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"Burninating the countryside... burninating the peasants... burninating all the peoples... and their thatched-roof COTTAGES! THATCHED-ROOF COTTAGES!! And the Trogdor comes in the NIIIIGHT!!!"

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Officially, the hippogriffs retreated from Mount Aris rather than stand and fight the Storm King. But not everygriff went quietly into the deep. Now as a liberated Seaquestria prepares to rejoin the world stage, Pinkie Pie is called to bring holiday cheer to the last living hippogriff who refused to retreat.

If only her true task was even that simple.


This story was written for Marina Stars as a (slightly overdue) part of Jinglemas 2020! For more information about Jinglemas, check out our group! Editing assistance by Moosetasm! Pinkie vector by InfiniteWarlock! Featured on FimFiction 31Dec.2020-1Jan2021! :heart:

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Thank you for this amazing story, and taking the time to write it. It turned out wonderfully!

Happy New Year darling!

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Happy new year to you as well! I do hate running late with things, but I at least aim to make the wait worthwhile. :raritywink:

The story is good, but this Pinkie doesn't talk like canon Pinkie. This Pinkie talks like Twilight Sparkle.

This was pretty good! I'm always a sucker for Mount Aris/Seaquestria lore, and I was not disappointed. The whole idea that some hippogriffs trace their lineage back to the founding of Equestria and a bunch of pegasi shacking up with some warrior eagles was really interesting.

That said, I wasn't totally swayed by the character voices shown here. Like 10627626 mentioned, Pinkie here is a lot wordier and cerebral than she is presented in the show. It gave me a sense of the author speaking for the characters instead of the characters speaking for themselves. I also am not totally sure I'm on board with the abrasive and curt characterization of Novo either. Prior to the attempted pearl theft in the movie, she wasn't really like that. I understand if she's still got some beef with ponies, but I also got a sense of that sentiment toward her own daughter and people here. That could just be me misinterpreting your intent, but it is worth mentioning.

Then again, this is a Jinglemas story. If your writing experience for that event is anything like mine, stories tend to be written in deadline crunches that turn the story into a bit of a rush job. That could totally be the cause of the voice issues. At any rate, this was still a nice read. You got some good prose there, my dude. Thanks for writing this!

It did end up feeling a bit rushed, but there's great stuff here, from the central conflict to the Antaeus exception to earth pony stamina to Novo's chromatophore trick. But really, Novo, you send her in there while refusing to explain the smallest scrap of context and expect her to just wave her hooves and resolve a conflict you couldn't in years? Dirty pool.

In any case, a nice read all around. Glad I finally got to it.

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