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Bad news: Sunset's sick. Good news: She has Twilight, AJ, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie and Rarity to keep her company and see her through to a recovery.

Book 1 of "Not Just Any Old Day"

Part of "Not Just Any Old Continuity", which includes
The Crystal Prep Chronicles
The Anon-A-Miss Saga
TimberTwi Tales

Cover art by Haden-2375

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Chapters (11)
Comments ( 100 )

Are there different kinds of wave of nausea?

Don't mention to her about getting laid.

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Possibly. I just felt "nearly overwhelming" would fit the situation.

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what are you talking about......

In regards to the fourth paragraph; when you put to characters in a conversation every time you switch from one speaking to the other you should switch paragraph. It helps for easier understanding who is the speaker and it's easier on the eyes.

Same issue I pointed out in chapter one.

I like your story though an editor would help.

"Rarity's shift is almost over, so she'll be first. I'll be next, because after she sees you she'll pick Lily up and then it'll be my turn! Applejack should be next since she'll need to grab her toolbox after she finishes at the Aunt Orange smoothie stand. Fluttershy should be done with her volunteering by the time Applejack finishes with the railing for your stairs. Rainbow Dash will be next, and by then Twilight and Timber Spruce's date should be over! This way you know who to expect and when to expect them, and the readers will too!" Sunset blinked. "Umm...what?" Pinkie Pie giggled. "Don't worry, silly! Everything's going to be fine!" Sunset blinked again, then thought to herself that it was just Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie. Questioning such things only furthers confusion.

you loved writing this, didnt you?

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I'm new to writing. ^_^; Know where I can find a good one?

when a new character talks start a new paragraph

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There are a few groups dedicated to finding editors.

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I'll keep that in mind while I'm writing the next chapter. =) Thanks for the advice!

I sense a theme with the dream

The dream is getting weird.

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Weirdness and Pinkie Pie are inseparable. =P

please don’t let the comfort animal be angel bunny. any other bunny or rabbit is fine

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That thought never occurred to me to have Angel bunny as one of the animals. He seems like far less of an asshole in the EqG world, though.

Double the sillies.

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Same here, I didn't see that coming either, how is it that Sunset is meeting herself but as her pony self, it just doesn't make sense and suddenly I have figured it out, the only one who LOVES Chaos in Equestria is behind this, none other then Discord!

Just then the Song 'Discord' starts playing as we see Discord come out of no where and starts to sing along to the song and once it finish's he vanish's then.

Aaaahh this is so awesome! Enjoying the story so far <3
Keep it up! ;v;

Thanks for writing this precious fic <3

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I'm touched! Thank you for the kind words! =)

I started ro sing the theme in my head after I read that certain line

Now all we need is Princess Luna

This was such a sweet little story ;v;
and I must say, Sunset recovered fairly quickly with her friends by her side >u<
Wonderful job with this, really made my day with the light-heartedness of it <3

Always a bad idea to visit someone with a stomach illness. Highly contagious stuff going on there.

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Mission accomplished. Huzzah!

Watch the new intro of Season 8.

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Oh, it's not quite over just yet. ;)

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I did. See my thoughts along with my take on the newest episode. I JUST posted a blog about it.

Please please please please please PLEASE turn Sunset into an Alicorn, after everything that's happened to hear she deserves ascending into one, heck it would have been better for Sunset to at least be Twilight's student instead of that show boat Starlight Glimmer.

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I'm not going to make her an Alicorn, BUT...that doesn't mean she won't undergo some sort of ascension by the end of this saga. Or story arc. Not sure what I'm going to end up calling it, but I hope you get my drift. =)

Pinkie Pie was the first to speak. "You don't suppose someone from her dark past ambushed her last night, put her in a magical coma and is coming to kill us, do you?!"

:trixieshiftright:

Anyway, great story and I look forward to the sequel.

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XD Thanks. I wanted to reference your story in some way, shape or form.

Didn't this story used to have cover art?

Rarity in scrubs.
Rarity in a nurse costume.
Rarity in full NBC gear.
Rarity in medieval plague mask and robes.
And naturally, looking fabulous! :raritystarry:

Both of the Raritys looked at Sunset and said in unison "Is something the matter, darling?"

Sunset: Actually, considering my life, this is surprisingly mild...

Suddenly, music started playing. Sunset heard singing in the distance. Following the sound, she came across human Pinkie Pie on a wrecking ball.

The subtlety is a good indicator that this is a dream Pinkie.

Yay! - Sent by Fluttershy

:yay:

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