A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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WHOO!
WOW!! BEST CHAPTER TO DATE!
that ending... fluttershy singing... DAWWWWWWWW!
Bravo good ser, Bravo. You did very well at making him still vulnerable in his armored state. Nice work keeping all the characters in character this chapter as well, Most writers tend to let things slide during an action heavy chap like this but apparently not you. Keep up the good work. (ps. is it just me or is everyone falling for james?)
sigh... overreactions to misconceptions. Still makes for a good read. Keep em coming asap.
Moar!!
I WANT MOAR!!
MOAR NIGHTMARE MOON!!
Please?
I am loveing all this store and i can hardly wait to see where it goes
When I saw this chapter right after returning from school I was like api.ning.com/files/6wfzpJ-RuZjp1Hyp9REysOqFzsOrxPVTTawifNiWCaB7ti-QSP0XYL5vLo6r1P-m2R5mGeree0C0rKMtyNvZNw__/www.gifsforum.com_images_gif_dis_20gon_20be_20good_grand_this_gon_b_gud_gif.gif
1236270 Good Good? IT WAS AWESOME! I just wonder how Luna and Celestia are going to react.
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Believable caritures ... im loving what you are doing with James and his relationships with Fluttershy... really i am kinda worried that at the frequency and length of the chapters that you are writing that you are going to burn out. I'm amazed you haven't yet!
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What did I like?
I think the only way to say this was to talk about what wasn't, in my opinion, "good".
The only thing I have to say is that fight.....ummm....
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I just think that a lot of that fight could have been avoided.
But then again, 1000 years of everybody hating you would make everyone paranoid, huh?
So yeah....everything was good.
SO GIMME MOAR NAO PL0X
1236346 No offense, but stop asking me that. Just roll with how you write your stories cause it satisfies me.
During his blackout, James seemed to go back to basics. Mankind generates fierce fighters and human nature, a nature to fight everything what threatens what is hold dear can become a force of nature. Add the power of an alicorn and it becomes quite understandable that Nightmare Moon goes full panic. Nice chapter, but I'm a bit curious about this yet unnamed HIM or HE fellow, the other possible mastermind behind the eternal night. Any words on that in the future chapters?
Glad i found your new account over here the order on Sofurry was a bit of a pain to sort out even then i think i mixed a few up until here.
Well writen and always a pleasure to read. People like James are the few and far between that rekindle my hope for humanity in this world. Love the long chapters they allow for so much more detail to be put into a story that needs it so much. I always eagerly await the next chapter in this series cause it would be easy to see the show take a turn like this(minus the smut obviously). The including of characters that are rarely seen in other stories is a welcome site as it gets a little monotonous reading about a select handful of ponies all the time. Of all the stories ive read this and a few involving the Changelings and Chrysalis have to be among my favorite.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter
Atekial
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I envy you... i wish i has such a passion for writing... as it i cant write to save my life
Another wonderful chapter. I look forward to more!
so awsome
now to actually read it. just finished loved it. Now then when can we expect the next chapter
Easily the best chapter and quite possibly the best chapter written in a very long time
Love this chapter and the ending was cute I liked it
Best chapter yet and really shows how much care you put into your stories bravo
Called it.
I just wonder is polygamy aloud in equestria that would be awesome if he dated fluttershy and nightmare moon
Epic Music:
me after i read this and sniffed alot of cocain
Again another wonderful master piece, I enjoy how you think about all the different characters reactions to events as well as how they would normally act
Waiting on next chapter, but by no means go to any extremes to finish it as long as it is as awesome as the rest I will be happy
TL;DR Keep up the awesome work
loved it. great battle, awesome story, and beautiful ending. i have a sad feeling though that this is coming close to an end
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You are truly a genius
Damn I like it love this story.
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I NEED MORE!!!!!!!!
1236074 Well, there's soo many things... but two of them is that Nightmare Moon finally turned good in the end... and since Fluttershy is best pony imo, I loved her singing in the end too... It was impossible not to let out a D'AWWW! Me gusta!
1236110 Well, there's soo many things... but two of them is that Nightmare Moon finally turned good in the end... and since Fluttershy is best pony imo, I loved her singing in the end too... It was impossible not to let out a D'AWWW! Me gusta!
