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Wherest thou hast gone? Silly filly, we are thee Luna of thee Night. Welcome to our domain, little one.

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Twilight's life has just fallen apart. With basically nothing left, she's forced to move out to Ponyville just to be able to afford rent. It's there that she makes a powerful, but dangerous friend named Rarity.

Rarity is one of those sorts, who lives for indulgence and breaks rules simply for the sake of breaking them, rumors even go as far as to claim she's a vampire. Twilight had always avoided such delinquents, living her life by all the rules up until now. And yet Rarity is different. The things she says makes sense, and the forbidden pleasures she offers Twilight are beautiful.

And slowly Twilight begins to wonder whether Rarity is offering her corruption or enlightenment. She wonders how far she'll let Rarity pull her along. Hopefully not enough to become a vampire.


Story originally by Epsilon-Delta but was deleted from this site. Permission was given from Epsilon to reboot this story and continue it.

Popular 5-20-18

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 22 )

Yay it’s back I am responsible for the cancelation and revival of the story

No pressure okay :twilightsheepish:

Take your time in redoing this I just hope applejack is not an A**hole this time

Vamponeeeeeeeeeeez :twistnerd:

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Well she got scared after I ask too many questions about the story i think I put too much pressure on her

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Oh my. That is not what she told me when I asked her for permission. At least you aren't the reason then!

nice work.

I missed this story! good to see it's up once again!

So will this reboot be just like the original up to the part where it was canceled? Or are you allowed to take liberties and change it up to your liking?

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I am rebooting the original version, adding some parts and taking. After the whole original version is completely up, I will be continuing with my own writing.

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Don't suppose you need some help? I'm willing to offer my support...

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Writing and or story planning.

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Maybe with story planning once I get through the first 70,000 words.

tracked the original, will track the reboot

I liked the original was sad to see it go, hope this is just as good as it was before.

Don't think I have ever read the original, but I like this so far very much :pinkiehappy:

"Twitwi?” Twilight asked under her breath. She'd read about nicknames like this. "Yeah...don't call me that."

lol

just to make sure she didn't blow her one real shot at a friend.

Because, as we all know, if you fail to befriend Fluttershy, you're not allowed friends anymore.

Her public yelling, her disregard for safety and social etiquette and her general devil-may-care attitude made her the single most wild pony Twilight had ever seen.

A blue pegasus dressed the same way, down to the sunglasses and leather jacket

So what else was Pinkie wearing that the similarities could be 'down to' the sunglasses and leather jacket? That's all Pinkie was described as wearing. I vote a polka dot tutu and a pair of clown shoes.

“The boss.”

The build up to the reveal would be a lot more subtle without the picture and story description.

“That word is highly offensive!” the earth pony said. “The lame have feelings too, you know.”

:ajbemused: "Weeooo weeoooo this here's the fun police, y'all got yerselves a permit fer havin' fun?!"

They said the l-word and the d-word. And then you hugged in public. That's all, you know, bad and stuff.”

I can't help but wonder if this is somehow a commentary on how delicately thin skinned people are getting these days.

“Well it is!”

“Why?”

In this AU Twilight has been nerfed down to the dumb one :twilightsmile:

Now for the typos.

Maybe it was because the fact
because of the fact

Twilight get off the train
Twilight got off the train

was rather uncouth thing to do casually
was a rather uncouth thing to do casually

on a cloud day
on a cloudy day

“Pfft! Look Pinkie. Dashie nudged
"Pfft! Look Pinkie." Dashie nudged

she just oozed elegance and grace.
Elegance and grace are synonyms.

this promoted Rarity
this prompted Rarity

So there they were, out and outcuddling in public.
Needs a space between the second out and cuddling.

Then she started walk around Twilight
Then she started to walk around Twilight

Rarity giggle a little.
Rarity giggled a little

I won't mention the 's thing because that one always confused me and it might be correct.

I find this Twilight rather relatable. I'm the same exact way when it comes to arguments and the bit where she went crazy with the candy and coffee was more or less me at a wedding once. There was free unlimited soda and I went ham. Must've had like 30 or 40 cans of the stuff, no joke.

This will take me a min to read lol.

“Relax, darling.” Rarity patted Twilight on the back. “I was only joking about that part. But in all seriousness, if there's anypony in town that you wish would take notice of you, then you need only tell me. I'd have them worshiping the ground you walk on in a blink of an eye.”

“A pity.” Rarity rested her check on her hoof and looked Twilight over mournfully. “Well if you ever do just point and I'll make him worship the ground you walk on. Thunderlane? Come dance with Twilight for a while.”

Uuhh... what? Repeatus deletus maybe?

I feel like this story is a metaphor for drugs :duck:

A nice clear cut chapter showcasing dismissal, disbelief, doubt, desperation, distraction, and finally... a decision.

Very well done! :pinkiesmile:

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