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ohhh... my... 45,441 words ....
I LOVE IT
did you really included the idea with ruby's own business?
Although I have mentioned the possibility of her own business, but never expected that you really using this idea.
OH MY GOD! LONGEST CHAPTER ON ANY STORY EVER! The long wait was definetly worth it! Great job! =D
Found one error:
I'm pretty sure you meant "as if HER mind was somewhere else"
Also, I loved the scene with Twi.
reference to a song :D
Amazing. I can't even begin to describe how thorough a writer you are, so here, have a cookie! *tosses cookie*
Very realistic, very true to characters, so much to say, but I'm not much of a commentor, so just know that you are an amazing writer that made a compelling story that got me to make a comment
Orgasmic!
Noooo! Stuff to do + new chapter = no work done.
But I love this story, so it goes #1 on the to do list.
Onwards! To the new adventures of James!(holy hell this is a long chapter)
mane through the fabric o my pants.
only mistake I found, surprised the hell out of me when I saw the length of the chapter... There goes half my day for studies.
Seriously? Your chapter length is just way out of proportion. You're going to lose views and maybe even favorites if you keep this up. Hell if you don't cut it down into several chapters then it's going to give you a lot of either down votes or loss of favorites. :/
And just because you haven't updated for some time doesn't mean it's a good idea to come out with this :/
If anything you should upload each chapter once every two days or so on. It'll be easier for us to read if it isn't in such a big update.
Awesome Skyrim scenes! Also, why wouldn't Twilight who is the element of magic know how magic works? I would have thought it was more likely for the prank to backfire on the pranksters when they asked the questions to Twilight, because she would have gone into her "lecture mode", and bored them to sleep with long and difficult explanations of things like energy conversion, and the inverse square law, and stuff like that , and thus, no fun would have been gotten out of it.
At the skyrim part was the horse's name a reference to OMFGcata's skyrim playthough?
Ok well the dream was a little too surreal. First of all the guards didn't need to use that overused joke that was cool years ago. also the realization that it was a dream was kinda dull and a little unexplained...ok well it wasn't explained well actually. When you dream you think the world around you is real. That is unless it's rem. Then the whole part about the dream with the exact same laws as Skyrim was WAAAAAAAAAY off. Dreams don't follow normal rules of anything. I'm sure you've dreamed before. Now in any of those dreams you had, have you ever had a scenario where it's exactly like it's real life version? Like have you not literally scene changed in a dream.
Anyway in general your dream scene doesn't capture the actual idea of a dream because there's no effort in making it seem like it. You just put yourself in a position you wanted to be in. Try to avoid that in the future, it makes the story feel...well almost as if you're not trying :/
I haven't read the whole thing. And I honestly don't want to but I will. I'll be back with another comment on something you need to take into consideration while making your story.
Oh and Nightmaremoon doesn't feel in character. She's a little dumb when it comes to dreams. I'm sure she'd know not to ask questions about dreams or expect them to make sense. She's been doing that mistake the whole dream scene.
A pleasure to have you back
Longest Chapter EVER. and, I LOVED that bit with Twilight, hilarious! and of course, Dashie! I WOVE YOU! and I LOVE LUNA!!! SO MUCH! I'm surprised James didn't try to sneak a joke in that 'Your sister kissed my cheek a few times earlier, can you do anything to make her jealous?' or something like that, to goad Luna into kissing him on the lips.
Well that took me half of my day and it was worth it since I'm on my break
Keep it up my fellow brony
(sigh) I dont understand why multiple spouse marriges are so frowned upon, i mean cheeting is wrong but if you'r girlfriends friend likes you too is that wrong?? society makes no sense some times.
beautiful chapter though
HOLY DOOLY
friend this was a win,
long chapters are good
detailed moments are necessary
skyrim? REEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLYYYYYY???????
lol, wins, wins everywhere
and omg twilight moment...++=
I cried at the end but it was so sweet... Perhaps what dash said had some foreshadowing in it. Great chapter as always and keep up the good work, dude.
you are my favorite author just the detail you put into it and the depth in which you go into they're lives. it is just a pleasure reading your stories
The number of words in this chapter are too damn high!
Seriously though I loved it, maybe woulda liked to see things happen differently between those 3 I still like how this chapter went!
Now to play the waiting game...
My uncle is named James xD
2630623 Did the episode look like it was in the late stages of winter to you?
2630678 Ah, that's the stuff!
2630038 Nope. That's the nickname of the horse you can buy at the Whiterun Stables, Queen Alfsigr. Bought her as soon as I saved up enough gold and have had no want for any other mount.
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Oh no, someone who can't stomach reading a REAL chapter. Look at that. The only views he's going to miss is from newbie readers who can't handle a real man's portions. And honestly, the rest of us don't care to cater to you.
