There is nothing that the Apple Family holds more dear then Family, Integrity, Honesty and Hard Work. Under these guiding principles, the Apples have managed to overcome every challenge, no matter the hardship. Applejack is no exception. Her very identity is built on them.
So when her relationship to Apple Bloom is called into question, there is no way that she can take it laying down.
Special thanks to Jet Storm for editing this story.
And, special thanks to Little Tigress for drawing this story's coverart.
Chapters (4)
Why isn't there an Apple Bloom tag?
Hm....
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I was on the fence about that one, actually.
I think I'll add her tag in a bit.
That's not what she said to Braeburn
i would be in disbelife as well if my sibling turned out to be my child
Another Applejack story! There can never be too many Applejack stories!
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Applejack was raped? Holy CRAP. That got dark in a hurry...
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Maybe, or maybe not...
Granny Smith, and Big Mac don't know for sure... They literally don't know what happened in Manehatten. And, the Oranges don't seem to have any clue either.
What happened will be covered in later chapters.
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Ugh, fingers crossed.
But since as an Earth pony Applejack cannot work enchantments, it seems unlikely that she did it to herself. And what, if anything, could be so horrific that she would request having her memories erased, and false ones implanted?
This looks to me to be a difficult trek for all concerned.
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PS: Sorry I forgot to put up the Spoiler block things. I have since corrected my error.
Oh, good. This is much better than Apple Bloom being an incest foal.
I honestly wasn't expecting this. This is a very intriguing story. I shall wait for the next chapter.
I have two thoughts in mind that maybe don't fit with the story, but would be something I really like.
1. I mean I would like to see that Applejack is actually Appleblooms mother, but then you would have to add a likeable romance/former parter that lived with Applejack back then before he probably died or something.
2. I kind of hope it is not something, like that Big Mac isn't actually her brother and both of them were actually together or some weird stuff like that, anything is possible in my eyes sometimes.
I hope they don't really go looking for that stallion, I don't exactly need some sort of rape or drunken sex thing here.
Then again, I probably would like to see it rather that way, I mean that Applejack maybe had her first taste at strong alchohol and wasn reacting poorly to it. which made them have an easy time. I mean this way the stallion would not be that important or is actually already in prison.
I guess I want to avoid a sudden intoduction from her random love choice and I would prefer it if it focus on the fact that Applebloom is her daughter first.
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yep I honestly thought that for whatever reason that would be still the big suprise, I really hope it is not Applebloom the incest foal.
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Sometimes for some reason like here, that would be a true that would be maybe a bit hard to swallow for a moment, depending on how hard they try to get the feels out of you.
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I really like this story so far, it keeps my attention and I'm always suprised, I think I put it in my favourites for now already.
I just hope this is longer and depending on how the story ends I would maybe consider a sequel.
I could image for now they kind of try to solve her problems and the second story could focus more on the bonding time, not sure what you have planned or how fast you let things happen.
So, I'm glad my story has been entertaining everyone so far. And, I do hope further chapters are also interesting.
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First off, I do have a sequel in mind. But, I haven't gotten around to writing it yet. I can't say too much about it because that would require spoilers for this story.
Second, I've been trying hard not to comment too much, for fear that I will spoil the rest of the story.
But, I do need to address this one question:
At the risk of saying too much -- or disappointing some readers...
Actually, I'm gonna throw up the spoiler tags anyway:
Apple Bloom is not an incest foal. She is not the daughter of Uncle Orange, Big Mac, or any of Applejack's other relatives.
Unless otherwise mentioned in the story, Applejack's cannon family is still her family in this fic. For example: Big Mac and Applejack are still brother and sister, Bright Mac and Pear Butter are still their parents, Granny Smith is still their grandmother, and the Oranges are still Applejack's aunt and uncle.
I didn't want to write an incest story this time for a couple of reason. One, I wanted to take the story in a different direction. And two, I didn't think I could address such an advanced topic in a respectful, and interesting way -- I couldn't write a fetish fic either...
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honestly not sure how the person claiming incest foal never caught your subtle hint to who her father is.
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I'm sorry if my response came out abrasive... I hadn't meant to be mean.
I just wanted to clarify that issue, as I was seeing it a frequent concern of several readers. And so, I wanted to clear it up... I suspect some of the confusion is being caused by the fact that I've been obsessed with keeping future chapters a secret until I release them.
