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Not bad for a first try
You should put in the title what is this story is crossover with, is displaced, but I don't know the source, not everybody watched all animes.
You might wanna put something in your story description on if or if not you'll cross-over with other Displaced. And of course, depending on your choice, you'll be attracting different readers either those who love cross-overs or hate it.
This look promising. I'll keep track for this story.
Woot ho
Not bad, who's utility belt? Also, what is the Darksaber from? And consider this tracked.
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I knew I was forgetting something. Thank you.
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Your welcome. By clone wars do you refer to the star wars animated series? If not then I have no clue and will apparently need to look it up.
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Yes it is from Star Wars the Clone Wars. Though that will most likely be the only element from that franchise.
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Pics are up.
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Nice pics, I notice that you switched from Batman to Batman Beyond, any particular reason for the shift?
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I thought about it and the beyond belt doesn't hold as many gadgets as its predecessors since there are others built into other parts of the suit itself and since its just going to be the belt in this story instead of the whole suit i can limit the number of gadgets that are used so I'm not tempted to just use it as a plot device to get out of any situation. That would just be too easy.
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Fair enough.
More :3 ?
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Yes there will be, almost done with the next chapter.
......Need.....MOOOOAAAAARRRRR
Great chapter by the way, keep up the good work.
roles, Earth's
Also capitalize the "T" in Tartarus.
The one thing I hate about displace stories They spend more time with crossovers and interacting with other characters from different stories then they do with their own story building . I have high hopes that you find a good balance
capsules will come in handy. pocket houses and everything to modes of transport? yes please...
I believe we are close to the crossroads of evil and good. Let us see which path will be taken.
liking it so far, few spelling issues here and there tho. looking forward to more
Now to see if this is regular Celestia or the bitchy irrational xenophobe Celestia
For a 1st fic this is very well written and I look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
whan can you upload more chapters?
I would ask you to slow down the story and add some descriptions, the whole shebang about Showing, not Telling, and yada yada... But at this point I really don't need to be shown the first two episodes of MLP again. So thank you for being very brief in this particular instance.
Well below absolute zero.
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The pictures are not necessary. They detract from the flow of the story. Hyperlink them if you want, but don't put them inline in the story.
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Kinda have to agree. Would rather have a few pics of Hiei using his techniques. The Capsules could have been hyperlinked.
you know, MC could probably bring out th captains potential somewhat. loved this chapter btw-looking forward to the next. 'you are the creator of your own enemies' an important phrase
peace
Other than the spelling errors, good chapter.
MMMOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
xenophobic twilight -> xenophobic celestia, its 51% true in fan fictions, but is it warranted or unnecessary xenophobia. I mean demons besides the main character probably wrecked the equestria the main character is in so that's why they're fearful of him.
The other 49% is tyrantelstia fics
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Time will tell.
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
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Its almost done actually. I've been piecing it together in my spare time.
Very interesting.
1.Are you doing a heram or just one and no more?
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Haven't completely decided yet. I figure I'll see how well the story flows before deciding.
If it's ok with you can hiei have the sharingon?
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I was trying not to put it in since a lot of stories do but I think I have a way to include something similar.
Did anyone esle get a update but there is no new chapter
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Yeah sorry about that I hit the wrong button when I got on yesterday. It only needs a few more paragraphs though so it should be done either tonight or sometime tomorrow.
A +
MMMMOOOOOOORRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a very good story though I have to ask what exactly is the pair for it?
Para pa pa paa
I'm loving this.
Bow chicka wow wow!
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Well, this is going to get all kinds of awkward.