A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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This is a very different writing style than you usually do. I like it, it really has that feeling of a 14-year old's diary, one who just recently became literate and also has some serious attachment issues. I think it would get old fast if there was a whole story like this (unless someone started spellchecking her at least), but in the context of the "found journals" style this whole story has, it works well here as a short insert.
So Smolder's joining the party too, huh? I'm sure that's going to be interesting if Ember comes back with a bunch of other dragons, and of course when the fighting starts up again. Will she be considered a liability, or will she stand and fight with the other dragons? Only time will tell.
Could.....
Sorry I know it's nitpicky
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All typos are deliberate here. Smolder has a lot to learn.
I love all the little details of how she is still learning to write and such... its amazing how far she has come.
Wow, holy crap! This is the chapter that's making me break my several years of silence on one of your stories to say... HOW DARE YOU?! Teasing us with Smolder's leaving Ponyville to reunite with James/you?! I get that it's obviously something that would be important to know, just so we don't get surprised too much, but with having to wait a month or so, it's torture when it's that interesting! Of course, I was like this not long ago when you last teased us with Novo coming back in the next chapter, since I've been reading consistently pretty much since Smolder's return.
I regret not commenting sooner by the way, there were some times I wanted to do so like with some of the things I'm saying up ahead, but my desire wasn't strong enough. Although there's still a lot of chapters I have never read of this gigantic story and dunno how much is STILL to come with the current war arc, not to mention the hint you made with the chapter with Thorax at not having taken out the whole Changeling plotline I recall you hinting at years ago (not to mention, bringing Gilda into this story through this arc as well, as another potential lover for James/you). Anywho...
At first glance from the title, thought this was about the main storyline with the army progressing and not one of these chapters that offers insight into one of the characters that James/you knows. It is jarring to see all those mistakes, but I get that it is intentional with a teen who just became semi-literate very recently. It's surprising she knows so many words as it is and can spell a lot of them right, but doesn't understand the finer mechanics of grammar/spelling with similar-sounding words and which spelling to use when appropriate. And I look forward to seeing how her attempt to "sneak in" works out... she might've gotten good at staying out of sight from her past times being chased off (surprised she apparently already knew Gallus, thought that'd be an interesting first meeting when James/you brings him home, even before I heard this and had wondered if something were to blossom between them instead, although I'm now highly doubtful after this chapter), but I feel this time'll be different with a bunch of guards who might be patrolling the area. Plus, how she'll relay all this information to him or instead kiss him for the first time! I feel like Fluttershy knows already from giving Smolder that idea.
Not to mention, the eventual meeting between Smolder and Ember! I wondered if they might ever meet, but I didn't think it'd actually be covered, let alone be like this! I just hope James/you has the foresight to warn Smolder that she might be seeing more dragons again. Heaven forbid if without warning, Smolder's parents turn out to be among the dragons that Ember hopefully recruits to assist in the war effort... or her brother, if you plan on making Garble related to her (or he shows up, as I wondered what'd happen if he shows up as part of the squad that Ember hopefully recruits and sees James/you again).
As I seemed to gather was implied some time back, you did take a liberty with not making Novo be related to Ocean Flow as in the series, since Skystar treated Terramar/Silverstream like just friends and not like also being cousins on top of that. Not the first time with a liberty though, with Starlight's death in this story and even bringing in Sunburst through this arc. And on one of the chapters I skimmed some time back (with the honeymoon), having Sandbar make a cameo appearance that strongly might've implied he doesn't live in Ponyville in this story. And after mentioning him, I have to wonder if you might introduce/cameo the last two of the Student Six, despite not being sure how/why you'd show James/you meeting Yona/the yaks or even Ocellus, at least if she's like a pre season 6 finale version of herself and not as when she was introduced into the show.
And what happens if it covers when Smolder meets the Princesses for the first(?) time. Since I have to assume she hasn't met the Princesses yet, despite being in the same town as Twilight and her friends, plus you. As I have assumed through all of this writing, that he won't just chase her off or make her go back home on one of the ships traveling to and from there. She has no idea what she'll be getting herself into in the times to come ahead, if she witnesses or even participates in some of the violence that will be bound to take place. Poor innocent dragon...
