First installment in the "Love, Adventure, and Friendship is Magic" series. Based on a rumor by John De Lancie about Season 5: What happens when Fluttershy invites a stallion to her tea party with Discord? How will Discord react? Why are the CMC involved? Who is this mysterious stallion? Cover art belongs to ARTbeta on deviantart.
Sequel
OF COURSE!
also FIRST!
And there are some parts when this story is present tense, but it's mostly past tense. You should fix that
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Haha congrats on being first:) But what did you mean by "OF COURSE!" ?
Aw man he's lying and their gonna be so pissed when they find out.
Ah the references! They keep coming!
I still can't tell if this is fluttercord or not. Am I stupid or something?
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Oh, I just meant of course the CMC!
This is a really neat story but it needs editing.
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Don't worry, you're not stupid. It's just very subtle Fluttercord romance. I can see why you were confused when reading that chapter. Anyway, thank you so much for reading & reviewing & liking my story♥
Great idea. But I can't get past the one problem that sears the eye: Too many "Fluttershy". The entire first paragraph keeps on about her, using her name each time. As long as a different character of the same sex hasn't been used, it should be "Fluttershy" the first time and then "she" and "her" after. As it stands now, it is really reminiscent of grade school narration in that respect. The rest of the narration is fine, but you need a lot more uses of personal pronouns instead of the name.
Still, if you fix that major problem, this will be much better.
Oh, and I agree with the above mention, keep the tenses straight. I suggest past tense for everything.
This seems like it's a nice idea but the way you put their names before each action gets too repetitive.
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OMG you commented on and read my story Wow, thank you so much! I'm a huge fan of your art for Bride of Discord Sorry for the repetitiveness, this was my first fanfic and I was getting the hang of writing. I hoped that you enjoyed my story regardless.
Oooh, this is gooood...
WOW
I'm Stellar Spiral and I approve of this sentence.
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XD
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS; KIDNAPPERS!!! YAY!!!
My name is derpy hooves..... you ate my muffin..... PREPARE TO DIE!
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i just can't seem to find any fucks
Daww.....
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Um excuse me, would u mind censoring out the f word in your comment?
Discord is going to be in SO MUCH TROUBLE!!!!!!!!!
: DISCORD!!!!!!!!!!! YOU LIED TO US TO GET YOU AND FLUTTERSHY TOGETHER!!!!!!!!!!
: But it's quite romantic, actually.
To Hasbro: My name is Scooter Dracon. You didn't make fluttercord cannon. PREPARE TO DIE!!!!!
To Doctor Who: My name is Scooter Dracon. You didn't add in Derpy. PREPARE TO DIE!!!!!!!!!
To Dusk's Dawn: My name is Scooter Dracon. You don't explain anything that is happening at all. PREPARE TO DIE!!!!!!!!!!!
To Equestria Girls 1: My name is Scooter Dracon. You were too caught up in the storyline to just make Twilight steal the crown or say "Oh, by the way, Principal Celestia, that crown is mine, so can I have it back?" PREPARE TO DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
To DisneyFanatic2364: You are too awesomely amazing to not be loved by everyone. PREPARE TO BE ADORED BY YOUR ULTIMATE FANGIRL!!!!!!!!
Screwall, Dinky, Kibou, Lighning, Thunder, Zany : (spring out from the bushes) WELL IT TOOK YOU LONG ENOUGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Me: (pulls them back into the bushes) Shh! It's enough that I took you on a time-travelling trip, let alone a universe-travelling trip, but I will NOT BE HELD RESPONSIBLE FOR ANY PARADOXES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
NICE!!!!!!! It was very well written and I liked the pacing. Everyone was very much in-character and I really enjoyed it! THE FANGIRL DEMANDS A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you for wonderful and hilarious reviews I deeply appreciate it There is a sequel and it's called "The Count's Traveling Haunted House". And there is a sequel after that and it's called "The Green Eyed Gryphon".
6034259 You forgot Flitterbee
Now that the actual episode came out, I still think of this story very fondly. <3
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Awww really? Dawww
tbh I am liking this so far. And this really is a good read.
aww, that was adorable. i loved it. 10/10 good read
Oh Discord...so jealous. Why can't it be a stallion instead of treehugger??
Hmm...I think I'll continue reading this story after all...
:APPLE BLOOM! SWEETIE BELLE! SCOOTALOO! GET OVER HERE RIGHT THIS INSTANT!
: yes Fluttershy?
: WHAT DID YOU DO TO STELLAR ECLIPSE!?!!
: Whatever do you mean Fluttershy?
: H-h-he's Dead!
:AND ITS ALL YOUR FAULT!
: Fluttershy...you actually think sweet innocent fillies such as us...would kill a pony?
: Oh girls I'm so sorry...I'm so sorry I blamed you for killing somepony...You three girls are too kind hearted for that.
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:Sweet! We all got the same cutie mark!
: Actually...I think that's blood...
: Sweet Celestia, what will AJ think?
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Dude. I am so with you on those last two ones.
EG1:
Disney Fanatic: OMGOMGOMGOMG I LUVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVV BRIDE OF DISCORD!!!!!!!!!!
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Depends on your definition of Fluttercord and stupidity.
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You're supposed to put the word between the two bracketed sections.
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DONT FORGET THE MOUSTACHE!
10/10 moustache my friend!
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You can always delete comments you don't like. Just a hint.
7033624 Damn! That went to the Dark Side fast!
I like it! ♪♫
Discord and the CMC...toss in Pinkie Pie?
Luna: "The Chaos has been quintupled! "
Seriously, Admins! How many times do we need to say this: WE NEED SOME BLOODY LUNA SMILIES ALREADY!!
6238620 Indeed, this one is just as good, if not even better than the Smooze story, plus is delivers its own episode-worthy lesson.
Oh my gosh, I laughed so hard when I read this. I love the movie, The Princess Bride, and this just made my day with the Discord parody of Inigo Montoya's famous quoted line.
Who's Baast?
It just occurred to me... Why doesn't Stellar have a Character Tag?
http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Stellar_Eclipse
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I don't know if you got an answer, but Baast was a character in the comics. She was a cat Fluttershy, Discord, and the CMCs meet when they go back in time. She apparently knew Discord very well. There was a hint of him once being her "love interest". She hissed at Fluttershy.
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Oh dios mio...
For now?......MORE CHAPTERS!!!
XD NOOOOO, Discord, that's manipulation ajsjjsjs. Awww this is so cute and funny <3