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YES!!!!! An update to one of my favorite stories! I shall read immediately
Whaaaat? This story updated? ALL OF MY YES!
I think you had Lyra introduce herself twice... Once in the spa and once when Mitta was trying to eat Sugarcube Corner...
Sweet Jeebus. That was so worth not going to sleep.
Today has been absolutely amazing for updates and this was the icing on the cake!
Chapter length was well worth the wait, I'm loving how things are progressing.
Ruby is now best filly.
James repeated Spike's joke.
Lyra introduced herself twice.
Ruby is awesome.
I think you've gotten into the Milk Mare craze.
Still apparently wearing Big Mac's pheremones as cologne, bumped a few points up on Mrs. Cake's scale and she's married and with two children.
I just finished this. Its 3:43 am and I have school tomorrow.....Awesome.
That Luigi's Mansion refrince.
New Chapter?
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HALLELULIA!
But I only have 15 minutes before I go to school....
Get me a medic, I'm about to die from awesome! Love that feeling when I see a new chapter come out!!! :D
I have an idea. What about a fighting tournament?
Found one teensy little error:
You forgot to close the sentence with another " mark.
Doesn't really have any critique other than what Auora Dimmit mentioned, but i wanted to leave a comment anyways. awesome chapter! And i love the length, you can really immerse yourself in the story when it doesn't stop after every few thousand words.
1975287 Skyrim.
I think Lyra was introduced to mita twice...
HOLY S*Buy some apples* A NEW CHAPTER
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This is what I saw during the initiation part!
1975413 Sorry about that. Fixed it though.
Aside from that, what did you enjoy about this? It was a bit of a challenge to write, so I'm eager for feedback.
1974143 Not sure what you meant by repeating the joke, but I apologize for Lyra's double introduction. When writing a chapter this long, it is very easy to forget about little events that happened earlier in it.
And no, I know nothing about the "Milk Mare" craze. That was a reference to a comic I saw somewhere. Pinkie Pie gives a few of the Mane Six some milkshakes and they love them. Then Mrs. Cake pops up and asks if Pinkie did anything with the breast milk she had drained from herself and bottled. The Mane Six members realize why the milkshakes taste so unusually good and spit it all up at the two of them from off screen.
I can't seem to find it, but that served as the inspiration for that scene.
1975160 I'll fix that. Let me know if you find any other errors.
Aside from those, how did you like this chapter?
1974947 Nope.
1975667 ok just a suggestion
1975662 Pretty good. At first, I was going to raise a stink about how Rubi, being a ghost, shouldn't be able to be knocked around by Pinkie Pie, due to the former's incorporeal nature. Then I remembered that Pinkie Pie =/= Logic At the very least though, Applebloom shouldn't be able to put her arm around her...
Still, looking forward to what's next, particularly with Rainbow Dash. In my ideal scenarios for what's to come, this world has the same sort of herd mentality towards relationships that other stories *cough Xenophilia cough* have had. If for nothing else, it would increase the character dynamics and depth of the plot (no pun intended). Of course, this a highly enjoyable story either way!
1975641It was good. Do more story nao
One thing I'm confused about: was that the first time James and Fluttershy made love? With her being so nervous and asking "how should we do this?" one second, and then "Fluttershy has always been…well…shy about trying unorthodox lovemaking methods" a few paragraphs later...
OH GOD WHY DO YOU MAKE US WAIT AND THEN GIVE US A LENGTHY CHAPTER WITH WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY TO MANY WORDS!
Aw fuck...*reads later*
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this pleases me
1975660
At some point I remember someone mentioning Rainbow Dash with her head in the clouds/sleeping in the clouds, what-have-you before the main character mentions it. Within the same scene, essentially.
And yes, I understand that problem all too well. Just pointing it out so you'll recognize it after the fact.
Ah, well I'm not exactly sure where she originated, but a yellow mare with blue mane/tail in two shades popped up with two vastly large anatomically-correctly placed teats/crotchboobs. Milky Way or something? I don't remember her name... been real popular lately. Since I notice you tend to take common themes into account and include them in the story, I assumed Mrs. Cake's breastmilk milkshake to be a nod in that direction. I'll do a bit of sniffing around to find the source material you mentioned.
DAT SAUCY FLUTTERSHY
i think you have accidentally overwritten the chapter 'Into the Shadows' with the previous chapter 'Return of Nightmares'.
i hope you can fix that.
ahem.
yayyyyyyyyyyyyy.
*sees story updates*
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1975964 They have done so before, though it will probably be a long time before she has become completely used to such situations. That, and remaining reserved in such situations more often than not stays within her character.
That was SOOOOOOOOOOOO painful to read...the clop wasn't really woth it either :/
Then again I never really came to this story for such a thing.
AND HOLY FUCK PEOPLE DON'T NEED TO HAVE THE SAME INTERESTS TO BE ABLE TO LOVE! THEY CAN BE COMPLETELY DIFFERENT AND STILL LOVE EACH OTHER!
for example:
My moms a nurse.
My dad works at microsoft
3 kids.
Yea I don't see why james couldn't peice together that Rainbow may be crushing on him.
1976162 I do know of Milky Way, but she did not serve as the basis of that scene by any means.
1976908 Sorry about that. I was copy/pasting all of the chapters one after the other after proofreading them. I guess I forgot to swap out the text when I pasted in that chapter.
In any case, how was the latest chapter? It was a challenge to finish.
1976019 What pleases The Frog the most?
1978077 Not just interests, but personality-wise too.
Took me way too long to read this.
It was alright, but it just seemed like a 30k filler chapter.
1977994 She's so psyched, her cutie mark fell off!
But seriously, how was it? I found this chapter to be hard to do.
1975619Heh, my friend showed me that. What else did you enjoy?
1978084
i liked it. I was hoping for a chapter where you show us how mitta begins her new life.
are the next chapters peacefully before it is full of action again? I prefer it when it is alternated.
I think some peaceful time with friends between the adventures are necessary.
1978094 well that u updated and that it was awesome
1979463 loved it. cant wait to get to a part like this in my story.
Mitta is now an Amiga 3000
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Otherwise, it's a good chapter.
I can't wait for when Rainbow gives her confession... *Evil laugh*
for some reason this story made me thing of the phrase "nice guys finish last"....and how bullshitty it is but also how true it is....life is strange like that
love this story keep up the good work
1987202 No. Not yet.
1987748 Odd. I don't know what made you think that. Though what have you been enjoying from it in particular?