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This story is a sequel to A Place Among Her Kind

With her first E.U.P. squad formed and beyond expectations, Captain Fizzlepop Berrytwist now turns her attention to the wrongs she committed beyond Equestria. But as she offers to assist in Hippogriffia's reconstruction efforts, she finds that not everyone is convinced of her redemption.

Cover art by Doodle-Mark@DeviantArt.com

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 111 )

Yay! I liked the last one so much I was really hoping you'd do a sequel. Thanks!

The idea came to me just last night. Here's hoping it fleshes out into something incredible. Hope you enjoy!

Considering I've read plenty of "reformed villain" stories in the past, it's not hard for me to see where the story is going, even from the first chapter.
That said, I love the concept and I've loved your writing in the past, so I think you'll do good.

yay, an awesome new sequel :D

Smells good to me.

Looks like a great start to a good sequel! Here's to hoping things go well *imaginary glass clinking 🥂*

Sweet! Great to see a sequel! Looks like this is gonna be good, especially if the extended movie cast is going to get an opportunity to shine.

Yeup. I can smell where our dear Major is going... You're a wilily one Celestia.

May I ask what you're smelling?

I smell Sunbutt. A little early to tell whether our major is a sweet gooey centre or a rotten one, but definitely layers to that onion.

Everyone is being suspiciously fair...
Is there so,etching in the water where you’re from Mr Prower? You could bottle it because all this reasonableness is a pleasant surprise for these kinds of tales.

Well, that's kind of a bummer, but not surprising in the slightest. Of course Novo would want to be careful with her former enemy. Hopefully after she proves herself in this expedition, the Hippogriffs will be more willing to work with the Captain in the future. Or possibly even sooner...?


Wait, wait wait wait, hold up.

Fizzlepop Berrytwist was put in command of Rainbow Dash?

I am not sure I like this. It feels really wrong to me.

There's also the possibility that some of her subjects haven't forgiven Tempest for what she did. Her presence alone could be a distraction.

Not really. Allow me to explain.

As the captain of the Ponyville EUP, Fizzlepop has sworn fealty to Twilight and her friends, the Council of Friendship. When forming her squad (in the previous story) she asked Rainbow for her help with selecting and training pegasi by taking the role of an officer.

To Rainbow, this is very much a "side gig" as she is already a fully-fledged Wonderbolt.

Just because someone abuses your lessons, doesn’t mean they were wrong. I just means there’s more to learn.

Keep learning, Skystar.

I really wanted to portray Skystar's youth and inexperience here. Hope I succeeded.

Oh yes, she's an absolute naif here.

A very double-edged sword of a lesson indeed in this case. But you're not wrong, Skystar. Just because a few take advantage doesn't mean all will, but you do need to have a good sense of judgement sometimes.

Ooooo. I actually kinda like this as a little 'aside' chapter. This is going to be interesting...

... Thunderhead is the name of one of my hero OCs...


Teacheth me thine ways, O Great Milesprower06! How do you crank out such amazingly written chapters in so little time!?!?!? I must know!!!

With the strongest of inspiration, which comes to me less than once a year.

Hope you enjoyed this chapter.

Your work is on par with that of Justice3442 when it comes to the addiction factor. I feel like a druggie, staying up till midnight to get a little bit more...

That came out creepier than I intended...

Damn good fight scene! Ended too soon, much like vacations and weekends :rainbowwild:

That certainly was a nice little thrill you tossed in there. Also ouch, aetherium sounds hard to get, poor thing might be unstable for a while until they get more....unless they have a princessly stockpile they are free to pull from.

Funnily enough, I liked the short fight scene. Sometimes, things can be drawn out for the sake of it, but this was just two heavy hitters going “sod it, why on earth would I be holding back?”


And so it seems everyone is in the loop. Sucks about Fizzle's loss, but I have a feeling things are going to turn out alright for her, if not sooner rather than later.


Knew it. Knew things would turn out 'alright.'

Called it. The major had grain of irritant hidden in his shell, but he’s allowed it to grow into a shiny little pearl. Also, it was obvious, it it’s nice to have Celstia’s true motives brought into the open.

Now that was a twist I didn’t see coming. Makes some solid sense though. I love it.

Also I do hope that while the tale of the trip to Hippogriffia may be coming to an end, our dear Captain’s isn’t.

Awesome. The whole team definitely deserves all those honors, but especially Fizzle. What a huge turnaround to her personality and her situation. Everything for the better.
I'm so glad you decided to continue the original story, Miles. Kudos on a job very well done! :twilightsmile:

NOW the story us complete...
Well, needs this too

There was a story there, and now it has been TOLD. A very nice read!

Dang it Pinkie and author :rainbowlaugh:

Still, nice ending! It was a pleasure :twilightsmile:

If you are ever tempted to do more, I'm always down for Slice o' Life with Fizzlepop :raritywink:
I'd eat the whole damn fizzle-pie if you had one :P

I'm not saying I'm done, but I have no idea where to take the single idea I have so far.




Fizzlepop's got her horn back, her respect, is a freaking major...the only thing left...
Is to find luuuuuurve.

Amazing great work, love it.

Holy nuts.. This needs to be made into a set of episodes, or maybe a movie of its own!

Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it!

The many chapters make up for lack of size... this is acceptable.

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