Twilight's life has just fallen apart. With basically nothing left, she's forced to move out to Ponyville just to be able to afford rent. It's there that she makes a powerful, but dangerous friend named Rarity.
Rarity is one of those sorts, who lives for indulgence and breaks rules simply for the sake of breaking them, rumors even go as far as to claim she's a vampire. Twilight had always avoided such delinquents, living her life by all the rules up until now. And yet Rarity is different. The things she says makes sense, and the forbidden pleasures she offers Twilight are beautiful.
And slowly Twilight begins to wonder whether Rarity is offering her corruption or enlightenment. She wonders how far she'll let Rarity pull her along. Hopefully not enough to become a vampire.
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Yay it’s back I am responsible for the cancelation and revival of the story
No pressure okay
Take your time in redoing this I just hope applejack is not an A**hole this time
Vamponeeeeeeeeeeez
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Wait, what?
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Well she got scared after I ask too many questions about the story i think I put too much pressure on her
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Oh my. That is not what she told me when I asked her for permission. At least you aren't the reason then!
nice work.
I missed this story! good to see it's up once again!
So will this reboot be just like the original up to the part where it was canceled? Or are you allowed to take liberties and change it up to your liking?
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I am rebooting the original version, adding some parts and taking. After the whole original version is completely up, I will be continuing with my own writing.
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Don't suppose you need some help? I'm willing to offer my support...
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Help with what?
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Writing and or story planning.
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Maybe with story planning once I get through the first 70,000 words.
I liked the original was sad to see it go, hope this is just as good as it was before.
Don't think I have ever read the original, but I like this so far very much
lol
Because, as we all know, if you fail to befriend Fluttershy, you're not allowed friends anymore.
So what else was Pinkie wearing that the similarities could be 'down to' the sunglasses and leather jacket? That's all Pinkie was described as wearing. I vote a polka dot tutu and a pair of clown shoes.
The build up to the reveal would be a lot more subtle without the picture and story description.
I can't help but wonder if this is somehow a commentary on how delicately thin skinned people are getting these days.
In this AU Twilight has been nerfed down to the dumb one
Now for the typos.
Maybe it was because the fact
because of the fact
Twilight get off the train
Twilight got off the train
was rather uncouth thing to do casually
was a rather uncouth thing to do casually
on a cloud day
on a cloudy day
“Pfft! Look Pinkie. Dashie nudged
"Pfft! Look Pinkie." Dashie nudged
she just oozed elegance and grace.
Elegance and grace are synonyms.
this promoted Rarity
this prompted Rarity
So there they were, out and outcuddling in public.
Needs a space between the second out and cuddling.
Then she started walk around Twilight
Then she started to walk around Twilight
Rarity giggle a little.
Rarity giggled a little
I won't mention the 's thing because that one always confused me and it might be correct.
I find this Twilight rather relatable. I'm the same exact way when it comes to arguments and the bit where she went crazy with the candy and coffee was more or less me at a wedding once. There was free unlimited soda and I went ham. Must've had like 30 or 40 cans of the stuff, no joke.
This will take me a min to read lol.
Uuhh... what? Repeatus deletus maybe?
I feel like this story is a metaphor for drugs
A nice clear cut chapter showcasing dismissal, disbelief, doubt, desperation, distraction, and finally... a decision.
Very well done!
What even is this version of Equestria?
Also I was just about to go to bed, and then you release two chapters?
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for her (?)
I believe you mean her horn
:]
Did she start talking like, Pinkie speed, or is that just an accident?
Also really nice chapter
Everyone, get yar shovels and pickaxes, we goin' deeper!
Missing capital
guard?
Also nice chapter, man you're fast.
foreleg
Yeah... And guns kill people. Applejack, that statement is so wrong...