Manly tears, so many manly tears
1240848 I was wondering why you didn't respond...
1239631 More amazingness, of course!
I do know 'amazingness' is not a word, but still, it means something!
1240852 Don't you dare! I hate spoilers, especially in good stories like yours.
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Everything between Nightmare Moon got buried until the end.
P.S. You have done an awesome job with this story and I hope it don't end to soon
Once upon a time, a lone traveler found an oasis of quality in a vast desert of crappy HiE stories larger than the Sahara. He decided to call it, "The Lost Element".
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Nothing specific that I can say. I don't read to do in depth critiques. Just accept that I enjoyed it.
1255533 just everything keep up the good work
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do you ever get your questions answered?
what was the best part you ask? there was No Best Part is all was great equally
it was great the way you cept the hero within terms of possibly being overpowered being struck down by the enemy, having his beloved wings destroyed along with parts of his armor being left in such a weakened state all i could say it is quite human of what has happened to him with his injuries.
cant wait for the next chapter but i will try
congrats you have earned your self a cookie and since i cant give you one go get your self one for the story you made so far
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MOOOOOAAAAAAAR!!!!!
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Well, the storyline is just brilliant! That and I love the crazy long chapters! :D It's just amazing! Always wanna see what happens next! :)
1237405 that is indeed a epic song. but for music that fits the battle you should listin to the other promise from KH2FM
the main reason is that you can tell that James does not want to fight NightMare Moon, yet he has no choice but to...
1270071 I must say, that was a really good remix.
One other moument that I feel should get music is when everyone thought NMM was dead, and I feel this remix of "I don't want to say good-bye" from PMD2 fits well.
Love the depiction of Nightmare Moon :) Honestly, she is the character that got me into MLP. I always thought she was just misunderstood and under-appreciated. Came together quite nicely. I was able to envision the whole thing.
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Bravo, my good sir. Bravo!
Even though I've already read the latest chapter, I just HAD to comment on this one, due to being kinda able to now (don't ask).
This chapter was without a doubt, the best in the series so far and the redeeming factor after the previous one. I was worried that you were making James out to be kind of a hero, even though you did address some of his problems/flaws, with not being suited for combat and not wanting to hurt anypony/anybody. What with how he came to rescue the Mane 6 from the trees, the Shadowbolts, the suit of armor from Equestria's past, and the zombies of Sunny Town. Speaking of which, have a feeling that's gonna come back to bite him in the ass later, if they'll still retain their memories of what happened that night. But I have to wonder what your theory is on the way they react to cutie marks, but know that'll probably be revealed in due time.
Anyway, back on track: this chapter was heavy on the feelings, with two friends being forced to battle each other after a GIANT misunderstanding with the Mane 6. Made me tear up for a bit, by the time I was done. Everything was top-notch, even if took a bit to get to this point with this arc of the story (had expected your birthday after the Gala chapter, possibly, then to be done with Nightmare Moon's return by previous chapter or two). Really kinda drew me in as I recall, even at the unpredictable moments, such as when James had unconsciously attacked Nightmare Moon after seeing her attack Rainbow Dash and nearly kill her (Rainbow). And the whole Lost Element finally coming to light... clever name, XD.
Couple things was confused about: where exactly did he get impaled? In the torso I'm clear on, but not sure if it matters (if not in like the lung or something), when impaled circularly on both ends of the body. And what was with the mysterious beam of light when the sun came up that caused Nightmare Moon to suddenly fall after that? And not sure about the whole magic being able to heal other ponies, as they wouldn't have hospitals and such, if they never had anything like that in the show... like when Rainbow got injured and took an interest in reading. But meh, it's your story, so I'll let it slide. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png
Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter/arc! I may review the one after this, as I have some thoughts on that one too, from what I can recall.
This chapter was heavily inspired by music, so I feel it is worth listing the songs I felt went well with each scene.
Set into Motion - The start of the chapter
Anticipated Reunion - When James and Nightmare Moon finally meet again
Old Wounds - When Nightmare Moon sees the Mane Six arrive
The Lost Element - The Element of Humanity selects its bearer
Unwanted Struggle - The battle against Nightmare Moon
Failure - The aftermath of Nightmare Moon's demise
Fleeing Death - The pursuit through the Everfree Forest
Never Let Go - Nightmare Moon's true defeat
Another Chance - Peace is made with the Mane Six