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Lovin This story. Like the swich in speakers. What made you choose Twi?
Yeah, but none the less, great chapter didn't expect it to be short but what the hay it's great no matter what!
*Noon Mane walks in*
Noon: Sup bro
Me: Oh, just reading this story.
Noon: What's it about?
Me: Another HiE but this one is very awesome compared to others, wanna check it out?
Noon: Okay.
*Both read the story all over again*
Noon: Woah, I WANT MORE!
Me: ME TOO
*Sikanto and NoonMane brohoof/fist in friendship*
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Quite true... If i can get a couple mixing programs transferred onto my new computer would it be ok wit you if i tried making a couple songs based partly on this fic?
yay very good
yay
1270099 Aye, one of the script-y ones for her.
Rainbow is obviously Impact.
1270229 I have watched the show before reading this.
Me: Right Noon?
Noon: Yeah, whatever.
Me: Wow, don't be such a sourpuss.
Noon: Shut up right now. I'm reading
Me: Again?
Noon: Uhhh.........No? Okay maybe.
*Sikanto scoots over to NoonMane*
Me: Which chapter you at?
Noon: The one where Fluttershy confesses her love in that letter.
Me: Oh, I love that chapter! But I loved the part where they fu-
Noon: WOAH! Lets not go there.
Me: Okay, sorry.
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I meant the font, Impact.
just rediscovered this today and a new chapter....... do you want me to fail college so many papers to write so little time.
great chapter, i love how you had twilight doing a journal entry. i think though it shouldnt be a every day thing. once in a while might be fine, but every character getting one is not good with this story. i think though, you could make side stories that involve them all haveing their own journals. i would read them too. i wonder what will happen to nightmare and james? also,
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I can see her complaining about that
Good chapter, I liked how it came from Twilight's perspective because James would have just woken up in the bed and not known what happened since he went to sleep.
Keep writing please I am liking this story and am looking forwards to reading more whenever you have the time to finish and post it
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Pinkie Pie writes in comic sans
Fluttershy in Gabriola
... I need more than the default fonts damnit...
I can feel the shipping coming, my guess is TwiNight.
1270440 but its a good story experiments into non-verbal communication can wait even if it is due tomorrow.... oooh a new update elsewhere ta ta for now
I was trying to find this story since ever. I read it back way before I made an account and months later I tried finding this fic without even remembering the name. Finally found it since I remembered every event up to the 9th chapter. Anyway, enough about my adventures into finding your fic. I shall be waiting for the next chapter, so that I may read about the Adventures of James instead!
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I agree with MV Boli for Dash... Officially type fonts accepted.
10 bits that Chrysalis want to play mind games with James just to use the "black element of humanity" against Equestria!
Was hoping for some sunny town.
1270590 yes
Dear non-Texan,
"Mighty" means "very," as in "I'm mighty sorry." "A mite" means "a little bit;" often used sarcastically, for instance, "After polishing off that six-pack of Shiner, I'm a mite tipsy."
A good chapter, liked the temporary change in 1st person perspective. It was kind of short, but good nevertheless.
1270940 Please understand that my family, friends, and I all use these phrases in everyday conversation, along with "y'all" and "fixin' to." Further, if you read No Country for Old Men or anything by a Texan author like Joe Lansdale, you'll see it used correctly. Finally, if that doesn't convince you, there's always the dictionary (not Sweetie Belle): http://m.dictionary.com/d/?q=a%20mite&o=0&l=dir
Sans-serif master race reporting in.
Man you have been posting waaaay more often then usually and I really liked getting to read a different ponies point of view , it's a nice change of pace and you did it quite well. Keep'em coming!
1270434 ha, if anything, LUNA would be the one to write in Times New Roman. considering how she acted in the Nightmare Night episode Luna Eclipsed. also did you know that episode came out a full year after her first appearance in Friendship is Magic part 2? it's legit.
Friendship Is Magic part 2: 10/22/2010
Luna Eclipsed: 10/22/2011.
although tell me this Humanity, are you annoyed Luna didn't get more appearances so far? I've got both seasons on iTunes, and I've seen multiple parts where Luna could have had a cameo. such as Best Night Ever (the Grand Galloping Gala episode) Luna COULD have been in the background in a few scenes, but she's not. and in some scenes of Season 2 episodes, an appearance by Luna would have been perfect. such as the end of the Sisterhooves social episode, when talking about being good sisters, it could have shown Celestia spending Time with Luna as they read the letter, or the episode about the mystery behind the cake being eaten, Luna could have shown up with Celestia to the dessert competition.
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There was talking of fonts.
I chose to represent the best font.
