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Good for a start, but have you considered getting a proof reader/editor to help with the dialogue and spot for errors?
7670126 what is exactly wrong with the dialogue?
Uuhh... wut
7670132 I don't mean it like that. Just grammar. That's what I meant to say
7670262 oh okay
deleting comments?
son
i is disappoint
7670660 just deleting trash useless comments oh and btw master hamster's critique was worse than useless.
7670669 Riiiight.
7670669 Newfriend, this is one of the worst ways to react to criticism. In one immature move, you've demonstrated that you can't handle anything but hollow praise. Truly regrettable, especially so considering the activity this site is built around.
7670876 what I can't handle is waste of time, piss poor criticism that won't help me improve at all and can barely be called criticism. But okay let's go over how shit it was. Too many tags(only one that was unnecessary), crap oc what exactly is crap about it? You never say, overused plot in otherwords you don't like displaced fics fair enough I don't care about that because I do like displaced fics and I wish there were more. Bad grammar note that this was unedited it's currently being edited so your criticism there was unneeded.
So what exactly is this a cross over with?
7671044 kid Icarus though it's more to stop admin from rejecting fics because I failed to tag it in.
7670900
"please praise my story to be good or go away"
"also no opinions allowed"
7671117 I never asked for praise I asked for proper criticism it's not my fault people lack the faculties to understand this simple request. It seems your thought process went something like this, "writer wants constructive criticism to improve. Brain crashes and reboots, writer must want praise and nothing else! I iz smart." I also never said opinions weren't allowed my beef was with idiots that down vote then they literally say they "down vote" and nothing else. that is not an opinion, that's a statement or they go I don't like displaced fics even though no one forced you to read it and were warned beforehand.
7671166 the first two things you quoted aren't separate, the don't follows on from the list. As in if you don't like the things that are in this list don't read cause you won't like it. If anything that was meant as a courtesy a and I feel dirty even saying the phrase "trigger warning". I don't intend to steal canon battles from the manesix. But it should be noted that as this is an alternate universe things have to change from canon. The dialogue you quoted isn't actually dialogue it's part of the song linked and it's there so people know where in the song it's supposed to be because of fimfiction annoying tos regarding song lyrics. But fine I'll delete it if that's truly the only issue with dialogue?
I would post my two critical cents here, but I believe my voice will be silenced if I do.
*shakes head* Yeah, I'll just leave this one be. I don't want a repeat of the whole Eder spiel.
7671198 go ahead speak your piece. Nothing of value was lost from those deleted repeats of the same question, vague and ultimately useless critique, or snarky comments about the description. So if you truly have something that can help improve what I have written feel free to say it. I am writing to improve and for myself.
7671218 "Nothing of value was lost from the deleted comments?"
Beg to differ, pal. But that's just me.
7671220 Indeed, mein friend. Good times.
7671214 well I got rid of the lyrics and I added a lot more to the trigger warning explaining in a clearer way what I meant. Hopefully this no longer causes confusion.
7671265
This wasn't confusion.
This was people calling you out on your foul.
Also:
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Way to belittle your audience.
gg bby
7671150
by actively deleting any negative opinions regarding your 'holy' story, you're literally just only allowing positive feedback about your story. hence why I commented on you only wanting praise for your story.
if you can't handle shitposters, then you are at fault here. not the people posting. you can easily ignore and/or ban a person instead of acting in an immature way and delete their comment even if it was filled up to the brim with 'shitposter-y' according to you.
someone needs a spine to publish stories in this site. and handle criticism
7671265 nice start on the story, showing little but yet drawing us in like fish to a fishing rod, also good song choice it Depicts what Celestia was doing wrong and how she was taught as a child that her race was better than all, but anyway I give this a thumbs up and I'll be sure to check out the rest of your stories.
Wut?
Ok...
Imma tracking to see what the hell is going on...There are so many questions.
My only complain so far is Jean's arrival last a bit too short...She/He didn't even made it pass 1 day. Not really enough to make much if any impact. Granted, there is that song but the only one affected is Celestia as of now...I hope she at least took it to heart and spread that to the entirety of Equestria.
7671383 I can't ban anyone, I can't mute people on this site and I can only delete so quite frankly your so called solution isn't a solution at all. And the block button doesn't do shit.
7671787 there were affects and there will be more when she is released.
7672289 You know you don't need a physical "ignore" button to ignore someone, right? You can just ignore them yourself.
Also, your story description is a disaster zone. Without clicking "Read More", it's nothing but trigger warnings and telling people not to read. It gets cutoff before even getting to anything story related. There's a reason people usually put that stuff after their story description, so people get an idea what the story is about before even clicking anything. Personally, the only reason I'm even here is because I knew at a glance exactly what kind of train wreck I would find in the comments, and I was not disappointed. That's really not the kind of attention you want. Fixing your description would go a long way towards avoiding that.
7672318 there changed around if I still get complaints going to ignore them
7672323 Am not going to lie I what to where this is going it look like it can be a good story.
7672289 You know what? I'm sticking your story in my Story Standards group. You've earned yourself an SS Review, mate.
... nevermind. You'd probably not heed such a thing.
7672801 you're presuming alot link it and I'll read it.
7672937 Submissions folder of my group is still closed, because it needs a thorough cleaning (as in, stories in it reviewed.) Your story is not in the submissions. Talk to me when submissions is emptied, and I'll see what I can do.
The part where she was singing seamed a bit rushed, but maybe that was on me. Going to have to re read this chapter, but for now I am traking this.
You have my attention[youtube=https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Yyfdcoocex8]
*Blink*
So...She can still influence the world in some manner while petrified?
Make sense, I suppose. Goddess of Light and all that "No one can escape from The Light" stuff.
So...Will "Pit" & "Dark Pit" makes any appearance, or is it just her?
Questions still remains though...Especially about the show's events. How much of a derailment this will make?
All said, I am eager to see how her becoming normal and regaining full power will affect the status quo.
Now, onward to the show's premiere.
7677635 yep she can, though it's to a limited degree.
I won't spoil about pit and pitoo, but I will say there will be derailment and Palutena will not be relegated to support like in the games and will have access to all the powers and abilities she has displayed in kid Icarus uprising and super smash Bros Wii u and the anime.
very good start, also nice job in giving Twilight the jeebies on Palutena's veracity
7677827
"relegated to support" What does this means, exactly? I ran this through google translate and came up with a mess. English isn't my native language.
That she is not as worshipped, or that she will deal with events in a more "up close and personal" manner? If it is more up-close, than that would make your uses of the powers more revelant, I suppose.
7677895 oh apologies, it means that she was left to a mere helping role rather than on the front lines of combat (besides a few instances where she fought pit in the game.) Off screen support, helping pit fly, Using the palutena glam blaster on hewdraw, navigation, information gathering, providing power and recovery items etc.
7677905 Oh...So she will crush her enemies, see them driven before her, and hear the lamentations of their soon-to-be-eliminated supporters in this story instead of a supporting role like in the game...Ok, gotcha.
Thanks for clarifying..
I would've add this at the end if I was in her place
7677938 your welcome :3
7677970 that wasn't a good song lol
Trolling hath begun
Palutena is a great troll
7677993 I don't like it either, that was just what google give me when I typed in
If you want to know where it's from a show called how to be an adventurer
7678033 when isn't she?