The one thing I hate about displace stories They spend more time with crossovers and interacting with other characters from different stories then they do with their own story building . I have high hopes that you find a good balance
I would ask you to slow down the story and add some descriptions, the whole shebang about Showing, not Telling, and yada yada... But at this point I really don't need to be shown the first two episodes of MLP again. So thank you for being very brief in this particular instance.
......Need.....MOOOOAAAAARRRRR
Great chapter by the way, keep up the good work.
roles, Earth's
Also capitalize the "T" in Tartarus.
The one thing I hate about displace stories They spend more time with crossovers and interacting with other characters from different stories then they do with their own story building . I have high hopes that you find a good balance
I would ask you to slow down the story and add some descriptions, the whole shebang about Showing, not Telling, and yada yada... But at this point I really don't need to be shown the first two episodes of MLP again. So thank you for being very brief in this particular instance.