A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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Well, that was something. I've actually suspected this twist would happen for years, so good job foreshadowing it I guess.
As much as it pains me to admit, Celestia's right about Earth's influence. I'm not nearly as fatalist about its destiny, and we're far more civilized than prior centuries when we would have just Spanish Empire'd all over Equestria, but over the years of prolonged contact, things would get progressively dicier. Disaffected ponies would start getting radicalized into hateful ideologies, groups would start converting to religions and believing followers of others are heretics, and violence would go from almost foreign to increasingly normalized. Very likely, Equestria would be able to resist emulating Earth's more serious issues, and could even benefit from technologies introduced, but the whole thing introduces a huge unknown variable that's better off avoided. After all, what makes Equestria so special is that violence and hatred aren't just rare, but that the idea of a hate crime is so alien that the one time it's known to have been committed the perpetrators were cursed into eternal undeath as punishment. They don't even know what a genocide is. Even if they never did one themselves, having to become familiar with the concept would be a tragedy.
Anyway, this is pretty much officially the lowest point in the story for James so far, even including the Discord arc. Then he believed his life had been robbed of its meaning, now he believes his life will ruin Equestria. Novo and her TLC probably saved his life.
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Whatever you have to believe, “Conservative”. If you’re going to assume I’m driven by some imaginary political agenda in anything I write, then you can kindly castrate yourself.
You’re not welcome here if you’re going to make this kind of assumption about me. Piss off.
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I have unblocked you on the grounds that you immediately backtracked and deleted your most offensive comments upon being rebuked. You’re free to discuss further developments in the story. But if you engage in this stupid politically charged garbage one more time, I never want to see you around my pages again.
So a couple things. One, I really like this story. But the first few chapters, basically everythimg before the hearts set afluttershy chapter, are a bit rough. Like the whole "story is a journal entry" thing doesnt really mesh well with the rest of the book, and Id really reccomend getting rid of it. Also the mc's initial reactions feels a bit off at times. And the whole stepping on the filly thing feels really bizzare and ooc compared to what we had seen so far, like looming over sure, but stepping on a kid? That whole thing feels really bizzare and offputting. Also a lot of the mc's reactions tend to feel either over the top or way too muted, like his whole initial reaction with blowing up on rainbowdash about the food. That whole thing felt like waaaay to much anger for someone who ismt really an angry person, and felt like kind of a toxic way of dealing with stuff
What ive read from the hearts set afluttershy and beyond is much better compared to the first couple chapters, and feels more like the mc chatacter you created is more grounded. And honestly the main complaints and flamining comments ive seen are about those early chapters. So if you rewrite them, youll probably get a lot more positive reactions. And frankly, its been almost 10 years since you started this fic, and your writing has definitely improved, so I think bringing those early chaps up to your current writing level would be a good idea.
That was definitely a pleasant moment with Rarity at the beginning. We haven't seen her alone with James lately.
Rain Shine sensing something very dark was rather concerning. It's a good thing that James, Spitfire and the others were on a scouting mission.
The Last Emperor actually created a portal to Earth?! I did not see that coming. That is definitely a point of concern for everyone. I have read some fanfics with Earth and Equestria joining together, but even I can see how that would be a problem. Equestria is a special place and not just anyone can live in harmony with it. If it's anything like when 'human' Twilight Sparkle (Sci-Twi) became Nightmare Sparkle, it would be bad.
James, on the other hand, is a special case. He is a good person who can see good in others but is smart enough to know a lost cause when he sees one. Granted, he has faltered more than once and this chapter is no exception, wanting one of the guards to blast him and allowing Queen Sunflare to incinerate him, only to hear from her own mouth that she isn't so heartless.
This is another time when I admire Queen Novo. Her love knows no bounds and she would do anything for those she cares about. I can only hope that she and everyone else stick close to James and keep his head on straight going forward. He'll need it, I'm sure.
What's next? I can only find out.