My only regret now is having to wait maybe a month, if not longer for this! Since I got to imagine a chapter of that caliber will be HUGE, even if it's not a chapter that will have to be split into two probably, like some of the Power Ponies chapters (and I'm curious from last chapter to see if that happens as well, even if James has some idea not to go reading those magical triggers, but dunno if Smolder is now more literate enough to read something like that and would trigger it this time). Though I'm not sure if it'll cover not only Smolder's reunion with James/you, but also the return of and meeting with Ember and who knows what else within. But dude, please don't keep us waiting too long if you can, okay? I get you only have as much time as you can have when possible to write or when you feel inspired from the sounds of things. But enough about that and sorry for all this writing you had to read (especially about past chapters/other topics, but pretty sure I've seen some other long reviews on this story).
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I’m honestly very surprised to see that you’re still around. It’s good to finally hear from you.
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Yeah, sorry. I know I used to be one of your most common reviewers WAY back when you were still doing Pokemon stories, plus in the earlier chapters of this story years ago; I'll see what I can do about that in the future, as long as you're going. But I'm still kicking in my mid-30s (even with Diabetes, if I never told you), I just don't make time to read stories as much as I used to (yours is one of the few exceptions, though) and haven't been on Skype for years since my last laptop's motherboard bit the big one and I kind of didn't back my logs up (not that I've checked with my external HD, but pretty sure my memory is right from not being backed the last day I was on, even if my memory's not what it used to be a lot of times), since I had some significant RPs with certain friends I didn't want to lose because of how that always reset chat logs, when I went between laptops or whatever.
Plus certain pictures I had commissioned before that time in the various WIP stages and even completed. And with having some hurdles that happened with wanting to get somebody to try and get that stuff off there, never got around to it, even though it's been 6 years now (as of earlier this month) since that happened, ugh. Even though I think you have a different Skype name now, if cause of your crazy ex that gave you all that trouble when you were uploading this story here. Sorry to bring up ancient history...
You feel like giving any feedback/thought on my gigantic review there, man? I'm not expecting spoilers or anything too specific from you (like what I believe I said is right, since I forgot that while Celestia knows of Smolder's presence in James' life, she hasn't met the dragon yet or told her sisters about her possibly), but just wondering what you might want to say about any or all of it. Again, I'm sorry as well about all that (and for the length of this now), but I did expect more from you than well... that small reply, heh.
But I can try to repeat it if I need to reply to you again what I hoped to hear about in regards... since I feel you do have this story more or less mapped out still as you intended it to be, but also have added elements that you adapted with certain characters or plotlines from the series (like again, the Student Six even if only three of them have been key players, at least at this point seemingly with counting Gallus, despite only 1 chapter so far with him in it, if I don't count this one with only a reference; the thing with Starlight Glimmer/Sunburst; the whole polyamory relationship that started with the whole "sharing your love" aspect). I just really hope you can get it out sooner, but I will do my best to be patient in the meantime. As I'm definitely looking forward to some of those moments I can see happening now.
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3qxcSALOhYo
I can't find the video I saw, but here's the one hour version. This mentally scarred me, permanently, when it comes to Celestia and bananas.
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No, I'm happy to respond. I just wish it didn't bring this story up in my notifications.
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Trauma? Bias? What are you talking about? I mean, I understand where you're coming from. You've been traumatized by relationships yourself, right? But naw, man, none of that stuff for me. I just like Trad marriage, my guy, and I'm just waiting until I'm ready before finally shooting my shot. Everyone who tries to normalize polyamory portrays it as a bunch of happy and hot men and women having a bunch of sex, but they're really a bunch of jealous weirdos who happen to live in the same house. Good luck keeping on trying to make it work on your end--you're free to do it. But I'll settle for one girl. That's enough for me.
It would be really cool to see a dream about Portal, or Portal 2
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Glad0s and Wheatley would not make worthy adversaries for someone on the level of the royal sisters.
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Right, but it would be cool to see, I just mean like a (Somewhat) relaxing dream