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RarityTookManehattan


If I was a pony, I'd be Rarity, darling! (okay, and maybe a little Fluttershy) ^.^ Just a British girl who passes the time by writing (and reading!) pony-centric fiction

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It's been a while since Fluttershy and Discord have met up for one of their usual tea party, cucumber sandwich get-togethers. Determined to be a better friend than ever before, Fluttershy pulls out all the stops - but after an accidental reminder of Discord's betrayal, the meeting takes an unexpected turn.

Short story written for the fluttercord prompt tag :pinkiesmile:

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Comments ( 39 )

This is so adorable. Fluttershy's behaviour at the beginning was ridiculously aww-inducing. :rainbowkiss: :yay: :heart:

Sweet. I'm not always a fan of the two characters just kissing like *snap* that and things kind of went fast, but for what it's worth, it was a nice read. I liked Fluttershy's weak yet kind attempt to make Discord feel comfortable in her home.

5210742 thanks :scootangel: I wanted it to be as cute as possible hehe :heart:

5210871 yeah, it was quite fast paced, I'm still finding my feet with fanfics :twilightblush: I'm glad you enjoyed it though! :pinkiehappy:

5210742
Dear author, my thoughts exactly as palakai. She would most definitely do that, and I loved it.

I also agreed with
5210871
in terms of the fact that there wasn't much detail with something as important as a first kiss with a couple. However, this was so fluffy and regardless of anything, I'm adding it to favorites. If you're new to fics, well, it won't be long until you start getting popular, I'd imagine. Your writing is pretty good and your characters are pretty spot-on. My fave part was the beginning, for sure, and how Discord made her think it was excellent by pretending to checklist it and almost being like a chaos inspector.
And you wrote it in a way that made you tell they had been feeling something for each other for a while now. It wasn't just a "oh, hey, let's have them get together now."
And yes, the last bit was cute. I liked Discord's last line especially. :yay:

Although im more a fan of "many long chapters of relationship building", as a one shot short story it was very good. In actual episode it would probably end up with a hug but still, kiss after that heartfelt moment would be also possible and natural. Also liked that you thrown CMC into that. Do you read comics too? Do you know that Discord is best buddies with CMC and act as honorary cutie mark crusader? :rainbowkiss:

Fluttershy was very cute, and Discord's compliments were very sweet.

Good job. This deserves a cookie. :3

Aw, this was cute!

5210996 As a first time fic, it's still very sweet and good. I enjoyed it. Based off this, I'm sure you'll get there once you do get your feet. :pinkiesmile:

5211126 aww thanks!!! :pinkiehappy: :heart: it was only a short story so in the end I decided not to include too much build up or detail :pinkiesmile: I've only been on fimfic since earlier this week so your comments mean a lot :scootangel: thank youuu! :heart:

5211392 I haven't read many of the comics but I did know that Discord is an honorary cutie mark crusader, that's partly why I included them at the end :scootangel:

5211670 thanks :heart: I wanted it to be as cute a story as possible :pinkiesmile:

5212040 thanks! That's what I wanted to hear :scootangel:

5213135
If you havent read the recent comic and you're a fluttercord shipper then you should prepare for a treat :trollestia:

5213260 I'm buying it soon :pinkiehappy: can't wait! :yay:

Awwww! That was cute!

Ow, my teeth, that is so sweet.

Cute story, well done.

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
(insert wisecracking Discord emoji here)
DA FEELS MAN

5254341 they definitely need to add a discord emoticon :discordgasp:

5256789 :pinkiegasp: Someone saw my comment
This is like that time in BoD that Zecora didn't rhyme

So cute and Sweet! :heart::twilightsmile::raritystarry::yay::pinkiehappy:

I love your prose! You describe Fluttershy so gracefully ;-; the story was true to the characters and oh, so sweet. I loved it!

How does the lord of chaos go unnoticed :rainbowhuh: anyway great story! :twilightsmile:

The middle felt a tad rushed, but this is still super cute. I especially liked the bit about the CMC at the end. :yay:

Dawwwwwwwwwwwwwww so cute I love it:trollestia: have a :moustache:

So cute! Great Job!!! :pinkiehappy:

Fluttershy is so adorable!!!!!! I'm definitely liking and favoriting!!!!! :pinkiehappy:

So....much....cuteness!!:heart::yay:

This was actually pretty cute. It was really sweet of Fluttershy to go to those lengths to try and make Discord more comfortable in her home, and I thought it was rather humorous when he donned an inspector's attire. This was an engaging and adorable read. Thank you kindly for sharing. :twilightsmile:

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