you know, MC could probably bring out th captains potential somewhat. loved this chapter btw-looking forward to the next. 'you are the creator of your own enemies' an important phrase
xenophobic twilight -> xenophobic celestia, its 51% true in fan fictions, but is it warranted or unnecessary xenophobia. I mean demons besides the main character probably wrecked the equestria the main character is in so that's why they're fearful of him.
9919428 Yeah sorry about that I hit the wrong button when I got on yesterday. It only needs a few more paragraphs though so it should be done either tonight or sometime tomorrow.
Before I could however Rainbow Dash and Applejack burst through the door and before careening around the room breaking various things throughout the Hut. They were followed by the others a moment later as Applejack jump onto Zacharias ear and began wrestling it. Rainbow Dash crashed into the cauldron in the middle of the room ending her reign of destruction.They then began accusing Zacora of cursing them and stealing Apple Bloom which she took as a grave insult. I decided to intervene right before it came to blows.
I'm pretty sure you meant and misspelled Zecora here.
The pictures are not necessary. They detract from the flow of the story. Hyperlink them if you want, but don't put them inline in the story.
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Kinda have to agree. Would rather have a few pics of Hiei using his techniques. The Capsules could have been hyperlinked.
you know, MC could probably bring out th captains potential somewhat. loved this chapter btw-looking forward to the next. 'you are the creator of your own enemies' an important phrase
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Other than the spelling errors, good chapter.
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xenophobic twilight -> xenophobic celestia, its 51% true in fan fictions, but is it warranted or unnecessary xenophobia. I mean demons besides the main character probably wrecked the equestria the main character is in so that's why they're fearful of him.
The other 49% is tyrantelstia fics
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Time will tell.
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
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Its almost done actually. I've been piecing it together in my spare time.
Very interesting.
1.Are you doing a heram or just one and no more?
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Haven't completely decided yet. I figure I'll see how well the story flows before deciding.
If it's ok with you can hiei have the sharingon?
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I was trying not to put it in since a lot of stories do but I think I have a way to include something similar.
Did anyone esle get a update but there is no new chapter
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Yeah sorry about that I hit the wrong button when I got on yesterday. It only needs a few more paragraphs though so it should be done either tonight or sometime tomorrow.
I'm pretty sure you meant and misspelled Zecora here.