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Huh...I sort of forgot about this.
Welp, I know what I'm doing when I uave hours to spare.
I sincerely hope all the scary and horrible stuff will be over and go on to being peaceful...
JAMES Drowned.wmv
Amazing chapter it is so emotional that I can't describe how it plays the emotions and you do it through so thorough with the details and it's just amazing. It's good to have the emotional scars from the events he had encountered and it has to be hard to recover since it can't just go away just like that, and the ending with a heavy plot line with the possibly dying part really clinched it and got me really anticipating the next chapter not only that the songs you added into the story was really impressive to add the emotional tinge to the plot line. Excellent chapter and I truly look forward to the next one.
Have a good day.
Psychoanalysis would help him no doubt
Holy shit this is so fucking good. The emotional levels of James is ridiculous, and the psychological trauma is fucked.
Looking forward to more
James had better live. Make his dream a reality!
You son of a gun you get me more excited to play Majoras Mask 3d since I pre ordered it, and that its being released on the 13th!!
Ouch... Now my head hurts! And my heart is just burning with so much rage!!
Why!? Why can't it have happened that way in his dreams!? It's not like any of them were built to handle these kinds of hellish situations! Especially when it's getting good, but THEN fate decides to screw them all over for SHITS AND GIGGLES!!!
Gah, son of a bitch! Must the innocent suffer a more terrible one....?
Well, anyway, this certainly has been a rather interesting one. But now I'm starting to get real fucking pissed off, and as to what that thing was before virtually lynching James back to reality? Oh I'm just wanting to rip it asunder and throw it into oblivion.
Right now, I am stuck with three options - (The latter you won't believe) - One: Resurrect Discord and kill him in the most horrendous way humanly possible, on an unimaginable scale, multiple time for making this outcome happen. Two: Help James by entering his mind and clear out any and all Demons that are making him have negative thoughts and such. Or three: Give him a hug and pray it'll all fade back into darkness, never to return or harm anything else.
y with cliff-hanger
DAMMIT!!! I was still hoping that he will get all the Mane Six with the princesses (Celestia, Luna & Nightmare Moon) to be together in a herd...harem...polygamy or whatever they call it and that he wouldn't die and make a family with the nine ponies i said along with Scootaloo.
This is really painful for for me to see the results after the Discord incident and the damage James received. it hurt me so much i had to read the the best chapters so far in this story for not to cry in sorrow, those chapters are (in no particular order) when he got his cutie mark, turn Nightmare Moon to good, James's Birthday and the Grand Galloping Gala. You really know how to put the words down to hurt the heart that really is effective, especially if you read the story and say the lines of the Main character of the story like a script it does feel more lively.
other than that great story this is already on my bookshelf "top faves like most" and i'll put this in my top ten list of fimfiction stories in my dimensional vault also i found this and i think it may help James to live, so here and may have mercy on his soul.
http://swordartonline.wikia.com/wiki/Divine_Stone_of_Returning_Soul
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I'm glad you made it so not everything is all peachy keen when he woke up (aside from the emotional trauma) and that he has some serious problem going on there. I'm assuming its magical.
Looking forward to the next one.
Oh gosh... I really hope he doesn't die. Just what is going on?
5586782 Um... he doesn't do herds incase you haven't noticed. And I'm in agreement with Humanity on that one. Just because they are equines, doesn't automatically make them a herding species. Our planet's equines and Equestria's maybe the same species, but the major difference is they are sentient beings.
Plus, The canon universe doesn't do herds either.
For example of married couples. Shining Armor and Princess Cadence. But that's not all. Mr. and Mrs. Cake, Twilight's parents, Pinkie's parents, may I go on?
What the actual fuck, Majora! What is going on? And why did Twi turn herself into Dusk Shine in the dream world? That was weird...
5586932 we can hope though can't we? Herding was never out right disclaimed in the canon universe and something has to be done with the higher count of mares than stallions so herding is entirely plausible even in the canon Equestria
Onto the story itself... Beautiful... That's all that really needs to be said easily one of he best fics on the site
5586636 It certainly looks like it's getting more out of the hardware than Ocarina of Time did.
On a side note, what stood out to you the most in this chapter?
