Spike loves Rarity.
He just has a hard time saying it.
Written for The Writeoff Association's "Things Left Unsaid" contest.
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FEEEEEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLLLS!!!!!!
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Friend Zoned!
6808111 Even in death!
Ouch.
Well...that took a turn, didn't it?
Well it certainly lives up to the sad tag. None of spikes friends managed to get through to him, at least I assume they tried to get him to realize rarity just wasn't into him.
I'm not sure if rarity just thought it was better to let spike give up on his own but gee it seems a little unbalanced of her to use him as a shoulder to cry on but not even do him the kindness of outright stating she didn't and likely wouldn't ever like spike that way.
Which I guess fits the narrative. As much as I found the writing good I'm left feeling like its a start and a middle with no end. Spike doesn't seem to have changed at all. I'm really not sure how to rate this one.
Spike the eternally rebuked swain…
How poignantly said. Like some Byronic sort of poetry. Short...but oh so powerful.
Well done.
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I kinda like that, though. Some people don't ever change as time goes on, and they pine after that one girl/guy.
Except, y'know, with hooves on scaled lips.
I kinda feel this should have a comedy tag, but I was previously spoiled by the above clip, so there's that.
Inevitable, if he ages sufficiently slowly, and she never Ascends.
Also something Rarity may fear, because she may have done the research. Some fans miss the fact that Rarity is extremely intelligent -- she's just not a scholar like Twilight Sparkle. She's an artist, which is a different psychological orientation.
In the SWSV Rarity eventually decides "To hell with developmental stages," and goes by the letter of Equestrian law regarding age-of-consent and Equestrian culture regarding perceived-old-enough, for exactly this fear. And then, soon afterward, she Ascends, making the point entirely moot.
And one day, their ki-rin fly over Canterlot.
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I think the point was that Spike's lifespan was so long that he remained developmentally a child while Rarity aged and died.
Beautifully sad.
You've won my heart over with this one. Ugh, I have to stop reading sad stories right after super sad stories right after listening to super sad songs... 
Oh well, it doesn't matter too much (I guess 
.)
It hurts Tricky it hurts
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I know.
I do occasionally write uplifting things, I swear!
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I know the feel. I usually write as an emotional release, so a lot of my stuff has a darker/sad undertone to it. Occasionally I write happy things.
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Not the intended point, no.
Reactions to the draft of this story which appeared in the Writeoff were amazing in how O.J. verdict disparate they were. Most readers had strong opinions, and either felt Rarity was completely at fault, or Spike was completely at fault.
I think they're both responsible for the tragedy, but I have significantly less sympathy for Rarity because of the way she used Spike in the story, despite knowing how he felt about her. It's kind of creepy how she does that on the show (use Spike's crush to her advantage rather than ever shutting him down because he's a child).
Like, imagine if the genders were reversed: if Spike were a little girl named Frill and Rarity were an adult man named Curio (those are my names rather than Trotsworth's). An older man getting a little girl to do things for him because she has a crush on him, and giving her kisses as rewards, seems pretty sketchy to me.
Let alone using his ass as a pincushion, which happened in the first season.
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The simplest explanation is that she returns his feelings, but only acts on them as he grows older. Spike is not the "baby" Twilight perceives him as, nor is Rarity as romantically experienced and sophisticated as she pretends to be. There is ample evidence of both these points in canon.
We might find this creepy in our society today. We would not have done so a hundred or two hundred years ago, and I can make no predictions about whether we will still find it creepy a hundred or two hundred years in the future. Considering that Equestria is not even a human society, I have no idea what they would think of it.
I do notice that in canon Twilight originally disapproved of Spike's crush, but merely to the point of warning him. She did nothing to stop him acting on it, nor is there any reason to believe that she holds it against Rarity.
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... I just know better than to say anything good about it that can be traced back to me. 
Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying there's anything bad about
She did what?!
And that's how
PavlovianSpikeovian conditioning was discovered in Equestria.Interesting premise
Short and intense. Well done.