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misskoifishpony


Hello Fluttercord Fans and shipper fans alike! My name is MissKoiFishPony, but you can call me Miss Koi or Missy:) I love My Little Pony, I love to write, I love Fluttercord.

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Would you believe me if I recall the legend of the rare Sleigh Beggy and how she became the wife of the mage that can only be described as neither fae nor human?

Based on the manga & anime "The Ancient Magus Bride".


Story Editor: The Fan Without a Face

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Breath-Taking Cover Art by Kyumiku

Big Thanks to Yami-Sempai for allowing me to use the "The Wife of the Old Draconequus" title as the title for this fanfic:)

Music To Listen To While You Read

Beautiful Fan Art by CandyEater9115 on Deviantart / Discord-askblog on Tumblr

Naliah's review on "My Little Reviews & Feedback": https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213901/my-little-reviews-feedback/thread/413991/the-wife-of-the-old-draconequus

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 106 )

Thank you for using my favorite anime for this story it’s going to be amazing

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OMG, is this your favorite anime too?!:3 Squee^^ I’m so excited that you’re excited for this story and that you’re reading it:) Don’t be afraid to give me critical critique at any point if this story doesn’t honor The Ancient Magus a Bride. I really want to do this right:)

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Is that a good kind of "Wow" or a bad kind of "Wow"? :twilightsheepish:

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trust me, its the good kind. it makes me wish you could upload 15 chapters a day lol

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I can’t wait to see more I always picture those two as them

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Oh good, yay^^! Lol! I wish I could write 15 chapters a day, lol, but I'm only humanXD

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I know what you mean, same here:) It's cool to imagine them like Chise and Elias, especially Discord as Elias Ainsworth:)

Omggg, I love the story already!! :00

I love the magus bride, and already I'm intrigued by your story.

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Wohoo, another AMB fan in our mist ^^! So glad to have another AMB fan reading this story:) Don't be afraid to be critical of my work, I want to make sure this story honors the original source material <3 So glad that you're intrigued with the story and I hope it meets with your expectations:)

Alrighty, so right off the bat I can say you really should clean the description box up, because quite frankly it is a mess. There's a whole lot of information that just really bears no relevance to the story, and it can certainly turn a reader off your story as you have your actual description crammed into this info-dump sandwich.

Additionally, you have linked to the cover art in the story description, but don't actually have the image selected as your cover art. I'd suggest fixing that particular bit.

So I notice that you, or your editor, don't put a space after your ellipses. You should do so, as it makes the story much more readable.

Another thing I noticed, and this is something I am guilty of myself, you should try to avoid repeating the same words too often. For example, "proper" in the second half of the prologue.

Also Jesus H Christ that Author's Note. That's over a thousand words easily, and a lot of that is with no spacing.

Other than the previously noted issues and a few typos, looks good. Continue on.

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Thank you so much for, not only taking the time to read and critique my story so far, but for reading this and reviewing this so quickly:0 Dang, I'm impressed:0 And there was a lot to go through within these two chapters:0 Which makes me appreciate it even more^^

Alrighty, so right off the bat I can say you really should clean the description box up, because quite frankly it is a mess. There's a whole lot of information that just really bears no relevance to the story, and it can certainly turn a reader off your story as you have your actual description crammed into this info-dump sandwich.

All fixed up, let me know if my changes in the description helped:)

Additionally, you have linked to the cover art in the story description, but don't actually have the image selected as your cover art. I'd suggest fixing that particular bit.

Oh, this isn't the story's cover art. I'm still waiting on the cover art from the artist that I requested it from. This is just wonderful fan art a reader gave to me and I wanted to honor their work:)

So I notice that you, or your editor, don't put a space after your ellipses. You should do so, as it makes the story much more readable.
Another thing I noticed, and this is something I am guilty of myself, you should try to avoid repeating the same words too often. For example, "proper" in the second half of the prologue.
Also Jesus H Christ that Author's Note. That's over a thousand words easily, and a lot of that is with no spacing

Fixed, fixed, and fixed:) Let me know if I was able to fix all this up properly:)

Other than the previously noted issues and a few typos, looks good.

What other typos can you see in Chapter 2 besides the shared noted issues it has with Chapter 1?
Anyway, I hope that you'll stick around for Chapter 3 & beyond and that you enjoyed the story so far^^

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Everything looks to be fixed!