5586921 You'll be finding out in time.
But may I ask what stood out most to you in this one? Writing this chapter was rather tiring.
5587317 Yeah, writing sex/clop scenes has never been my strong suit. My apologies.
5587282 Mask reference? Probably the whole dream in general...everything melting like it did. very creepy. infact, the ending, also hit kinda hard, considering James 'is dying' not to mention him seeming to go crazy and possibly throwing something, at the Mane 6 after they all entered the room, (Specifically the other four, even though he seemed to be just find seeing Twilight and Dash...makes me wonder if he'd go nuts again if he saw just those two) perhaps if say, Fluttershy tried to enter alone, he would be alright...
5586967 but they never claimed they were herding in the Canon universe either. So, it's safe to assume there is no herds.
5587288 Well... I will be honest, I think James stood out. I may be missing something in what I read, but here's my reasons.
First, I am aware that in the previous 2 chapters, James went insane after he was attacked and broke his heart. He was furious, and I understand that. However, I think James' has lost his careful thinking. It's one thing to be furious and enraged, but towards being driven to insanity seems to be exaggerated... but that is beside the point.
Anyway, at the scene James wakes up in the hospital and was listening to Twilight in the intercom, shouldn't he have felt more relieved than bitter at the fact that Twilight was so desperate to see him? Surely, he could've figured it out that if Twilight was corrupt, she wouldn't have wanted to come to see him in the first place. To sum it all up, he could've been more confused than bitter at Twilight coming to see him if he was assuming Twilight was corrupt.
And another thing, if James really loved Fluttershy with all his heart, why didn't he felt more heartbroken to see his beloved in so much pain when she was at the window? I am aware that he felt betrayed, angry and such. But I really think the emotion he could've been feeling was depression and fear. Or, you wrote it as if he was taking the depression and fear, then turns it into anger and bitterness.
So, that's what I think was pretty off. But that may just be my emotional side thinking it would've gone better.
5587665 let us just agree to disagree you believe in no herds and I believe that they are entirely possible but in the end it's the writers decision. I just think that it would add to the story if James was also in a relationship with Nightmare Moon but I think that that is why the author wrote that other story.
5587730 It's quite different for a man who has fallen in love and has been betrayed before. It is one thing to go through it once, but to know that pain and go through it a second time would likely make one more cautious and detached to avoid the same kind of pain. As someone who has been through that three times, twice by the same woman, it can seriously make you exceptionally cautious and aloof and make it difficult to open your heart to others.
5587938 I can understand that... still, wouldn't he be confused if he convinced himself that Twilight was corrupted but then hears different that she was trying to visit him and was extremely desperate? I mean, he could've figured out right away that she wasn't corrupt, past experience or not. Even the more cautious could still be caught off guard after they've been convinced themselves of something, only to hear something different that throws them off. I'm just a little confused is all.
5587824 I'm just saying it's illogical to make them into something that was meant for the more primitive and instinct driven equines, than the more sentient and choice-capable equines.
I agree that it's up to the writer to decide. All I'm saying is that the FiM universe does not have to be made into a herding population based on their species alone.
Here's an example to explain my reason. Imagine there's another earth that's populated by humans, just like us. There's one big difference though... they rely on cannibalism for nutrition. My question is based on our species alone, does that mean we have to be cannibals for nutrition just because they are doing it?(I know this is a disturbing thought, but this is how I see it's illogical to assume based on species by itself).
5588478 Pretty hard to do that when the most painful traumatic memories you have of said lover are no longer under your control.
5588536 Well, then the next question I have is the difference of experiences. The previous relationships were ended on agreement from both parties. But then there's Fluttershy, or fakershy as I like to call her alter ego, who ended it. This time, one party ended it without the other's say. I would say that James actually wants her back, at all costs.
Or... maybe it's not the question of "why" he has uncontrollable anger and pain, but rather, "who" is making him that way... it might not have anything to do with James' sadist "twin brother" now, would it?
That was an evil, evil, dream to do.
Just like something Discord, God O chaos would have as a backup plan, or just revenge.
Discord the bacteria? Discord the glint in the milkmans eye?
