Surrounded by the Everfree Forest, filled with delinquents, devoid of morals and any real sources of magic, Ponyville is the worst place to live in all of Equestria. But it also has the cheapest rent and Twilight's life just collapsed to the point where she can't afford to live anywhere else.
Perhaps the only thing Twilight has going for her now is that Rarity, the most powerful pony in town, has taken a liking to her. Rarity is eloquent, but the leader of a gang. She's beautiful and intriguing, but the most irreverent and delinquent pony Twilight has ever met. Rumors swirl around her. Some ponies even say she and her entire gang are all vampires.
But Twilight is smart enough to not give in to temptations. Or join a gang. Or become a vampire.
Here's hoping we get the complete package. The last version I read hooked me in only to drop off the face of the earth just when things were getting really interesting.
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Full disclosure, the last chapter is about 50% done and everything else is written, so I got like a month to finish that. If you just want to skip to about the part where Pixlemoon's reboot left off then you can read the Everfree Vampire one-shot and then go to chapter 10 (both are going to be posted on April 16). The one shot should be enough to catch you up on the new mythology.
Yes! This will be most exciting!
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Good to know, and nah, I'll just re-read through it all. Been a while since I read it anyway.
nice work on both chapters out so far
A beautiful day for a neighbor.
They say trains wander into the forest after that never to be heard from again. Though on particularly dark, foggy nights if you listen just right you can hear the haunting melody of thousands of train whistles singing through the night.
One's an unfortunate event, two's a coincidence, three's a pattern Fluttershy, might want to see about investigating for signs of foul play.
Pssssst, hey Twilight, Twilight, hey, hey Twilight
In a world where political correctness has gone too far, Twilight will learn the meaning of friendship when she meets two mosquitoes, a sexy mosquito, and a walking talking confederate flag. This Summer, Twilight Sparkle stars in: Corruption of a PC Pony.
Are you sure? Are you absolutely sure? You don't sound sure.
Aaaaand just like that canon Twilight is immediately a Blue Diamond.
Glad to see this is back! I missed this story.
This certainly sounds interesting. I just wish there were more genre tags to fill me in on what to expect.
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Sorry, I'm just never sure what to put there! Mystery, drama, romance and thriller all almost fit but I'm not a 100% sure if I'd say it's any of those genres. I guess there's a little bit of adventure.
Yep, that's Twilight.
Her.
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Big Celestia is watching.
Impressive.
The fu- what kind of super hyper mega sheltered are you kid?
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Thanks!
Maybe I could have made it more clear, but chocolate is banned in Canterlot. Most ponies who lived there their whole lives would have never seen the stuff.
An interesting premise with an intriguing cover image. I’ll probably read this at some point.
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Celestia is the fun police I suppose lol
Well, this is good. But it the story took several left turns once Twilight got to Ponyville. None of that is a bad thing, but it feels like I'm reading an enticingly different story,
Halfway through the first chapter and I was sold.
I sincerely hope you finish this.
...though I am wondering g if I had ever came across the other versions of this story.
~Skeeter The Lurker
One thing about living in Ponyville I never could stomach. All the damned vampires!
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This guy gets it.
HA, you have all these ponies being terrified of the forest, and yet my snaky ass is relaxing in said forest.
So? this is the first time Twi feels like she has friends! Let her have some fun without scaring her after the first night!
Just to ask... You say you're updating on weekdays, are you planning a single chapter update every weekday or what? Just finished and not-so-secretly guilty of wanting more already...
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One chapter a day, so chapter 6 is Friday, chapter 11 is next Friday, chapter 16 the third Friday, etc.
The only exception is next Thursday when a one-shot in this universe will also be posted alongside chapter 10. So that's kind of like 2 chapters in one day.
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Sadness. I had a small hope that, given the two chapters on the 6th, it might be a two chapter a day sort of thing. But had a feeling that was a first day special. Whelp, time to buckle in for the long haul. At least it's one a day, not one a week.
nice work
Hundred percent?
Apparently you can get arrested for existing in this country.
Yes, Twilight, because as we all know the Everfree Forest is known for two things.
1) Being a forest.
2) Following sane logic and normalcy.
Hundred?
He?
Another great chapter! Looking forward to reading more!
I must say, you have improved as a writer.
Also who drew that pretty Rarity pic?
No but now i want one
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This is the artist.
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Thank you!
OMG you made it darker F*** celestia I’d rather have out with rarity and the gang
Even though it’s been a few years I still remember the original story
I’m glad you can back and redo the story I am still devastated with that ending
Hope you keep some of the same twists
Hmmm i dont like this universe theres some seriously fucked up shit going on here i want to grab twi and the other 3 before ordering exterminatus
Both sides are wrong in a lot of ways, 'Normal' ponies are just really idiotic claiming they have figured out everything. This reminds me of when I think the people who gave patents just stopped because they thought everything was already invented and were quickly proven wrong. And the vampire side is terrible to. The 'Bad' ponies are also just really idiotic, A LOT less than the 'Normal' side but while I'm too lazy to look for an example they just set off all the red flags in my mind. And yes the 'Normal' is worse in my opinion both sides suck a lot.
Conclusion: I'll have to continue with the story as it updates to see if my opinion will change.
There's quite a few fimfic authors that haven't updated their stories in years that are putting stuff out again lately and I couldn't be happier. This story in particular was the last one I really got into before I started focusing less on reading and more on writing myself so I'm particularly glad it's back.
This is getting better and better! The world you're hinting at sounds both horryfying and interesting! Well done!
nice work
Wow! This sure is the improved version.
Well this is emotionally charged, Defiantly faving this one.
Unusual
Notes?
For her
You're missing something there
It doesn't?
Also you're missing something here
Bit of a jumble there.
I'm Loving this with a capital L
It's funny, cute, and surprisingly thought-provoking. It even promises Raritwi on the near future!
there seem to be a lot more rules in this world and most for unreasonable reasons something tells me that when Luna (if she is around in this timeline) got sent on her forced vacation to the moon Celestia got a lot more Authoritarian. Also just a little something about last chapter I for a moment though Rarity had the whole room under some kind of mind control spell until thunderlane started talking that is.
Since I can't like each chapter independently, and liking and un-liking the story as a whole won't add any likes, please take this comment as another like and thank you. Looking forward to tomorrow, but actually kinda dreading the coming weekend now.
nice work looking forward to more
*Singsong* Twilight is in denial!
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nice work
And the Raritwi was delivered!! :D
That invisi-spider really has her on edge.
Must be 'Cartoon All-Stars to the Rescue'.
Maybe you should ask her to train you.
Beep boop. I am delinquent bot. Must kill ponies. Must kill ponies. Crush. Kill. Destroy. Swag.
Right, Team Edward it is.
Well that works out, there's thirty seven PSAs in that series.
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It's actually a coincidence that the number of PSAs is the same as the number of Slaughtertrain movies. I didn't intend that at all.
And I kind of see it as Twilight being paranoid about death in general, since her family suddenly died not long ago. That poor innocent spider is just something to focus it on.
Just... umm... one question, Twitwi... If you've never seen a movie before today, how do you know nerds are always treated so badly in films? Unless you're including poor Starburst and how she's treated in the PSAs...
Also... Wish it was Monday.
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Yeah, 'film' is the more general term she uses to encompass movies and PSAs. I probably should have been clear on the distinction there.
But yeah, she was talking about Starburst. Nerds are portrayed as idiots in most of these PSAs.