait to see Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter in this story and sorry for saying this again i hope you can forgive me

3030270 ok and remember to add Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter in this story

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I wouldn't dream of not including that in the story

Hhmmmmm a little commvo much......

2959710
I wish I found this week's ago so I could of met you at Bronycon and got a brohoof from an awesome author, maybe next year.

where Dilky and Lily

Dinky
small spelling mistake, still really enjoy the story

very good chapter, I needed a happy chapter after I read the The Sweetie Belle chronicle's latest chapter

Good work so far I'll have complaints in the futur I bet but eh hopefully it'll all still be good

Dinky getting all excited in the wagon was probably the most adorable image ever

What bothers me is that she needs help asking obvious questions like the one her dad asked.....

i love it and how soon in this story will we get to see Derpy fully adopted Dinky as her daughter not her adoptive daughter and please reply to this comment

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If thats what your waiting for, you got awhile. No spoilers, but its not going to be all sunshine and smiles.

3379827 ok and why will it not be all sunshine and smiles when that happens

JT

(Pained speaking)
Somebody..Call a doctor
I'm having......a......cuteness.....overload

“Yes, well…” Dian laughed. “I probably should've known better and just asked sooner.”

“Well,” a new voice interjected with a chuckle, “that one about the time traveler is amazingly believable.”

Why do I suddenly hear a wheezing and grinding sound in the distance, along with a slight wind that came right out of absolutely nowhere?

Derpy’s hose came into view

house

chocolit chip muffins

Chocolate

“Those. Arnt. For. You!”

Aren't

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