A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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AWESOME!
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Story of The Blanks reference. Sadly, I only watched videos of it on youtube, and have not beaten the game yet.
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No, I mean I always get stuck in the beginning of the game when you first go into Sunny Town. I just fail so hard at that game.
I am greatly enjoying this fic! Keep it up!
Man just a great story so far keep it up
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I enjoy the immense detail you put into describing everything. Makes the story come to life! A good skill to have in writing if I do say so myself!
Since Humanity seems to be specifically looking for more in depth commentary than a simple "I like it"....
Humanity, I like this story in general, but what I think is best about it is that while you take the characters in directions beyond what the show displays, I rarely if ever feel like anyone is acting out of character. The way you managed to do this in some areas actually resembles how the show expanded off of the relatively shallow personalities initially given to the mane 6.
However, if I may offer one bit of constructive criticism, I did not like the converstion between rainbowdash and James in this chapter. The first reason for this is that I believe the events of the story would leave both RD and James too emotionally high strung for the conversation to go the way you portrayed it. Also, on perhaps a more subjective note, I felt like RD's reassurance that they would work it out with Celestia ruined the emotional flow of the chapter; his flight into the Everfree was based off of fear, and horror is a main theme of this chapter, so avoiding any kind of reassurance might have worked better. Play up the idea of being alone, and living in fear out of uncertainty, you know?
Though that might be quite a bit of criticism, keep in mind that it is only for a small part of a large work (large by fanfiction standards at least). I still have enjoyed this story as a whole. Thank you for writing it.
This story is very descriptive. Seriously Humanity I mean it, The Mane 6 make me think that I'm watching the show instead of reading the story. And this chapter really put the H in Horror.
I tend to enjoy the long chapters that take the Effort to discribe what is going on in the story without interfering in the progression of the story and Tend to like the direction the story seems to be taking all in all a great story and I hope you continue it it's not often we get some one willing to write so much in a single chapter keep up the good work.
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you refferenced that one team fortress crossover yea?
left for dead last one in get the door.
Well that was good i have to say when he first found that village/campement the first thing that came into mind was the little town from the movie Big Fish why do i remember something similar to your night themed zombie ponys somewhere else i know i seen it but where?
if you haven't seen Big Fish well if you enjoy Forest Gump then you would enjoy big fish
Dear god, Story of the Blanks was creepy as hell.
What I wouldn't give for a Glock and magical ammo duplication... Maybe even a Smite Evil enchantment for good measure...
I really feel doing this will make me look like a jerk...ah what the ay, i'm going to do it!
When the lights short out, this song to me feels the most unsettling.
And when James start escaping from Sunny Town, this fits well.
sleep tight.
EDIT: Thinking about it. When the lights went out, I completly forgot about "Radio" from Half-Life 2.
As soon as I saw the description of the gray mare and the glowing eyes, I did a double take as I knew what was going on. Eeyup....ya scared me there....
Oh dear god... that filly reminded me of that creepypasta 8-bit game where AB gets lost, and gets chased by the blank flanks in the forest
I read on past that... god damnit. You DID reference it...
1807441 story of the blanks?
1238438 what i would give for a air strike right then LOL
I see a Nightmare Moon sympathizer. Well buddy, same here. Hope she gets brought back in season 4 (que the angel choir for season 4), just like Discord was in season 3. Accept, instead of an episode revolving around Twilight and the other elements, it should revolve around Luna and (to a lesser extent) Celestia. What do ya say buddy, good idea or what?
interesting twist for NMM.....lets see if this goes anywhere
So, wait...is Luna already free and NMM is a separate entity all together?
When I got to this part I remembered the story for it, I had completely forgotten all about it, and I have trouble forgetting things like stories, they usually just get mixed up with other stories until I start reading the story again and it all starts to separate from the others. I can't tell if this is an illusion from this Poison Joke or if this is supposed to be in his reality.
I haven't enjoyed a story this great since "Equestria's First Human' by CeeHoff. I also just LOVE the images you put into this. I wish I could see more.
3306990 id say ya her pain and hate broke her mind and gave her a spilt personality what James found is most likely what the elements could not destroy as you cant have light with out darkness (but truth be I gots no clue)
THIS STORY = "Really good."
+ ISSUE WITH THE LAW AND CELESTIA = "Great!"
+ STORY OF THE BLANKS = "Oh geez! Best 'story' I've read concerning them so far, and having a good one (Mitta) and a ghost?! Too cool."
+ "GOOD" NIGHTMARE MOON = "... you're starting to scare me with how good this is getting. Keep it up and I might just view this story to be as good as 'Past Sins', my favorite story of this whole site."
These two side-archs have made my day, the story is FINALLY showing true conflict between the main character and his surroundings, fellow beings, and self. I'd praise the author more, but I see a chapter that needs to be read, Toodles!
Personally after the whole incedent in sunny town or what ever I wanted to stop reading due to the fact that the house I currently reside in has a ghost well some one died here and its the middle of the night. But what intrigued me wad ruby, please show her more
First off, Sunny Town... that game gave me nightmares. *shudder*
2nd, i LOVE what you did with Nightmare Moon. i teared up.
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poison joke only effects you and not this far, that is far too real...
Btw, nice job with the music, played every single one while reading.
this chapter and the images were as creepy as hell!
... The Story o the Blanks thing, I could predict. Even though I actually expected him to find Nyx, the scene with Nightmare Moon was tender.
I think it's at this point in the story where most readers take more interest in it. It worked for me.
Oooooh shit the blanks this can't be good
who here has read battle of the blanks before or after reading this?
It's weird, Elementbrigade's story Gravity of the Odd Situation has the same thing... And let me tell you, it's still creepy then...
I have no words. . .
awwww shit
Ooooooh boy. Blank ponies.
Ya empieza a tener un mejor ritmo
I would have immediately ran away at those last words, considering what they said when he first arrived in the cursed town.
Okay, now it's starting to get good. The first few chapters were fine, the immediate romance with Fluttershy ruined it for me and made me stop reading (but now I'm back because Nightmare Moon showed up in promotional fanart of this story and I really hope she finds happiness and romance), but now with James on the run the story is finally getting exciting as I see more of his compassionate side shine through and low-and-behold we get a first encounter with Nightmare Moon.
Can somebody explain what was with that town! I know that it's cures but what was behind it?
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Play Story of the Blanks on Deviantart or Newgrounds.
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I played the game like you said. But I still need some clarification, and correct me if I'm wrong.
But is the reason the town is cursed because they killed a filly who had a cutie mark?
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You could read on and find out.
Bah, he ran like a pussy. Why not try to use the surroundings to his advantage and pick them off one at a time? Hit-and-run tactics. He's certainly fast enough for it to work.
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Some people are pussies. Some people are dicks. And some people are dicks who aren't always erect.
Not everyone has a warrior's instinct.
Furthermore, have you even played Story of the Blanks?
Wont lie, story of the blanks caught me off guard. (in the best way possible)
HUGE turn from what i thought was a slice of life type of story, and also i feel like there were too many osts for this chapter, that and when the section ends or moves on to a diff song it kinda sucks the feeling out, but well the last ost was cool so meh