Applejack is just dumb. By saying this, she pushes Twilight away from her. Just sayin' that this could be handled very differently, in a better way
O please Twi, you makin' me cringe rn
HAHAA, YES, using her own logic against her, I'm so proud of you TwiTwi
Is this fore
shadowingshipping?Plot
, they really aren't vampires!
Onwards friends, we must dig deepe', and unravel the secrets t'is story holds in it's core, maybe 'e can find som' treasures on tha way dawn!
Oh my god, she is so precious!
It'll just make it all the sweeter when she finally (hopefully) falls.
There are times in this story that Twilight is so relatable it hurts.
At any rate you seem to be on a roll, pumping out these chapters. Good for you, good for readers like me!
Jesus, what is this, third chapter in such a short time!?
Well, I'm certainly excited!
... I'm not gonna even
missing capital with Bramble
And why in the FLYING **** ARE YOU PROUD OF THAT
Daang, coolness training that's so cool...
And now she is almost if not already fully willing to join.
Hmm...
You just had to release this as I was going to sleep, didn't you?
Anyways!
*krhm*
We 're almoost to tha coor lads, keep diggin' and minin' deepar!
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Also yeah, I agree with that relatableness
Just wondering have you started to finish this story yet
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Nope.
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So why have you started posting chapters so fast
Starting off 'good'
Nice, acknowleding your own flaw.
Hmm... something about mud or water...
It's just her personal pocket-dimension where time stands still, so everything is fresh like that when they're pulled out
Repeatus deletus
Yeah, you don't have an enhanced eyesight Twi. Yet.
Depends. Almost anything can be made a curseword.
Pinkie power!
Hmm... I've always wondered this... Applebucking is you know, that what Apples do to their trees to get the apples fall. Now if buck is a swear...
"Twilight, you have committed crimes against Equestria, how do you plead?"
I wish I could link the video I'm referencing but sadly, I think it's not SFW enough. Maybe. Props to anyone who get's the reference tho. I'm not quite sure so I'll leave it unlinked
Wohoo! Achievement unlocked: Descending deeper.
Such language!
She learned to ventilate her anger. Nice.
Hmm... safe job you have there
Dash deals with it quickly. Pinkie juat wants to have her fun and so desides to humiliate... whichever of those three it is. No wait. Two. Right. That happened. Hmh.
So there still is three.
Yes, absolutely!
Aaah, the mud, it makes sencd now.
Best distraction ever
Never...mind(?) about the mud being holy water mud
The deus ex machina of this story, Rarity.
into the mud
Wait a second...
So is Aj a vampire too? Alujack? Applecard? Hmm...
And at this point I lost my writings, GOD DAMNIT!!!!
So I'll have to do another comment for the rest of the chapter...
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Why not?
Well, let's see where this goes, shall we?
I warn you, I don't remember my original rections to all of these if any, so... yeah.
Seriously?
Sick(?) roast
Now this is playing in my head.
For our sake, I hope it isn't!
Smooth as glass TwiTwi. And I mean glass like this
Nice.
I feel like my digging joke is getting a bit bland.
Welp. Let's get going, the new chapter is already up as of writing this.
What happened to the original? I loved that story, even if the ending was.... less then fantastic. How much has been changed? Did you pick up where the other left off or did you rewrite everything?-
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The original got deleted, I haven't changed anything except spelling errors, and I'm not at the part of where the original author left off. When this story gets to 70,000 words estimated, then it'll be caught up to the original.
Well that was adorable.
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I never saw the original, but honestly I'm fine with that. This is good enough on it's own, whether it follows the original or not.
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I wish there was a Track, but only after 70k words option on here. XD
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Ending? Last I recall it didn't really end, it just stopped before the Final Chapter could be made.... or is my memory wrong and I missed an update?
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No, you are correct. Check out the story on FIMFetch.
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The last chapter I mean.
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I would suggest changing the last chapter that I posted. It was bad and I did intend to change it significantly way back. That said, I disowned the whole thing so you can do whatever.
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How significantly are we talkin?