And I feel that is the job of your editor. You are paying them an absurd amount of money, after all.

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Hooray, everything is fixed^^ The reason why I asked about the other typos out there in Chapter 2 cause there might have been typos created when transferring my writing from Google Docs to Fimfiction. Trust me, my editor is an amazing editor with a reasonable rate, and I tried my hardest to fix any mistake in result of the google docs to Fimfiction transfer. But if it’s too much trouble to go through Chapter 2, I totally understand believe me. Thank you for all your help^^ I need to check your writing now:)

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Hey, editor here. And I do try my best to make the story as good as possible. However, even editors make mistakes. Also I have nothing to do with the summaries so I've never had any input there.

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My editor is right, and this is something I should have mentioned, the summary thing was entirely in my control. Not in my editor. Therefore, it was all my fault. Plus, even great editors can make mistakes. Sometimes, or rather most of the time, editing is a process that requires three or even four pairs of eyes. That's the beauty of Fimfiction. Not only does my editor help me when it comes to my story, but so do my readers:) Readers are like editors in a way:) Trust me, my editor had a lot to work with before it became the beautiful product that it is. The first draft of these chapters were very very roughXD It’s a miracle that they look this goodXD

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Not entirely sure why y'all are getting so defensive over this. I pointed out the mistakes I saw, said cheers, and moved on. I'm not trying to rag on you or your editor, simply pointing out things y'all missed, which is what you asked for in your forum post.

So with that said, cheers! Continue writing this lovely story.

Also, congrats on getting featured!

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Not trying to be defensive, more just clarify things. Didn't want you to think I was doing a half ass job and not helping Koifish as best I can.

*le gasp*

My God, yes!!!!!
Yes thank you so much! It's so perfect, it's so much like The Ancient Magus Bride (definitely one of my fav animes) I fricken love it.

I love the chapter :heart:. I am a big fan of manga and anime, I could imagine everything as the first episode started, I can't wait for the next update. MY FAVORITE SHIP AND MY FAVORITE MANGA THANK YOU FOR WRITING THIS FANFIC :heart: :pinkiecrazy:

I'm lucky to have found this.:yay:
Looking forward to gawking at The Ancient Magus' Bride.

What an amazing story and concept! It's impressive how in character everyone is and I'm so happy I found this story. Keep up the good work :)

Interesting start. Showing the flashbacks of the Fluttershy's past off the bat compared to Magnus Bride. And showing her mother still loved Fluttershy in the end. I have a feeling that the mental state Fluttershy she'll be in later, unlike the anime counterpart she's portraying, will be due to the conditioning of Cinch. Which makes sense how its up to Discord to save Fluttershy. And Fluttershy to save him.

I love Ancient Magnus Bride and Fluttercord so I do hope this crossover fusion goes over well.

And thinking about it. A appropriate alternate story title would be Ancient Magnus Bride of Discord.

Loved the Capper Cameo!

Interesting start, putting Fluttershy in the place of Sci Twi from the Friendship Games. The contrast of this bleak setting really makes way for the brighter atmosphere that Discord will show her soon.

Also, I hope Cadance is actually a helper and not helping the evil villain of this tale.

Part of me feels bad but I eagerly hope that Discord will cause some sweet sweet revenge on the Shadow Six for all their torment.on Fluttershy but then Fluttershy will show true kindness by stopping him. Part of me wonders if Discord will actually put Sunny's head on actual other parts of bodies for her crimes of cyber bullying Fluttershy with photo shopped photos of her on various things.

As for future chapters, I do hope that Discord may jokingly force Capper into tap dancing in tune singing his signature song from the movie. Or Discord making a Dr Stone Anime reference if Fluttershy encounters a cockertrice again with him. Also, maybe make the dragon Fluttershy will encounter later be Dragonlord Torch? And will we see the rest of the Canterlot High gals in this fic? As for Cinch, if Fluttershy does ever end up back "home" to visit. Have Discord visit too. I suggest you'd read Precious Blood by DisneyFanatic particularly the chapter "Delights" for inspiration on how to write if you ever do take my suggestion.

I wonder how Discord didn't tear that mole to pieces straight away after finishing off the wolves or was Discord too gleeful in killing those wolf fae?

I have to say though, I love the unique characterisation of Discord here. He's more calm and reserved but still retains that cheeky Discord trolling playfulness with a sharp wit and clever display. Hiding beneath that however is the inner darkness that I feel that you didn't emphasize enough at the end of last chapter.

