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milesprower06


Been writing fan fiction for most of my life. Brony since March 2011.

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This story is a sequel to Fizzlepop's Wish


As a new year starts around Equestria, Grubber is settling into his new life in Ponyville, wondering how he can best help out with Fizzlepop's routine around the castle, with some sound advice from the Princess of Friendship's assistant.

Cover art by InuHoshi-To-Darkpen@Deviantart.com.

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 18 )

I just hope it's not one of those click bait fictions... My suggestion is a template of an outline.

9162700
You are aware this is a established story arc series yea? That there are parts to the story that predate this (and hit featured as I remember right)

9162718
So that's what the blue link was for in the beginning at the description?

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Yep, many writers will link back to the previous story. In this ones case it links back many times, I think 3-4 previous stories. Just check the writers story link, you will in many cases see a whole story arc.

Well then, fourth story in the series. And a different POV character this time, it would seem. Great job on the continuity and worldbuilding (the thing about Appleoosa's budding tourism industry). The only minor gripe i found was the mention of a blast furnace ... that's not what you use to maintain armor and weapons, that's what you use to cook steel, I think you meant a forge.

As for where this story could go? Assuming you want to keep it Slice-of-Life it could simply be a more low-key story about Spike and Tempest showing grubber the ways of the Ponyville EUP while also showing the reader about the troupe's daily operations, perhaps with a bit of action here and there as they defend the town from various minor threats, with grubber becoming progressively more helpfull along the way.

A story and a series that I'd very much be happy to see contiued.

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Forge was on the tip of my tongue but it never came to me last night. Thanks.

Is there a good romance story about them that isn't just a one shot? I'm curious about it but I think the only one that interessted me or I even saw, was a one shot.

This feels good. I'm really liking this premise. I'll check out the previous one as well.

I always have trouble writing fluff as well. Share the secret if you figure it out?

Fluff, bro. I have no idea. I never actually aim for fluff. I just let my mind play out the scene. Picture the character(s), roleplay them in my head, and just write as the characters just take over while you watch and listen to them go about their day.

I think one can see my first fic I reluctantly wrote as just a perfect example of not wanting to write, which quickly turns into a thing all its own. To this day I leave it as it was written, unedited and raw.

*shrug*

Fluff just happens, I guess.


Anyways, sounds like Grubber has an actual goal beyond raiding the nearest fridge so good luck!

Glad to see this coming to fruition! Yeah, fluff might be rough, but I'm sure you can pull it off.

so the prologue comes after the first chapter ... i see ... well anyways, I found two little things in this chapter,

and the were all enchanted

the what? either this is missing a 'y' and it should be 'they were all enchanted' or there is a word missing here, either way, as is, it doesn't make much sense

hallowed-out

I do belive you mean 'hollowed-out', 'hallowed' means something else entirely, the golden oaks library may have been a nice place to live, but i kinda doubt it was a holy site (especially with equestria's notable lack of religion)

Dan

Is Fizzlepop a commissioned officer? Because she'd be entitled to a batman.

But does Fizzy not want Grubber to be her assistant because she's afraid he'd be in the way? Or is it something deeper, like she doesn't want to see him get hurt? What job would she have him do? Just sit around the castle all day where she knows he'd be safe? It might give her piece-of-mind, but it'd make Grubber feel useless, and I don't think she'd want that either.

Yeah ... the map dosn't really care too much if others have a different set of priorities ...

the culture shock you must be experiencing these last few weeks

'must have been experiencing'

This story is going places ... not sure where ... and not exactly fast either, but it is going somewhere ... looking forward to seeing where

I like this story showing the elaborate steps and timeline required for building a school.

Never thought I'd feel sorry for this little hedgehog, but I do hope they find a place for him.

Does Tempest have a canon mark? I don't think I've ever seen it.

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No, she doesn't.

Most artists have it as an ice cream sundae (from an earlier generation, I think), or fireworks of some kind, because of her displays in the movie.

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