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i wasn't complaining just noting, it seemed kinda obvious who her father is.
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ok.
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I like your answer.
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Well no no harm done, I haven't exactly noticed anything mean and you mostly said stuff I liked to hear.
Not sure why it should be so obvious who the father is, but I will take another look.
I mean not sure where the hint should be, right now it seems to be some kind of knowledge we should have from the show or the comics, because I haven't notice anything being mentioned in the chapter itself.
To me I say let it be Applebloom and Applejack for now, because it happens often enough that the introduction of a random partner at some point is hardly ever done in a way that makes it feel right. I mean it always looks as if we would be supposed to suddenly like that partner, but at that point other authors sometimes don't manage to make the love interesst somewhat likeable. It is like "here like him....now!" and then we have to well accept that character.
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ok.
Applebloom forgot to wash her hooves.
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whoa, this is totally crazy... I love A.J.'s reaction to the news her sister is her daughter. XD I really hope this is just a conspiracy theory! XD
Really awesome story, I love the way how you build up to the premise, and how the revelation is handled. I'm really loving this story... and not just because my special somepony did the cover art! ^^
Really lookign forward to the next chapter, keep up the good work! ^^
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Thanks
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Wow, she managed to do that with her sister (possibly mom), one writer and two editors watching. What a cheeky foal.
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Bloom's got skills...
I edited a story (and its sequel) that used this same theory, minus AJ herself also not knowing she was Apple Bloom's mother. They both got immensely positive responses, and so far this story is as well. This is an interesting addition to the premise; not only is Apple Bloom going to have to cope with the fact that her sister is actually her mother, but Applejack herself will have to cope with the same in reverse, and my guess is that she'll try to put her past together piece by piece as the story progresses so she can accept the fact that this whole ordeal happened in the first place.
There is still a large number of errors interspersed in here, which breaks immersion quite a few times...
But I'll be keeping my eye on this.
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I'm glad I got your interest, and I hope that my later chapters will also be interesting to you.
As for the errors. Thank you for letting me know. And, I'm sorry about them. I will make another pass on the chapter at a later date to try to clean up any straggling errors that we missed during our last editing pass.
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Dude I think you should release the next chapter. I know the bet was 75 but come on, I mean close enough.
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As you wish. Shazam! The chapter cometh.
Dun. DUUUUUUUN! O_O
I believe this speaks for itself.
ow my feels
Oh god. Blueblood is the father, isn't he?
Is that because of the birth years?
For a moment I thought Blueblood would ask/force Twilight to marry him again, that already happened in a story.
Anyway I kind of hope Blueblood isn't the father, honestly I want this to be between Applebloom and Applejack, them getting better before the story even thinks about introducing a father, at least that is what I would prefer.
I'm not sure anyway, for some reason it looked more like she was deeply depressed and rape looks like it would make more sense.
Anyway, I noticed in this chapter how much I need the true to come out.
I can't wait and while I like this troubled feeling of the story, I kind of hope it's not an unlikeable option, I can't exactly predict which outcome I would prefer.
I guess I don't care for who the father is as long as he isn't kind of joining the family in the middle of the story. I mean I don't mind if they do something against him, but I really want the focus to be on mother and daughter at the moment.
edit: Now that I think about it, I would love it when because of an headace or memories coming back, Applejack would break down and only Applebloom could really do something to make her feel better about it, maybe ....I don't know cuddling and talking to Applejack, making sure she understands that Applebloom at least doesn't hate the fact of her being her mother or something bittersweet like that.
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It's because of the death years. Apple Bloom was born 992; this matches Applejack's memory, so it's reasonable to assume that this is correct. When dealing with children/foals, 3 years makes a huge difference, and it would be immediately obvious if Apple Bloom was three years older than her friends. So, she was born 992.
Bright Mac and Pear Butter died 989. This is what's inscribed on their headstones, so it's reasonable to assume that this is correct. This would be an enormous mistake for the mason to make, especially in a small town like Ponyville where they almost certainly knew Bright Mac and Pear Butter. So, they both died 989.
Therefore, they could not possibly be Apple Bloom's parents.