Overall though, I am definitely tracking this and awaiting the next chapter.

This needs an audio dub, and I'd love to play Discord's role.

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The reason why my editor and I were a bit concerned with what you said, not your critique of course, but we didn't know if your comment about my editor didn't imply what my editor put in this comment below:
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Didn't want you to think I was doing a half ass job and not helping Koifish as best I can.

My editor and I just want to clarify things cause it's hard to decipher tone when it comes to comments here on Fimfiction. We're just making sure that you weren't being unnecessarily harsh on my editor who is working hard on this story with me. That's all.

I deeply appreciate you giving me your honest critique, your help, and reading my story:) Thank you for letting me know that this story got featured on, last Saturday right?:) Wow, I didn't even know so thank you for delivering such good news^^!

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OMG you like Ancient Magus Bride too?! And it's your favorite?! Well good thing my new story is addressing those specific needs^^<3 BTW, I did get your PM and you're right, it has been too long since we've talked and we need to catch upXD Thank you for checking out my new story and leaving your lovely thoughts, I deeply appreciate it:) <3

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At last, someone who has not only seen the anime and loves it but also reads the manga too:D! At last, come on in brethren;) Lol! But just seriously though, just like Fluttercord forever, Chise x Elias forever <3 AKA the ultimate anime couple that other anime couples pale in comparison to. Anyway, so glad that you're liking the story so far and that you really enjoyed the latest chapter cause that was my favorite to write so far^^

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Aww oh good, I'm so glad that you felt lucky when finding this story^^ I'm so flattered^^ You look forward to gawking at this story or the anime The Ancient Magus Bride or the manga The Ancient Magus Bride? I'm a little confused.

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XD yep that's right, and in fact I recently got the anime club to watch it at school, so hurray!
And yeah, it would just be great to catch up with you, Miss Hot Shot Writer herself. XD jk, but yeah!
I'm glad that my message was a good one!

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Haha lol I don't know about Hot Shot writerXD I'm still a Fluttercord fangirl writer that likes writing fluffy Fluttercord stories to satisfy my Fluttercord loving soul;) :p Lol! Oh cool, that's great that you're part of an anime club at your school, that the school is allowing itself to have an anime club, and that this club is watching The Ancient Magus Bride:) This is a good club;) Lol!

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Haha youre a hot shot fluttercord writer then. ;P
And yeah we basically had a riot until the school allowed the club. XD

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Haha lol definitely not a hot shot writerXD Definitely notXD Oh welp, if all else fails, riotXD Lol!

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Oh thank you, that is quite a compliment since that is one of the hardest things when it comes to alternate universe of our beloved MLP universe because despite different backstories and worlds that our characters now live in, they still have to be themselves^^ So I'm glad that they are in character^^ Well the concept isn't entirely new and original since it is mainly based on The Ancient Magus Bride and I have been using that to guide me and inspire me while writing this story, but I will make sure to make it as original as possible despite this:)

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Interesting start. Showing the flashbacks of the Fluttershy's past off the bat compared to Magnus Bride. And showing her mother still loved Fluttershy in the end.

Haha lol yeeeaahhh definitely BIG contrast between how Chise's story and her mom's story starts at the beginning of Magus Bride and how Flutters and her mom start in here:twilightsheepish:

I have a feeling that the mental state Fluttershy she'll be in later, unlike the anime counterpart she's portraying, will be due to the conditioning of Cinch.

That will be a big part of it yes, however there is that fear of the fae that will factor in as well;) As Fluttershy's journey continues in this story, well, let's just say that there will be more to deal with and it goes beyond her fear of the fae and the fear of her Aunt Cinch.

I love Ancient Magnus Bride and Fluttercord so I do hope this crossover fusion goes over well.

Haha lol same here pal, same hereXD

And thinking about it. A appropriate alternate story title would be Ancient Magnus Bride of Discord.

Haha lol well that would be quite a mouthful for a titleXD But then again, looking at my title, it's still a mouthfulXD But if I went with your title, well, I would get in trouble with DF since it's using "Bride of Discord" in itXD

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Loved the Capper Cameo!

Haha lol oh good, I'm so glad that you liked his cameo^^ Without giving too much away but this isn't the last we will see of our favorite cat;) This will be more than just a cameo;)

Interesting start, putting Fluttershy in the place of Sci Twi from the Friendship Games. The contrast of this bleak setting really makes way for the brighter atmosphere that Discord will show her soon.

