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Yes. I know, I'm a horrible person.

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When Sunset Shimmer finds out her best friend Fluttershy hasn't been asked out to the school dance, the young girl takes it upon herself to change that, with an anonymous letter. Little does she know, how it'll change everything.

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That was a lovely little story. Very sweet and very well written. :twilightsmile:

7949848 Thank you very much :twilightsmile:

69/10, needs more clop :trollestia:
hehehe

Nice work though ya arse, perhaps one day you'll reach my level my padawan :ajsmug:

This was a very sweet Sunshyne story with nice buildup and emotion put in.

Awwww you didn't have to credit me! I was happy to help, and I love how it turned out! Such a great first story, seriously. You rocked it! :D I think I have a new ship thanks to you! ;D

Really cute. Loved it. :heart:

Honestly, with how much of a clever bastard Sunset can be sometimes, and with how well she can be shipped with any of the girls, this seems quite in-character, so far as the phrase can be applied to fanworks. Very cute, and all-around warm and fuzzy (but then again, anything romantic involving Fluttershy being warm and fuzzy is mandatory).

Awww, so much cuteness, I really like it :raritywink:
What better way to start a day than a cute SunShy story :scootangel:

This was a wonderful story I am left wanting to see at least six sequels to it. Truly one of the best stories on this website. Well written well thought out and well done. :twilightsmile:

7956968 Thank you very much. i thought about writing a sequel but i don't know if people would like it or not.

7957002 Well you have found one that would like to read it. Besides you shouldn't be afraid of what people like or dislike all that matters is what lies in your heart. If you feel a sequel will be something worth doing then shoot for the stars and do it the first step is to simply believe in your self and let the other stuff fall where it may. I for one would love to read a sequel to this wonderfully written story.

7957002 I would read a sequel.

...not terrible. Not great, though.

But not unsalvageable, either, and also has some cute bits!

Some of the girls' dialogue is off (I can't imagine a universe where Rainbow would ever say "oooh, do tell!" :D) , as are several instances of grammar, and maybe it's because I'm Old(tm) but for some reason every single note outside of the "meet me at the dance" one sounded kinda stalkery. ^^;

That one's subjective though. What's objective is that, we have no idea why Sunset is into Flutters, even with the big confession and the scenes with her and Fluttershy alone beforehand.

And that's the biggie that stops this story from having rewarding substance as opposed to hollow saccharine feels. The base concept is super-adorbs and the ending is, even with the lack of explanation on Sunset's part, ultra-cute--but how do these two gals connect? What compels the otherwise very canonically assertive Sunset Shimmer to send Fluttershy notes and stress out about a possible negative reaction from the nicest, most conflict-averse girl in school?

My advice for your next time out is to think on these things. Magic will happen, I promise. :raritywink:

P.S. Just noticed the publish date. If you wrote this in a rush to get it out for Valentine's Day... well, stop that, it'show stories die before they even get off the ground :D

7963337 Thanks for the advice and the favorite. and i know, i kinda had Rainbow Dash out of character but it wasn't on purpose. and i also kinda figured that the way Sunset and Fluttershy connect was kinda out there you have the cute shy kind girl and the determined girl who has a bad past, so i just kinda thought that she might want someone to have so she can forget her past but that might just be me. (also sorry if i kind of sound like a asshole i'm not) but thanks for the advice much appreciated, and i will try to do better next time :twilightsmile:

Huh. Letters of Love, huh? Sounds like a cute story. Lessee, here...

“Shoot, I’m surprised you had one person askin’ you to the dance, much less several.” Applejack teased, crossing her arms over her chest and smiling softly to herself as Rarity huffed.

“Oh really?” Rarity quipped. “Well, how many people have asked you to the dance?”

“How do you know I’m not the one doing the askin’, sugar cube?” Applejack smirked.

:pinkiegasp: WO-HO-HOOOOOAAAA! .....this.....
:pinkiesmile: This gon' be good fic.

“If I could give you one thing in life,
I would give you the ability to see yourself through my eyes,
Only then would you realize how special you are to me.
Signed,
Your secret admirer”

“I love that you’re shy
But please don’t fear
I am always the happiest
When you are near”

“When I hear you sing
It makes me weak
Your voice is like an angel
So perfect and sweet”

“No more notes,
Let’s meet face to face.
At the dance,
We’ll seal our fate.
Please don’t be alarmed
When I confess;
That in a sea of red,
I’ll be the girl In the blue dress”

:raritystarry: AAAAWWWW~!! /):rainbowkiss:(\ I'm a sucker for adorableness like this! :twilightsmile:

“No!” Fluttershy said loudly (or loudly for Fluttershy anyway) as she snatched Sunset’s hand back to her. “No, I don’t want to leave at all. I just…well…” She averted her gaze, her face as red as a tomato. “I was wondering why you didn’t kiss me after a speech like that.”

“Wha…?” Sunset gasped softly, and then didn’t hesitate. Keeping Fluttershy’s hand in hers, she slipped her other hand into Fluttershy’s long, side swept hair and pulled herself against her. Sunset tentatively dipped her head, watching as Fluttershy closed her eyes and parted her lips slowly. The sight made Sunset’s heart pound and erased all of her nerves as she hungrily pressed her lips against Fluttershy’s. The blonde emitted a soft moan as her arm went around Sunset’s waist, pulling her closer so that there was no space left between them.

:raritystarry: :pinkiehappy: :yay:

Applejack rolled her eyes. “Rarity, why don’t you just shut up and dance with me already?” She demanded, holding her hand out.

Rarity blinked, and then smiled at AJ. “Well…alright. Just no line dancing!” She said, taking AJ’s hand and letting her lead her out to the dance floor.

:ajsmug: :raritywink:

Yes! All the ships! :pinkiecrazy: ALL OF THEM.

This was adorable! I'm very glad I read it!

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Yay! I'm so glad you liked it, it means the world to me that people love this story so much. I'm so thankful that you took the time outta your day to read this. :pinkiehappy:

9066422
I always have time to get a little Sunshyne in my life. :twilightsmile:

Always a nice story to go back to when you're in the mood for something mushy. :twilightsmile:

While Fluttershy was shocked, and wanted to question how this person was so good at sneaking notes to her,

Either they've managed to master the art of misdirection, or they asked Discord for assistance. Either one's possible, really, given who it is.

She was too shy for them to really notice…and whoever this girl was happened to like the fact that she was shy…

Well then, Wallflower just became a candidate; both she and Fluttershy are naturally looked over and underestimated because of their shyness. The two wallflowers can go together now.

“If I could give you one thing in life, I would give you the ability to see yourself through my eyes, Only then would you realize how special you are to me. Signed, Your secret admirer”

This is by far the most perfect love letter ever

This was by far, one of the cutest things I ever read. <3

*Que me literally screaming through half of this because AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!! it's so cute!!!!*

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