1271504 indeed, though I'm also quite annoyed that Luna hasn't sung yet... heck if in Season 3, they have Luna sing, I will forgive them for any missed opportunities of having a Luna cameo in season 3, but I can't forgive them for missing those opportunities in season 1 and 2, think about it, in the GGG episode: Luna could have been in the lobby with Celestia and Twilight, in the garden during the same time Rarity and Blueblood or Fluttershy are there, or she could be getting an apple product from Applejack, she could have been in the VIP section while Rainbow Dash is with the Wonderbolts, ANY cameo of Luna at the Grand Galloping Gala, would have developed her character, to lead us to believe she's trying to make new friends, or get caught up somehow. the other missed opportunities from season 2, are more situational, such as the sisterhooves social episode, or the one about the mystery of who ate the cake, but those still can't be denied as they are also quite obvious. not showing up when Twi was in the Starswirl the bearded wing, understandable, as she just finished lowering the moon with Celestia raising the sun, and if Luna caught them in there, it may have been some trouble. I do believe I should stop talking soon before I explode from my rant...
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I enjoyed that Nightmare Moon is all nice and friends with everypony now. My favorite part overall is when they go to the Grand Galloping Gala, and when James beat the tar out of Prince Blueblood.
Can't wait to see what Chrysalis does.
U forgot the basis of the conversation between Twilight and Celestia. She was going to tell twilight about summoning James.
1273425 Ah yes of course, I loved the chapter, brilliant idea to have one of the mane 6 write in James's journal. though I am eager to see what happens when Luna and Nightmare Moon meet later.... also HI QUEEN CHRYSALIS. honestly I didn't see her appearance coming at all, so nice job there. Please don't cry fluttershy!
1274578 This is just me, but I imagine those two meeting going something like this:
1274731 HAHAHAHAHAAHA Ok dude that's hilarious, and that may be what Nightmare Moon and Luna's meeting would go like, or Luna may try to attack her, but I don't know.... but it will probably be funny either way!
I got maybe a third of the way through this before I took a break. It started out very well, in my opinion. Much better than a lot of HiE, by a long shot. One niggling problem though. The romance with Fluttershy tastes like diabetes. The bits up to where Angel delivers her letter were fine, but past that, it just kinda broke down. It suddenly became so rushed, with them exchanging 'I wub woo' at every intersection, and the characters asking if they would be getting married and such. Excuse me, but what the actual fuck?! ...Is what James should have responded with. Do ponies also marry their kindergarten crush?
It feels like a twelve year olds' idea of love, really, and while the rest of the writing was excellent, the pacing really threw me off. In some places (like with the later romance) it feels rushed to all hell, yet in others (everywhere else) it goes like molasses. According to my Kindle, I'm probably a third of the way through the current content, and the actual plot is still nowhere in sight. Should I just keep on at it, and hope to power through the nauseating 'wuv' into something a bit more... substantial? I know there has to be something to do with the actual elements of Harmony later on, given the title... I just hope that this shallowness bites James and Fluttershy in the ass, really, and they have to pick up the pieces, forcing them to forge a more permanent and interesting bond. Idk, I'll probably pick it up again later, but thought I'd voice my disgust at the plot development so far while it's still fresh in my mind. Writing good, pacing awful.
This fic so far.
You sir have given closure to questions.
And opened up a hell of new ones.
I await future writing.
Love this chapter, love all the chapters! No flaws in my opinion to be seen at all!
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Pratically everything, the story, plot and the fact I KNOW you'll be writing out new awesome chapters! :)
In my opinion the romance between James and Fluttershy is a bit too peaceful now. Make the big fellow do something for her. Or the Mane Six alltogether. A short trip to Earth to get specific stuff or something. Just think of the chaos if one of the others might confess to him in public. As Nightmare Moon seems to be very fond of him, maybe her claiming him/confessing to him might stir things up a bit. Also i'm interested how ponykind's society handles relationships in your fic. Some stay monogamous in their fics, other write about herds aka polygamy. Not that I think James might be fit to handle a harem. But it might be interesting to see how he reacts on this very concept. And of course: With Nightmare Moon as a third witness of old, we might get insight of past pony society and todays society. These alicorns sure give room to tell stories. But of course, these are all suggestions. I'm very curious of how you go on with all the possible ways to go.
“I’m glad I was able to get to you before you fell asleep. Are you rested?” She asked me with a smile.
“More than you know. I don’t think I’ve ever been this tired before.”
It should be “I’m glad I was able to get to you before you fell asleep. Are you tired?”
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Hope so. As has been said many times, the whole deal with James and Fluttershy was far too rushed. In two weeks since meeting him they went from complete strangers to "Hold me honey, I hope you get me pregnant tonight. Let's have some kids and get married." Just... hrrgh. I mean, that takes a couple years there usually.
Also, I get the feeling Chrysalis is going to be replacing the Mane Six, or maybe just Fluttershy, with changelings so she can try to cause James to slip into Negative (black) mode. Though, considering how everything without a tubesteak is sexually attracted to him, if Fluttershy's getting replaced, Chryssy will be personally replacing Fluttershy herself.