2632221 It is funny i just noted that the chapters are really long. but considering the fact that i have been reading it for the past 8 hours straight, chapter length does not really matter.
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So reading something 45,000 words is not unreasonable? Well fuck you too. I've been nothing but supportive through this story so far, and I've even pointed out a few things out of character with the CMC's that I thought needed attention. This chapter however has been the only big issue of the story so far other than the characters.
And unlike some people I don't have hours to spend on one chapter.
Bitch all you want about how it's perfect, but nothing about this chapter is redeemable if it's this long.
Especially considering the content. >.>
Have fun wasting your time on "quality" chapters with garry sue's and terrible characters. As for me I'm doing the sensible thing and leaving.
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Funny, I never said it was perfect. I am, in fact, one of this story's largest detractors (though I still manage to enjoy it because I'm intelligent enough to put my issues with it on the back burner), if you'd pull your head out of that dank hole you call an ass long enough to do a little research back through the chapters. I like how you make up an argument for me to be singing this story's praises just to justify your own irritation - try keeping it to yourself, and sit and spin.
That said, boohoo? Cry some more? You don't like a good chapter length? Why don't I find something more your speed... I think it started: "See Spot. See Spot run."
Note: It's also Gary Stu - Not Garry Sue. Get your shit straight before trying to tango with me, princess.
Nice to see another chapter. Somewhat saddened by the fact it's a monogamous world here, I'd rather not read about feelings that can't be returned and read other plot content instead. Especially considering the large majority of the 45,000 words was centered around that purpose. And Nightmare probably holds feelings similar to what Rainbow feels for him. Stupid fucking authors using monogamy in a story while giving numerous romantic interests, bah.
But yeah. Skyrim splashes were interesting to read, although not as entertaining to me as it might've been to others I suppose. Nice chapter overall. Looking forward to the next one. And please, don't bring up any other romantic interests unless you plan on using polygamy. I really have NO interest in reading about the inability to return feelings due to a current relationship. None. At. All.
"You can give your broken heart to me…because I will always save my lonely soul for you.”
I see what you did there
2632221 ROFL Well said! Oh man, you cracked me up right there.
2632886 Yeah, I found that little coincidence to be a bit funny too. Ironic that he can fly with them under certain circumstances.
2633067 I'm sorry, dude. It might be painful to read, but that is how the world mostly works and I go for the realistic side in my writings.
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Best part about fanfiction canon/headcanon. When things are loose, you can pick and choose! I don't begrudge you for writing it that way, I just dislike that approach is all. Especially with the buildup with good old Nightmare Moon with him too. Plus, the whole gender ratio solidifies polygamy for the ponies in my mind. And, I'm a hopeless romantic. All things that point to disliking the monogamy in this particular fandom.
Anywho, still loved it, although the word count put me off for awhile until I found the time necessary to read it in one sitting. That was a massive dump of words, looks like two months of writing was wrapped up in that. Keeping my eyes open for the next installment.
2633575 I don't blame you. I am too. Nearly all of my previous stories involved multiple lovers at once. But I know that's not how things work in the real world, mostly.
2629325 May I ask what was worth waiting for the most?
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Heck yeah. No matter how many times I listened to it, the entire song sounded like a love song being directed to James from you know who.
2634553 Now that i listen to Loyalty with this story in mind i do agree with that...
I must say i like the song a little more now.
2632238 What do you feel made this colossal chapter (Honestly, I have no idea how it got this long) worth reading?
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2630345 Indeed, it felt good to come back.
2630601 I'll try. It may be a bit before I start on the next.
While I'm at it though, what did you enjoy most?
2629323 I most certainly did. Was that your favorite part? And if not, should I assign Ruby to help locate something you misplaced to change you mind?
Aw man, I was really expecting Twilight to actually know how magic worked. Darn it.
2634563 I just said I've been reading it for 8 hours straight, it is less of a choice to read the individual chapter as it is to read the whole fic, since i read it all at once. If your question is what made the fic worth reading, it would be good plot, fluttershy, and stuff like zombies, armor, and swords, which i have mentioned before to be awesome
Although i sort of feel like the main character is a bit too perfect, which is saying a lot because i tend to like overpowered characters, his character as a whole does not lead to him having any indecision, and indecision is a very human characteristic. But the other characters more than make up for that by causing ample conflict
2630002 Magic is, regardless of where you go, something that is difficult to explain. In fact, the literal definition is "the art of producing a desired effect or result through the use of incantation or various other techniques that presumably assure human control of supernatural agencies or the forces of nature." There is no truly efficient way to explain how one invokes such things like that or how the process even works. Magic is universally a force or concept that cannot be explained. Doesn't mean one cannot harness it though.
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2629611 OK? But what exactly made you say that?