5588670 I guess this requires a bit more of an in-depth explanation.
There is one thing I need to remind you of before I begin. James in this story is in fact an extension of the James who writes this story and uploads it to this site. Me. Therefore, the past experiences that have influenced him in this story are my own.
While it is indeed one thing to end a relationship on agreement with both parties, I can assure you that this was never the case in his/my past relationships. Although the time he had been brought to Equestria was not long after his first break up, just last year I was put through two more breakups by the same woman in under six months. And all three times, it was against my will and true closure never came. What made it worse was knowing that they did not have to fail.
What I am saying is that every time the heart is broken in the exact same way, it hurts more and more and the scars take much longer to heal. While the first relationship could have been viewed as a crash course due to it being his/my first and was also not something to cry over due to my lover having turned out to be a truly awful sociopath of a person, the second time would hurt more. And as someone who does not enjoy pain of the heart, this would naturally make one even more cautious and fearful of being hurt again.
I know we have spoken before on a similar subject and I am very glad that you have not gone through what I have and I hope you never do. But as someone who has been there, I can only say that there are some things you have to experience to understand. Perhaps some can shrug off the weakened ability to trust better than others, but I know I cannot that easily. Even now six months later, I still struggle to open my heart to others. But at the same time, these awful experiences have made me wiser on the workings of the heart.
The more times a man's heart is broken, the more embittered and wary he becomes. And in some people, that wound never heals.
5588921 OK, I understand a little better now. And, sorry about the break ups.
I don't know if this helps or if you know already, but I think friendship is the first step in a relationship.
Anyway, I hope you have a better future ahead of you.
5588976 Yes, it certainly is. But even those can be easily destroyed. Strange on how something that takes time to build can be shattered in a matter of minutes.
5589018 That's just what makes us human. We make mistakes but some strive to do better in order to make up for them, even when some say otherwise.
I guess that's why I still have faith in the human race. When there's evil, there is good. When there is good, there is evil. 2 sides of the same coin that one can never exist without the other. Like how there are people in the government system trying to gain power, but just like that, there are people trying to restrain them.
It's sad that there are hypocrites out there trying to use others for their own selfish purposes. That's why we try to do better. To become better than those we oppose. I know you say otherwise, but humans will make mistakes.
I can not begin to understand the kind of pan James is feeling 10 days of dreams and now to finally start to have his friends come back to him only to find out he is dyeing this is going to tare fluttershy hart out if he gives up , and if James dies I can see fluttershy giving up also.
ware is scootaloo in all this??
exultant chapter Humanty
Harts Fire
I so far love love love this story keep up the good work!!!!!!
5586941 Because this picture. 40.media.tumblr.com/37659fb6b24505bd18ea81124a08aed3/tumblr_miy4g6ofiA1r224kfo1_1280.png
5609086 Heh. Spike's just like, "WTF am I looking at?"
5609198 And with Applejack, she's like, "What the hay are ya even lookin' at , Rainbow?!"
BTW, this WILL happen.
Who Will Save You Now... amazing feels song. Between this and Til' Death Do Us Part I'm fairly sure that it is actually distilled sadness.
Humanity, why are you doing this to me? D:
The feels are unbearable man, this story is so strong, You truly are an amazing writer.
I KNOW WHAT THE SECRET IS. SpoilersFlutters is preggers!!!
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So, all that time that I was criticizing James the character, I was criticizing James the Auth- oh jeez. (Self-insert fics, why must you curse me so?!?!) That-- that explains a whole lot.
This is why I try to keep the hardcore criticism to a minimum on self-inserts. (Or a maximum if they absolutely, totally deserve it)
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I guess I can see why you have him act how he did. Just - in the future, try to be aware and not let your... experiences, limit how your characters are, well, characterized.
The only other advice I could possibly give is to seek some counseling if you haven't already.
“Unless we’re talking about the Mirror Pool. Then there might be dozens of Pinkie Pies! But that’s for another episode.”
This takes place after Season 2, the episode Too Many Pinkie Pies is an episode of Season 3.
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She said “might”. She hasn’t actually been there yet.
Samu don't feel too right mya