As for Blueblood being the father, this seems unlikely to me. It's a bit too obvious a plot point. You ask me, I would say that Blueblood isn't Apple Bloom's father, but that he knows what happened, or at least knows that something happened with a friend of his from St. Wind's, and either knows or can figure out who her father is.
Heck, maybe his friendship problem is related to this, like he's tired of keeping the secret and wants his friend to do the right thing, but can't figure out how to convince him.
Speculation!
I love/hate how Applejack screwed up her magic consultation. The moment she gets an answer she likes she ends the conversation, when a more detailed description of the situation would have revealed that this is exactly what you would expect from a failed Erasure.
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Apple Bloom was born three years after Applejack's parents died. So the death years are the problem.
The only reason this is a thing is because the show writers have done such a HORRIBLE job with the show's timeline.
Seriously, the whole history is a friggin' disastrous mess. Try writing out all the events sometime, you'll find contradictions GALORE!
Anyway, Big Mac and AJ had incest because hillbillies and rednecks. The End.
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I kind of like the idea that maybe Blueblood knows the one that raped Applejack if that should be what happened, I'm kind of sure that was not what you meant but you made me think about that. That kind of makes it look like two stories or two sides working on the same problem but from to different uhhmm standpoints?
Well thank you for the explanation, I can pretty much understand much in english but some hidden meanings or something maybe slipp my mind sometimes. Which is why it can happen that I haven't understood everything you meant, but I think I did.
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yeah I made a small mistake, I should have noticed that them being dead wasn't exactly being about when they were born, I mean the thing with when Applebloom was born and when they died.
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To be honest not sure if that was what Twilight said, but to me it looked like Applejack should have noticed something with her having those headaches, then maybe with what Big Mac said, but maybe her brain won't work that way because that isn't even what she wants to believe right now.
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My pleasure.
It doesn't even need to be as dark as rape, in fact. It could well be that Applejack did, in fact, get accepted to the school, and while there met a young colt/stallion that she got along well with, and there was no actual problem until she became pregnant. It's possible and maybe even likely this would have created a scandal, so the Oranges and whatever other party decided to hush it up, had both their memories adjusted, and then sent Applejack home with an explanation for Granny and Mac, and a payout to keep them quiet. This could still put Blueblood working to solve the same problem, if he knows what happened but is trying to figure out how to convince his friend of the truth.
Like I said, though, speculation, which I am going to stop doing now because any more and I'll just be confusing the issue.
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that would be okay, but I just don't want that stallion to play a role in this story because I like to get an newly introduced and good introduced character if she should need to have a partner in this story. I just hade those dummies they sometimes throw at us and say "like them" despite them having not much to like.
I think I like that too, I'm maybe a bit mean there, but I like the thought of Big Mac and Granny smith being one of the villains here.
I like the possibilite for Applejack maybe starting a new life, taking the bold approach of letting her not be an apple farmer anymore and helping at some other acre in a future sequel or doing something else, I love stuff like that most of the time.
okay but I started to really like the ideas your giving me.
In complete honesty I didn't expect this to be as good as it is. I'm glad I started reading it. Just curious but is this going to be a really long series or like a five chapter type of deal? If you can't let anyone know it's fine. Just wondering.
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Thank you, and I'm glad you like it.
The story itself is fairly short (4 chapters which I've actually already written). This story is focused on Applejack and her problem. Further stories may be written down the road if my muse wills it -- or if someone else decides to write one.
Ive been releasing the chapters slowly for a couple of reasons:
1) I have time to consider the chapters before I release them from the light of the comments I'm getting.
2) I don't want to make the story feel too daunting by releasing too much too fast. (E.G. it's easier to read a 4K chapters every other day for a week, then one 15K story in a day.)
So not only did Bright Mac and Pear Butter (shouldn't that say Buttercup?) die two years before Apple Bloom was born, but Bright Mac died two months later than his wife.
Something is very wrong with these graves.
I know I said this seemed unlikely to me... but I was sort of still right. Out of all the scenarios I had envisioned possible, this was not one of them.
Something is rotten in the State of Henmark.
so in this story blueblood isnt a complete dick haza
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Yup. What he did to Rarity at the Gala was pretty rude, but he's not actually a jerk in person (at least not in this story)...
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thats good I like the fan theory that he uses the rudeness as a persona to help keep gold diggers away