Best Pony Story EVER!
Judging by the tragedy and sad labels, and your comment on "MASSIVE" drama, I just hope it doesn't get too sour.
1297212 Well i like how you make the story as a whle, i mean the reason why the humans were sent away, i still wish to fully know the full story. or like how many of the bros out there mostly step up thier OCS with like Rainbow Dash or other ponies, not with FLuttershy (That i have seen) this was the first pony story i have ever read and i have enjoyed it. just how you can keep on track with pretty much everything.
Great story
I without a doubt love this story, has great plot, character, unpredictable and unlike many many many other HIE stories the character isn't some overpowered airhead who gets shipped with either twilight or rainbow dash or applejack, nice to see fluttershy for a change.
P.s. Were you originally going to pair James with Rarity
P.s.s was chapter written in 2011 because I only started reading a couple days ago and I want to know if your still doing this
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Nothing was rushed into (things like that battle with nightmare moon are rushed into almost all the time, except you didn't.) There was a perfect amount of detail to it and all facts were legit. And more! But these are your skills, not your story. I liked the fact that the lost element was the element of humanity. I am curious as to what will happen should the mares start fighting over James. You've put in a joke here and there. And the elements have never been more like themselves.
So. With that said there is one more thing fore me to do.......pause for dramatic effect....{CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP *full out aplause*} I'll be watching
I just tuned in on these story series. Excellent work :)
If I had to choose a few things I liked in your story, I would have to go with: (WARNING POSSIBLE SPOILERS, I WILL TRY TO BE VAGUE)
Detail= There is plenty of it, you give wonderful descriptions of the surroundings, what characters are doing, even things that are happening in the background that may not have baring on the story, but enhance the feeling of a event. It paints a very good picture of the scene.
Style of writing = You do not get caught up in a script type dialog, you keep it almost feeling like a camera or 3rd person view, even though we are often behind the eyes of the James (being his journal and all). Each chapter of the story being a day in his journal is also great! Even though I found it hard to stop reading and go to sleep, I would have nice clear sections to stop at. You would write the events of the day and it gave a nice clean feeling at the end of each section.
Characters development= The way the main 6 pony are slowly changing and evolving seems very in line with the TV show, there is no sudden changes or logic flaws. IE Twilight strapping human down to be examined or really going against their core values. While those values and thoughts DO seem to be evolving for the cast, it is at a nice pace where it isn't a shock that they come to the conclusions/decisions they do.
Pacing = It took you 17 chapters to evolve the story to were the 'element' in the title appeared! That is fantastic! I love the story arc buildup. More authors need to let things grow before the prize/main plot draw shows up.
The M rating= By not limiting yourself to any rating below that, you allowed directions and content that is lacking in many stories, that gives it a more rounded feeling to read. I also like that you included a bit of violence and blood. While I may be alone in saying this, but I find story's were humans never resort to violence or dark impulses while in 'equestria' frustrating to read. Unless the character is very introverted (and unbalanced), it is a natural and normal urge that needs to be expressed. Humans are Predators. We have aggression. I am very glad to see that theme appearing (or the others characters fear of it appearing in story) and we will see how James grows into a more balanced character.
Humor = You included situational humor! Thank you! Reading into this world you have made, is very much more enjoyable with the little jokes here and there. They are normally very unexpected, and have great sudden impact :)
Social and Political views= Your earlier scenario that got James into the forest, I thought was very well thought out. Even how it played on top of already existing subplots and characters. It did not appear out of the blue, it was built up to. It left me wanting to know more of what was considered normal in their world or Taboo/unlawful. While the last one was taken care of smoothly, the James character really has not stumbled onto any other ones where human views and Pony views are drastically different. IE things not to ask like; where are all the Alicorn males?(sorry if I missed it and it was already mentioned); what is the story of Luna/Celestias parents? with the male to female ratio of mares vs stallions, not every mare could have her own male; burial rituals; Tax's to the state, Places forbidden to go etc. With all the other races in this world I am sure there are quite a few stumbling blocks James may hit.
Over all I am very much enjoying your work!
if you are open to taking suggestions or discussion of things that could be added/corrected by future turns of events, please send me a message. I do not think a full public discussion of future plot points would go over well. ;) I already did partial spoilers in my praise of the work
Again, please keep up your work, it is VERY good!
Wondering here if there will be more slice of life between this and the next arc, I would hope so. I like a balance (I actually prefer the normal but I can enjoy some adventure and other drama).
Not expecting an answer though due to spoilers...
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not yet im working on getting all my sound bits and other recordings back after my hard drive got wiped when i get some progress ill let you know! although i am homeless and i got some opportunities for housing and work coming up so the project may get put on the back burner for a bit cuz of RW stuff. I haven't forgotten don't worry!