Oh wonderful, so glad that you liked this chapter and the start of Fluttershy's journey in current time:) We shall see if the world that Discord brings her into is truly a bright world or a dark world or a different world all together;)

Also, I hope Cadance is actually a helper and not helping the evil villain of this tale.

Well, just like in The Ancient Magus Bride, the world of my story and it's character is not something that's strictly black and white. It's a world full of greys. It's a world of great beauty as well as great viciousness. It's a world filled with characters neither good or bad, but have both good and bad in them. Even characters we love have both good and bad in them. They'll be complex, flawed, and human and with their own reasons why they are the way they are. And Cadence is no exception to this rule, no character will be exception to this rule;)

Part of me feels bad but I eagerly hope that Discord will cause some sweet sweet revenge on the Shadow Six for all their torment.on Fluttershy but then Fluttershy will show true kindness by stopping him. Part of me wonders if Discord will actually put Sunny's head on actual other parts of bodies for her crimes of cyber bullying Fluttershy with photo shopped photos of her on various things.

Haha lol wow, you really don't like Sunny and the rest of her gang do you?;) XD Lol! Well, I guess I did my job in making them un-likable;) XD Lol!

As for future chapters, I do hope that Discord may jokingly force Capper into tap dancing in tune singing his signature song from the movie.

Oh my gosh, just, oh my gosh:rainbowlaugh:

Or Discord making a Dr Stone Anime reference if Fluttershy encounters a cockertrice again with him.

I have not seen the anime Dr. Stone:)

Also, maybe make the dragon Fluttershy will encounter later be Dragonlord Torch?

It might be possible or it might be impossible;) We shall see where Fluttershy and Discord journey towards next;)

And will we see the rest of the Canterlot High gals in this fic?

Hmm, again, we shall see;) Anything is possible and impossible at the same time;)

As for Cinch, if Fluttershy does ever end up back "home" to visit. Have Discord visit too. I suggest you'd read Precious Blood by DisneyFanatic particularly the chapter "Delights" for inspiration on how to write if you ever do take my suggestion.

Yes I have read this particular fanfic and I think I remember what particularly happens in the chapter Delights, but I'll refresh myself with the story just for inspiration for this story;) Thanks for the suggestion^^

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I wonder how Discord didn't tear that mole to pieces straight away after finishing off the wolves or was Discord too gleeful in killing those wolf fae?

Well, the way I imagined it in my head is that the mole men quickly knocked Flutters and quickly left out of there through a magical portal before Discord can even notice and hear them basically. There's a lot of wolves in the pack, all of them howling and growling in his ears and well let's just say he had his claws full. I don't want to say he was gleeful in this killing, but I can't comment anymore on that particular topic since we'll learn more about Discord as the story progresses.

I have to say though, I love the unique characterisation of Discord here. He's more calm and reserved but still retains that cheeky Discord trolling playfulness with a sharp wit and clever display.

Oh good, I'm so glad that you like how I'm characterizing Discord in this story^^ My editor said the same thing, Discord is calmer in this story but still has his playful Discord side to him:)

Hiding beneath that however is the inner darkness that I feel that you didn't emphasize enough at the end of last chapter.

True, I could have, good point:) But the point of this chapter was to contrast his first appearance from the last chapter to this one, thus creating contrast:) But don't worry, his dark side will be equal to his trollish side and the other sides of his personality;)

Overall though, I am definitely tracking this and awaiting the next chapter.

Hooray, victory to me^^ I'm so glad that you're tracking this and that you're joining us on this journey called The Wife of the Old Draconequus:D

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Haha lol well I want to finish my current audio drama, The Mare Who Became Queen, before tackling another audio dramaXD Have you see The Mare Who Became Queen?:) I also want to have a lot more of the story to work with before tackling The Wife of the Old Draconequus, and trust me when I say, this will be a long story and I want it mostly done before deciding on a audio drama adaption:) But I'm so flattered that you want an audio drama adaption of this story cause I do too, this story would be stunning to see visually<3 Do you have a youtube channel? If so, I would love to see and hear your voice reels for Discord:)

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At the moment, I'm part of the audio cast for The Bridge. Sadly, the project lead, Emerald Note, has not mentioned how far along we are to getting chapter 2 done, and I play Gigan, who doesn't show up until chapter 8.

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